9 [Report This]Date: September 13, 2016 11:04 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh wow, really vivid descriptors painting a steamy (if teasing) scene! I'm torn, I like the ambiguity but I would also love to know what lead to this encounter, as well as what happens next ;-)
Date: January 06, 2010 09:53 am Title: Chapter 1
Just came across this on the home page as a "story of the moment." I don't know how I missed it the first time around! I think you conveyed feelings of desperation and passion very appropriate for that ep (and how it should have been). I could have kept on reading! Nice job.
Date: April 24, 2008 12:33 pm Title: Chapter 1
And why couldn't think have happened instead of the actual episode?
Author's Response: Wow, I am super late on responses. Thanks for the review.
8 [Report This]Date: April 19, 2008 10:29 pm Title: Chapter 1
“I don’t love her.” he whispered.
“Prove it.” she said, for once, her gaze unwavering.
Wow. If only this is what we had seen. This was really hot!
Author's Response: I am super late in responding. I suck. Thanks for the review, if only it had gone this way!
Date: April 16, 2008 06:41 am Title: Chapter 1
You did not just leave us hangin'... Loved the line "Her hesitation, still killed him." Sooooooooo Pam. Can I get the next installment before the end of the day--'cuz what else is their to do at work, but keep rechecking for new chapters? eh,eh...
Author's Response: I am so super late to review, that makes me a loser. Thanks for the review. I didn't think this would go more than one chapter, but I am glad you liked it.
Date: April 15, 2008 10:04 pm Title: Chapter 1
I had to read this a few times, and then luckily saw the Jim/Pam AU so I was sure who Jim was actually with. (I sometimes miss the subtle approach.) So once I saw that, I liked this.
One thing I wasn't sure about. When it says "He wanted to shout: If you knew what I knew . . ." I wasn't really sure what he knew that would make a difference. I assume Pam was hesitating because of Karen. She shouldn't. ;)
I like this a lot: "She couldn’t look at him across a room like that, leave him disoriented, crazy to do something crazy, without something igniting." I prefer thinking that Jim would have excused himself from Karen's company and gone to see why Pam was looking at him like that.
Author's Response: I am super late to respond, but thanks for the insightful review. I think maybe what Jim knew that she didn't was that they were destined to end up like this, so the hesitation was just so frustrating, and that he was ready to give in as soon as he saw a sign from her.
10 [Report This]Date: April 15, 2008 08:12 pm Title: Chapter 1
I think I would have done just about anything to see this moment... Wow.
--Strider
Author's Response: I am really late in responding, thank you for the lovely review.rn
Date: April 15, 2008 07:53 pm Title: Chapter 1
The hypothetical nature of their situation hung between them, on his lips, crossing over her face. Hypothetical. Yeah, that word means something else entirely now...
Nice spin on a painful episode, Andromeda.
Author's Response: Thank you for the review, sorry I am so late to respond. Is it weird I always think of Jim and Pam when I use the word hypothetical now?
Date: April 15, 2008 07:27 pm Title: Chapter 1
Yeah, that's one scenario that might get me to watch PW again. Because really, just no interest in doing so. It's like that episode isn't even on the DVD.
And those last two lines...win.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, sorry I am super late to respond. Poor PW - everyone was so disappointed in that episode.