Date: February 01, 2021 10:11 pm Title: But then the morning comes, and we turn back into pumpkins, right?
*insert angst ridden moan here*
Please, please, please an epilogue! I mean, yeah... I can use my imagination and give this story it’s own ending, but... Please, oh, please, help a girl with a huge imagination out, won’t you?! My mind can’t help but run in 20 gazillion different directions!
Great writing! I could absolutely see it all playing out on the big screen! 😉
1 [Report This]Date: December 13, 2020 11:31 pm Title: But then the morning comes, and we turn back into pumpkins, right?
I have no words for this. None. Absolutely zero. I'm really trying here. This is just an emotional roller coaster, and I'm still trying to catch my breath now that we're at the end of it.
10 [Report This]Date: February 25, 2010 10:00 am Title: not you or me but just this little space in between
OMG! I just found this and it is sooooo good. So unconventional and perfect! Please make a sequel... please, please, please :(
10 [Report This]Date: October 20, 2008 06:09 pm Title: But then the morning comes, and we turn back into pumpkins, right?
SEQUELLLLL!!!
por favor
Author's Response: i don't think i've been asked in spanish before :) well, i hate to say it, but i'm not sure there's a sequel in this fic's future... but one never really knows.
Date: April 07, 2008 01:09 am Title: But then the morning comes, and we turn back into pumpkins, right?
I loved this story! I just read the whole thing. You cant stop now! I'm hooked! I wanna know what happens!!!
Date: April 07, 2008 01:09 am Title: But then the morning comes, and we turn back into pumpkins, right?
I loved this story! I just read the whole thing. You cant stop now! I'm hooked! I wanna know what happens!!!
Date: April 07, 2008 01:09 am Title: But then the morning comes, and we turn back into pumpkins, right?
I loved this story! I just read the whole thing. You cant stop now! I'm hooked! I wanna know what happens!!!
Author's Response: thank you! well i'd hate to deny you your fix, but i'm not sure what's in the cards. we'll see! thanks for writing.
10 [Report This]Date: April 06, 2008 06:30 pm Title: But then the morning comes, and we turn back into pumpkins, right?
I really enjoyed this story, it had a unique look on the couple and their draw to one another, no matter the time changes. I liked the cinematic grabs throughout the story and the parting shot was well done. I can see leaving it as is, or adding an epilogue, though I'm not sure it's needed. I really don't love the idea a sequel, as this has more the feeling of Sunset than Sunrise. But, just my opinion of course. Beautiful story, either way.
Author's Response:
"I really don't love the idea a sequel, as this has more the feeling of Sunset than Sunrise."
that is so great! i agree with that wholeheartedly. thank you for your lovely feedback. this story is sort of AU in some ways, and i'm really drawn to that kind of story, because i think their love and energy can exist anywhere. i'm so pleased that you liked it.
Date: April 05, 2008 04:48 am Title: But then the morning comes, and we turn back into pumpkins, right?
This does feel cinematic, in the way you 'cut' from the last scene in chptr 2, to them awake and suddenly - almost abruptly - parting. Really makes the reader feel Pam's sense of 'wait!' Also, the image of them standing there frozen, with Jim's 'maybe' hanging between them is really powerful. And I like how you then cut again to NYC waking up - like in the Linklater films, the city itself is almost the third character here. (And btw, love Pam seeing Jim 1/2 dressed and stubbly as a little present. I bet he was ;-)
Epilogue? I don't know - I'd love it, of course, but I'd also understand if you wanted to leave it ambiguous. I know when I'm writing, a story kind of has an arc in my head (not only re: 'plot', but the actual writing too, if that makes sense.) So, that's a convoluted way of saying I think you should write an epilogue only if you think your story wants one. (How very unhelpful am I, lol?)
Author's Response:
i wanted to split the chapters up like i did b/c that last section happens in rapid succession, as opposed to the other sections which are slower, more tempered. i think when you're spending your last moments with someone, they happen so fast and are gone before you know it. so. i'm glad you felt that!
nyc was definitely another character. i've lived in nj for most of my life, but i've worked there for years and i have a bit of a love affair w/the city. to me it's such an invigorating place, full of life, and i think it moves the story along. and i just loooove the idea of little ms. pammy beesly living in the south bronx w/the other artists and bohemians, meeting with jim in the painfully hip hotel in union sq...
colette, you are always super helpful. maybe i can con you into doing some light beta work for me in the future?? i really didn't think about an epilogue, but maybe something might happen...
Date: April 04, 2008 10:25 am Title: But then the morning comes, and we turn back into pumpkins, right?
I have to admit I have mixed feelings about how you've left this. On the one hand, I respect your creative decision not to tie things up into a neat little package, but on the other hand I feel like 'huh? that's it?' I don't know the film you are referencing, but you don't have to follow formula -- that's the beauty of fanfic, you are sort of messing with the rules and rewriting canon.
I guess the reason I want to see more of this is that it showed so much promise with the mess Pam & Jim have made of things, but yet still in love with each other and the idea that Pam would need to rebuild Jim's trust in her. I think you have some intriguing possibilities that deserve to be followed up.
BTW -- I went back and read a bunch of your other fic -- what a nice discovery!
Author's Response:
thanks for your feedback. you're right, i absolutely don't have to follow a formula, but i love it. i usually tie things up, but i want to start taking my writing (and maybe fic too?) in some crazy directions. as tim canterbury says in the office uk christmas special, life isn't about endings, it's a series of moments. this is what i believe. which doesn't mean that i'll start writing half a fic! i just like doing some different things.
i agree - there is a lot of stuff to delve into. i didn't really think about concluding anything, at least anything formal. in fact i don't even know what happens to them. i've started to think about it a little, but i need to do a lot more thinking.
thank you! glad you liked the archive :) i have some stuff in the pipeline, so look out for it.
9 [Report This]Date: April 04, 2008 07:28 am Title: But then the morning comes, and we turn back into pumpkins, right?
I need more! Visualize my sending you a virtual box of really expensive truffles and a rather large icy bottle of champagne. Oh...and some strawberries, too! Does that work?
Author's Response: nanreg, i can't be bought! well, i guess everyone has a price ;) i know you need more. thanks for following along the story! i may write something, i may not. still, i have more fic coming so look out for that.
8 [Report This]Date: April 04, 2008 06:50 am Title: But then the morning comes, and we turn back into pumpkins, right?
It really feels... unfinished. Maybe Pam needs to do something big to convince him or something. Maybe his fiancee notices that he's acting strangely lately and they have a big fight about it.
Author's Response: thanks for your feedback. i wish it didn't feel unfinished. i wish it felt more like, an abrupt ending, like - oh. uh. it's over. i've thought about how to continue the story, but i'm not sure if it would really be a conclusion.... anyway. thank you!
10 [Report This]Date: April 03, 2008 05:22 pm Title: But then the morning comes, and we turn back into pumpkins, right?
I loved the ending of this but I would love to see an epilogue. Whether it be with them together or not, I really really really want an epilogue
Author's Response: ha! bold type - that's pretty serious. ok. one more vote for an epilogue... we'll see. keep your eyes out for it!
Date: April 03, 2008 04:27 pm Title: But then the morning comes, and we turn back into pumpkins, right?
I actually love the ending to this, despite the fact that it's a little unconventional. The whole thing has a very nuanced foreign film vibe to it and that last bit really fits. I would love to see a sequel/epilogue to this!
Author's Response: the point really is foreign film-esque. maybe you can expect to see: before sunrise: paris style? probably not :) bebitched, thanks again. i haven't seen anything new from you in awhile - writers block? or are you working on something huge?
10 [Report This]Date: April 03, 2008 04:19 pm Title: But then the morning comes, and we turn back into pumpkins, right?
I demand an epilogue/sequel.
This story is a little bit addictive. ;)
Author's Response: addictive is great i totally agree. i really do love it, which may sound braggy. i don't mean to sound braggy... ok i hear your demand. thanks for writing!
10 [Report This]Date: April 03, 2008 04:04 pm Title: But then the morning comes, and we turn back into pumpkins, right?
Great, great story!
Well, I'm torn on the epilogue concept. This ending is filled with a delicious tension. At the risk of having tomatoes thrown at me ... I say ... Leave us hanging!
Author's Response: thank you! well the idea was a delicious tension - glad i achieved it! that's a bold choice, vampiric blood... is bold the right word? ;)
9 [Report This]Date: April 03, 2008 03:56 pm Title: But then the morning comes, and we turn back into pumpkins, right?
OK... I totally understand if you leave it this way, but the impatient, conclusion hunting, optimist in me wants the epilogue - but, it's your story, so it's your call... EPILOGUE! EPILOGUE! EPILOGUE!... if that helps...
Author's Response:
well, i think that's a brilliant way to put it :) i never intended it to be complete, and more like the ending of before sunset. however, i thought about that ending. SPOILER ALERT! right :) although you may not know the ending, it leaves you on a positive note - actually that is true for both movies. the reveal is actually in the before sunset opening... anyway. i'm going to give it some thought.
Date: April 02, 2008 08:08 pm Title: Memory's a wonderful thing if you don't have to deal with the past
Aw jeez, I am enjoying the train wreck -- am I a terrible person for it? I could see Pam wanting to wait to get married until she had accomplished something, or at least discovered something, and Jim being too hurt to handle it any other way but to run. And some poor unsuspecting woman tries to heal his broken heart, but she's doomed.
And once trust is broken, it's a hell of a lot harder to rebuild than it was to build it in the first place. Ouch.
Author's Response: well we're all a little bit sadistic in our observance, huh? glad you liked it - and i think you really nailed the situation on its head.
Date: April 01, 2008 07:42 pm Title: Memory's a wonderful thing if you don't have to deal with the past
this train wreck is really good.
Author's Response: it IS a train wreck - glad it's working for you!
8 [Report This]Date: April 01, 2008 03:33 pm Title: Memory's a wonderful thing if you don't have to deal with the past
Yes, this is going well and I'm enjoying it as much as I can considering its a very well written, very angsty and heartbreaking story that includes hot steamy broken up sex that leaves this reader wishing they'd get back together in Chapter 3 but so afraid they won't. Wow. I wish it was done so I could peek at the ending.
Author's Response: oh thank you... well all will be revealed shortly :)
9 [Report This]Date: April 01, 2008 03:22 pm Title: Memory's a wonderful thing if you don't have to deal with the past
WOW! Angsty... i want more though - I hope it doesn't hurt the whole way through... keep em' coming!
Author's Response: well - i hate to say it - there might be more hurt...
Date: April 01, 2008 10:38 am Title: Memory's a wonderful thing if you don't have to deal with the past
wow
Author's Response: well said :) thanks!
10 [Report This]Date: April 01, 2008 07:05 am Title: Memory's a wonderful thing if you don't have to deal with the past
EL, this story makes me feel very emotional--don't know why. Maybe it's the uncertainty of it, the fact that the situation is messy, love-filled but not perfect. More soon, please, because I know this is going to be stuck in my head, and I won't be able to shake it.
Author's Response: i did not mean to do this to you! still - glad it's having an effect. i'm all about messy, that's exactly what this is. i'd like to think it's a nod to the realism of the office.
Date: March 31, 2008 10:45 pm Title: Memory's a wonderful thing if you don't have to deal with the past
Oh wow this is such an awesome story!! I got SERIOUS chills when they first got to the hotel room ;) hot stuff haha! In all seriousness though, I just am obsessed with the whole premise of this story - it's so different and cool. I'm really excited to see where it goes next!
Author's Response: chills is great! thank you so much. i really like utilizing a premise that i haven't seen before - so i'm glad you like it. next ch. will be up soon...
Date: March 31, 2008 10:37 pm Title: Memory's a wonderful thing if you don't have to deal with the past
Um... steamy steam, emotionally resonant, heart-breaking, Jim & Pam like not at all on the show and yet EXACTLY themselves? Wow. This was pretty close-to-home somehow, for me, which is... probably completely WRONG, but, there you go. What a great, great job!
Author's Response: i'm glad you're so into this. steamy steam is way important to me - that's awesome that you liked it. exactly jam but not jam is what i hoped for. this is a little darker (pam smoking? fights after sex?) but i think after 2 years of being together, they'll have a bunch of battle scars.