9 [Report This]Date: May 16, 2008 01:51 pm Title: Dinner Party - Goodbye, Toby
Really well done, There There! Thanks for the smile.
Date: April 21, 2008 01:42 pm Title: Season One
Wow!
...see I can be minimal too...
Date: April 15, 2008 12:26 pm Title: Fun Run - The Deposition
Nice job. :) I look forward to the next chapter, but not too much, because that means the season will be over. :(
Date: April 15, 2008 12:23 pm Title: Cocktails - The Job
I hope you do this from Jim's POV. It would be really interesting.
I'm catching up with reading a bit and I thought I'd check this out, particularly since it's such an interesting premise. You're doing a really good job with this, especially showing Pam figuring out how she feels.
Date: April 10, 2008 11:43 am Title: Season One
WOW! Thank you so much for this little glimpse into Pam's mind. I really hope you try again with Jim's POV.
Date: April 10, 2008 10:25 am Title: Season One
Thank you so much for these little gems...they've been great and let's have fun at the party!
10 [Report This]Date: April 10, 2008 08:31 am Title: Fun Run - The Deposition
Really nice job, There There. You managed to convey so much in so little space.
Date: April 09, 2008 10:07 am Title: The Convict - Business School
Back from Vacation: If this is what he had felt like for years and years she suddenly loved him even more.
Best line of your series.
Date: April 09, 2008 09:38 am Title: Season One
I am so excited to hear you may countinue this with Jim's POV. I can't believe how perfect you were in each episode. Happy to finally have the sadness over!
10 [Report This]Date: April 09, 2008 09:16 am Title: Cocktails - The Job
Excellent job!
10 [Report This]Date: April 08, 2008 05:14 pm Title: The Convict - Business School
These are so fascinating. You are doing a great job of capturing the essence of Pam's feelings in very few words.
There was a violent turbulence inside her that poured out of her eyes and down her cheeks. If this is what he had felt like for years and years she suddenly loved him even more.
She couldn’t quite explain why it didn’t feel like an accomplishment until he acknowledged it. His obvious selfless joy reminded her of a day of gold medals and blossoming love.
A dance outside with someone familiar and comfortable reminded her that she didn’t have to feel as broken as she did most days. She left with him and caught her breath, feeling better and worse all at once.
Just absolutely brilliant :)
Date: April 08, 2008 04:22 pm Title: The Convict - Business School
I love this!! Especially the Back from Vacation one. Are you going to do Jim's POV too?
9 [Report This]Date: April 06, 2008 03:51 pm Title: Michael's Birthday - The Convention
The crash landing broke her wings and her heart and his heart all at once. Lovely and heartbreaking.
Date: April 06, 2008 08:02 am Title: Season One
4 sentences that also broke my heart. Simply fantastic.
9 [Report This]Date: April 05, 2008 05:43 pm Title: The Secret - Take Your Daughter to Work Day
Really good job with these episodes. My favorite: She’d never felt more disappointed—in herself, in Roy, and in the sting she felt at the lack of anything new to add to her shoebox. Such a heartbreaking little sentiment.
Date: April 05, 2008 04:06 pm Title: The Secret - Take Your Daughter to Work Day
I am absolutely loving these. You're really doing a great job capturing Pam's thoughts.
Date: April 05, 2008 01:07 pm Title: Season One
I really love this. Each little tidbit breaks my heart for Pam. You have done a great job.
Date: April 05, 2008 04:59 am Title: The Client - The Injury
I'm really enjoying these! I think you've done a great job of distilling Pam's thoughts for each episode and I'm looking forward to the rest.
Date: April 04, 2008 05:35 pm Title: The Dundies - The Fight
This is a really cool idea and I like each episode so far.
Date: April 04, 2008 02:19 pm Title: The Client - The Injury
As soon as she got home she got in the shower, knowing she smelled like citronella and something warm she couldn’t quite place. The citronella washed away easily but nothing else did. -- Awesome. All of these chapters are great, but this is the line that struck me the most.
Date: April 04, 2008 10:47 am Title: Season One
I haven't commented yet but didn't want to wait any longer. I love the short thoughts Pam is having about each episode. You have hit each one right on!
Date: April 04, 2008 04:51 am Title: The Dundies - The Fight
Keeping in the spirit of things...I really like these!
Date: April 02, 2008 08:13 pm Title: Season One
I really love this idea. I didn't, however, like some of the earlier sentences, just because they were so aware of Pam and Jim's Torrid Love (Alliance and Basketball being the worst). A minimalist reading of Pam has to address a transition into those sorts of thoughts. But the one for Hot Girl was really interesting and also my favorite. It's about her and small revelations in smaller moments. (I'm pretty pigeonholed, far as fic goes.) Looking forward to more! And congratulations on posting your first fic- I've been too cowardly to do so yet, and I hope the criticism I offered was friendly enough.
9 [Report This]Date: April 02, 2008 04:53 pm Title: Season One
I like it! Very unique, keep it going!
Date: April 02, 2008 04:40 pm Title: Season One
I think this is lovely. I really appreciate minimalism, mostly because i'm so terrible at it.
welcome to MTT! I can't wait to hear more from you