10 [Report This]Date: March 31, 2008 09:09 pm Title: Memory's a wonderful thing if you don't have to deal with the past
I'm loving the train wreck! Both of them are still similar to the show, but they are also both more assertive. I love the little bits of angry Jim, sometimes it just seems like he takes so much junk from everyone and puts himself through hell... and doesn't bother to get pissed off about it!
Author's Response: yesss - great. i think they're assertive, but that's only come with time (and of course w/inebriation. this night takes place in 2011, after two years of being together. they know how to hurt each other now. i'm glad angry jim works for you.
Date: March 31, 2008 08:59 pm Title: Memory's a wonderful thing if you don't have to deal with the past
You've drawn me and I can't look away...
Author's Response: good! that was my evil plan.
Date: March 31, 2008 08:35 pm Title: Memory's a wonderful thing if you don't have to deal with the past
what an intense chapter! I like for the most part that they are trying to be a bit more honest, they still have a lot they need to talk about. I'm loving this story so far, they have such passion for each other, and yet they are frightened and enflamed by it. Can't wait to see what happens next. Glad to see some backstory as well!
Author's Response: intense is right! <i>they have such passion for each other, and yet they are frightened and enflamed by it.</i> right on, that's exactly it!
Date: March 31, 2008 08:31 pm Title: not you or me but just this little space in between
Hello, just wanted to add that I'm really enjoying this story so far. I love Before Sunrise/Before Sunset and having that tone set for this story makes it a lovely read. Looking forward to the next chapter!
Author's Response: glad you like it! using the before sunrise/sunset framework entirely helped shape this fic. thanks for the feedback.
Date: March 31, 2008 07:58 pm Title: not you or me but just this little space in between
oh, EL, you're breaking my heart. In a good way though. See, I'm a sucker for the angst. I can't help it.
It makes me sad that Jim would cheat like this on anyone, but you really bring it across that he's conflicted and still feeling this pull towards Pam that he can't resist. I can't wait to read more.
Author's Response: i know, i'm a sucker for angst too - although it's different to write it. when i'm writing angst, i'm thinking, yeah! do that! that's so painful! craaaaazy, i know. i'm glad it works for you. i know it seems unlike jim to cheat, but the way i framed this, for both of them, is that they have done this before. last time, it was she that was coupled, but he still kissed and her she still accepted. this certainly goes farther in this story, but... anyway stay tuned. last chapter is being posted soon.
Date: March 31, 2008 07:49 pm Title: Memory's a wonderful thing if you don't have to deal with the past
great job...can't wait for more!!!
Author's Response: thank you... it's already written, i just need to post it. keep your eyes out for the last chapter.
Date: March 31, 2008 07:01 pm Title: not you or me but just this little space in between
Yay! Glad to see this posted. I've pretty much already reviewed this (LOL) but I just wanted to say again that this is a fantastic piece and I'm looking forward to reading it again.
Author's Response: how sweet. well i'm glad you're enjoying it... even though... uh i'm pretty sure you know the ending! still thanks for weighing in.
8 [Report This]Date: March 30, 2008 05:04 pm Title: not you or me but just this little space in between
I haven't seen the movie(s), so this premise is new to me. Although I'm feeling kinda sad and anxious at the thought of our favorite couple having split for some reason, I'm trusting you, EL, because I enjoy your work. Your stories always have an interesting edge that resonates with me. Interested to see where this is headed.
Author's Response: thank you so much! i always try to do something people haven't done... so i'm glad you like it. keep your eyes out! i'll be posting the last installment soon.
Date: March 30, 2008 03:03 pm Title: not you or me but just this little space in between
Can I just say ditto to everything Colette said? I put her in charge of the words today. Just beautifully simple and powerful writing and I'll be watching for more.
Author's Response: thanks for your feedback! i'm so happy that you enjoyed. and i pretty much always want to put colette in charge of words... :)
Date: March 30, 2008 02:20 pm Title: not you or me but just this little space in between
Always a treat to find something new by you, Emily. I'm intrigued - who's this Lucien (and thank god that's over, lol)? Why did Pam/Jim split, yet stay in touch - clearly still connected? Looking forward to finding out. You've built a vivid sense of initial nerves/awkwardness, with an undercurrent of wistful, unresolved feeling just below the surface. I love the description of Jim's presence as a 'luxury'. And this is very smart: Jim is such a fish-out-of-water in NYC (now Pam's world as an artist) and then you have them kiss while they're quite literally inside a piece of art about stripping away layers, Jim straining to understand it. (Oh and I loved those two films also - good place to lift a concept!) More soon, please ;-)
Author's Response: thanks Colette! always a treat to see your feedback. lucien gets explained a touch more in this next chapter that i just posted - but at the end, if you want more info, i'll be sure to inform. there's tons i didn't add to the story but considered in my head :) ah all will be revealed re: jim and pam. wow - thanks for your feedback! how descriptive. i just love this idea so f---ing much (pardon my french): galavanting around nyc in the end of summer, trying to maneuver scary things like feelings! i tried to create something ethereal and i think you were picking up on it. i'm excited to see what you think of the rest.
Date: March 30, 2008 01:48 pm Title: not you or me but just this little space in between
What.... an awesome start! Good job, and I swear I'm not just saying that because of my own personal irrational attachment to Before Sunset.
I'm excited for the next chapter!
Author's Response: oh man how great is before sunrise/before sunset. i know some people consider them whiny bourgeois movies, but i think there is such a real quality about them. after seeing them i was addicted to the idea of giving pam and jim the same treatment. thanks for your feedback.
Date: March 30, 2008 01:41 pm Title: not you or me but just this little space in between
My interest is definetly peeked. I love that even when they're not together, Jim is worried about her. Curious to see the next part.
Author's Response: woo hoo! peeking interest was my goal. there's more - stay tuned!
Date: March 30, 2008 01:37 pm Title: not you or me but just this little space in between
okay so i am a tad confused and you may have explained this at the beginning, but did they break up and this is years down the road or what?? ready for more!!
Author's Response: sorry for the confusion! i wrote this in one chunk but i'm posting it in chapters - might contribute to the confusion. this evening is the first time they've seen each other in about two years.
Date: March 30, 2008 12:29 pm Title: not you or me but just this little space in between
I like this premise! Are you going to explain why they broke up in the next chapter? Update soon!
Author's Response: all will be explained... i'm glad you like it! more to come.
Date: March 30, 2008 12:27 pm Title: not you or me but just this little space in between
Ooooo, I like this. It's a great concept to have them meet after some time apart. I also like your portrayal of Fancy New Beesly.
Looking forward to more!
Author's Response: thank you! i nurtured this sucker for awhile - and to be honest it was b/c i was a little nervous. this is kind of ugly, you know? i hope you stay with it. i like my fancy new beesly too. i guess i'm alleging that as fancy as she is now, she will get fancier with time. thanks for the feedback.