Date: May 27, 2008 06:22 pm Title: Do you want fries with that?
Well worth the wait, darlin'. Just enough honesty between them without it being too "heavy", and interspersed with the Dwangela situation and their usual banter. Very, very nice.
Author's Response: Awww. Thank you EH. That's always my intention when I write them. Sure they have to talk about stuff - but not to the point where it seems overly sappy. I'm so glad you thought I succeeded. :)
Date: May 27, 2008 11:05 am Title: Do you want fries with that?
Aww. That's so sweet and not angst-filled at all! YAY! (Do you hear me show?!)
And I'm with Pam, Dwight and Angela is sweet.
Author's Response:
You know what else is sweet? YOU. :)
Thanks Miss Belsum. I greatly appreciate it.
10 [Report This]Date: May 27, 2008 05:59 am Title: Do you want fries with that?
I love this fic soooo much. The Jim and Pam are just right, both the serious stuff and the witty back and forth. The comic relief of Dwight and Angela is inspired, and I really like the suggestive ending. I'm so glad this story has bossed you around so well, and look forward to the epilogue.
Author's Response:
I'm happy to know you love it sooooooooo much. Because you're going to have to read the next installment before I post and I wouldn't want you to have to read something you hate. :)
Seriously. This review was a bright spot in my sucktacular day so thank you.
9 [Report This]Date: May 26, 2008 08:28 pm Title: Do you want fries with that?
i recently watched "the convention" and i thought about this very fic. and i had hoped you might update soon! i love this fic so much because it's fun, but feels so true and real, more importantly. i just love this... can't wait for more.
Author's Response:
Thanks EL! Well, if loving this fic is wrong I don't want you to be right.
Or something.
Hopefully the next installment will arrive sooner rather than later.
9 [Report This]Date: May 26, 2008 09:35 am Title: Do you want fries with that?
Yay! I wondered when we were going to get an update. Can't believe I got my hotel sex! :) Well you got your hotel....pre-sex. You'll have to see what the next chapter actually has in store. Go ahead - laugh. This story really is beating me up. It's fighting me every step of the way. I'm determined to win though. :)
And you are so funny - I have this image of a typewriter with a whip now - sorry!
Author's Response:
Date: May 26, 2008 08:40 am Title: Do you want fries with that?
This story was cute. I especially liked the Michael banter. Cosby stills and Nash, very funny!
Author's Response: Michael is the most fun to write. I'm so glad you liked it!!
Date: May 26, 2008 07:37 am Title: Do you want fries with that?
I can't believe I haven't read this before, and it's just awesome. I now understand why you asked me a question about how to get Dwight in a hotel corridor. You should have told me it was for some Jim/Pam kissing! I would have put on my thinking cap with all its power. ;) Seriously, I'm sorry this story is fighting you, but you're writing exactly what I wanted to see in season 3 so carry on!
One tiny thing (and I know I'm forever annoying with the grammar patrol!): It should be make do, not make due in this sentence: "I guess we'll have to make due."
Author's Response:
Thank you as always Grammar Patrol!!! My tenses were a car wreck. Poor colette. She read it when it was a God awful mess.
LOL! I thought I'd told you what I was working on. We might have been in the middle of discussing some sort of dire emergency at the same time. ;) So glad you liked it in any event.
Date: May 25, 2008 08:53 pm Title: Do you want fries with that?
Oh, I'm glad you updated! This is so how I wanted this episode to go. Silly Jim and Pam.
Great writing :D.
Author's Response:
Thank you Kestrel. I'm so sorry I'm such a slacker.
Silly indeed. :)
Date: April 24, 2008 07:55 am Title: Can I tell you what's messed up about James Bond?
Australia! Oh I'm so glad you brought that up. It's one of the loose threads in the show and it rankles me whenever I think of it. Love the do-over in the middle of the bar. You've got a great sense of the tension and excitement and nervousness and guilt and fear and relief and every other mixed emotion that these two are swimming in!
Author's Response: Things get more awkward - then less :) in the next chapter. Nothing is simple and it ain't all pretty but I hope you enjoy the way I tie up this package in the end.
Date: April 24, 2008 07:10 am Title: You ain’t gonna need any more advice.
Ooh yay! I finally get a chance to get caught up and find there's at least one more chapter!
I really love the strange friendship that Jim, whether he likes it or not, actually has with Michael. You did a splendid job of showing that and weaving in the events of the episode.
Author's Response:
I'm so glad you enjoyed that conversation. I had a lot of fun writing it. I am working on the last chapter as we speak and I can't wait to finish and post. Stay tuned. :)
Date: April 21, 2008 01:38 pm Title: The distance is nothing; it is only the first step that is difficult
I love that they are so sweet and real with each other. Hope you update soon!
Author's Response: I am trying!! Jim and Pam are just giving me fits as I'm tying up loose ends. I expect to post the last chapter soon though so please stay tuned! Thanks so much for the review!
Date: April 09, 2008 10:58 am Title: You ain’t gonna need any more advice.
I am so glad that you decided to make this a longer story - It's happy happy time when you next update. So far though I really loved the nerves they are showing, it sounds just like them.
Author's Response:
You are so sweet. Thanks so much for the review. I am busy tweaking the next chapter so stay tuned!!
Date: April 08, 2008 07:34 am Title: Can I tell you what's messed up about James Bond?
So happy to see an update and that we're getting more! I loved the hyperbole conversation and the little details like Pam spilling her drink on the bar just make this so real and sweet.
Author's Response: Thanks so much Sweetpea. Poor Pam. She's had a rough day. But I think she's going to learn to relax soon. :) Stay tuned...
9 [Report This]Date: April 08, 2008 07:10 am Title: Can I tell you what's messed up about James Bond?
Love this. Keep going.
Author's Response: So glad. Ok. I will. :)
Date: April 08, 2008 06:25 am Title: Can I tell you what's messed up about James Bond?
Yay you updated!
I love this chapter. You've done a great job of creating what would be a very awkward, yet very sincere first meeting between the two of them following Casino Night. Nice work!
Can't wait for more!!
Author's Response:
YAY! You reviewed!! Thanks so much. That's exactly what I was going for.
More soon!
Date: April 08, 2008 05:13 am Title: Can I tell you what's messed up about James Bond?
This is 24K gold: If you could call that excuse for a ring Roy had given her jewelry. Jim thought with a smug smile. I would have...
Whoa. Easy there. Maybe you should try talking to her first.
And I love that they're not all smooth and practiced, just like I would expect them to be when their separation due to embarrassment is interrupted. (Yay, another chapter!!!)
Author's Response:
They're both wrecks at this point. Jim's afraid to really believe it's happening and Pam's feeling guilty and like a bumbling idiot.
They figure it out next chapter. :)
Date: April 08, 2008 04:53 am Title: Can I tell you what's messed up about James Bond?
Another chapter...sweeeet. Any chance 4 chapters could morph into, say...18? Loved the hyberbole/oxymoron banter - they're even witty when being (deliciously) awkward. This feels all kinds of real and giddily awkward and yes, very romantic and that there is the winning trifecta, my dear. Now, what was that you were saying about 'french kisses'?
Author's Response:
Thanks m'dear. I would have given you a sneak peek - but it was begging to be posted. I'm not going to promise 18....but we could end up being 5 total before this thing finally finishes. I was all - 2 chapters and done and the story's all - you're finished when I say you're finished!!!!
I wanted to have her run across the lobby into Jim's waiting arms but that is not how I imagined it happening. I was thinking hug during The Merger with better results. So...that's what I wrote.
*spoiler* There is much talk of various French things next chapter. And there might be no talk at all in some parts.
Wait and see. :)
Date: April 07, 2008 09:22 pm Title: Can I tell you what's messed up about James Bond?
Oh, I love that it's awkward, but they are both so willing to try. Great job!
Author's Response: I am sure it would have been awkward - but I think it's getting better as time passes. I think they'll be back on track soon. ;) Thanks so much for the review.
Date: April 07, 2008 09:03 pm Title: Can I tell you what's messed up about James Bond?
oooooooo i can't wait to see what jim has up his sleeve now!
i love this! just love it! glad to see at least one of them isn't cracking under the pressure. poor pam. go jim!
and yeah for barney!
Author's Response: Ahh yes. What Jim has planned won't be candlelight and violins - but I think it's pretty romantic just the same. And Pam will be less nervous over time. She didn't have Michael to distract her in the two hours she drove there. :)
Date: April 06, 2008 06:50 am Title: You ain’t gonna need any more advice.
I'm loving this. The dialogue is perfect, but you always do such a great job writing these characters. I'm glad we're getting another chapter out of you too! Looking forward to what happens next. Pam didn't drive two hours to Philly just to chat up the boy, I'm sure. :)
Author's Response: Thanks EH. I really appreciate that. You are right - Pam didn't drive two hours just to chat him up...but that's all they're doing right now. The final chapter maybe there'll be less talk...more...action. :) Stay tuned.
10 [Report This]Date: April 05, 2008 03:32 pm Title: You ain’t gonna need any more advice.
You go long enough between stories these days that in between them I forgot a little bit how great you're writing is, so each time I get to read something new there is a certain rediscovery. I have loved this story from the time it was just an idea, and I continue to love it. I agree with those who say bring on ch. 3.
Also, I'm pleased to see in the reviews that no one has spoken to defend that miserable song.
Author's Response:
That is incredibly sweet of you to say. I'm glad you are still loving the story. I'm quite fond of it myself. Chapter 3 is coming together.
LOL! I was just thinking Cosby/Crosby and how to get a reference to Karen in there somehow. I did not know how horrific that song apparentlywas/is.
Thanks for the heads up. :) LOL!
Date: April 05, 2008 05:50 am Title: You ain’t gonna need any more advice.
I love Jim and Michael so much and you did a great job with them! But you know we're all looking forward to what's coming next, so quit stalling! </Jim>
Author's Response: Thank you Sweetpea - I'm so glad you thought so. I'm not stalling at all. :) Hope to have the finale ready soon!
Date: April 05, 2008 03:39 am Title: You ain’t gonna need any more advice.
OMG!!! i should slap you for leaving us hanging like this!!!! but iforgive you if only because of this little gem:
"
Jim's eyebrows rose at that little tidbit. Great. Now he'd never be able to look Audrey in the eye again without wondering what kind of fetish could possibly freak Packer out."
hahahahahaaaaaaaaaaaa! what WOULD freak packer out????
UPDATE SOON!!!!
Author's Response:
Ouch. So glad I gave you something to forgive me then. ;)
I DO NOT want to know what could possibly freak Packer out.
Date: April 04, 2008 11:15 pm Title: You ain’t gonna need any more advice.
Such a tease!! I can't wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response: I know. I'm sorry! Soon I hope!
Date: April 04, 2008 08:26 pm Title: You ain’t gonna need any more advice.
Sing it with me: bee-u-ti-ful Mount Airy Lodge...
Yep, when I was a kid, like Michael, I was convinced that truly grown-up romance demanded covorting in a champagne glass shaped bubble bath. (How did they get up there? A ladder?) Loving this...but you already knew that ;-)
Author's Response:
Have a fine winter time in the Poconos....lol!! So ridiculous though I find it hilarious that they still exist. Thank you for all your help - wine induced or no. ;)