8 [Report This]Date: October 27, 2008 04:43 pm Title: Epilogue
Never caught this story before, so I read the whole thing in one sitting. It was lovely. Thanks for writing.
Author's Response: Hey, thanks! I appreciate it!
Date: August 19, 2008 06:04 pm Title: Home
Wow, this story was so adorable! And I really enjoyed your writing style. I just sat down and read the whole story straight through. Great job and I can't wait for the epilogue!
8 [Report This]Date: August 19, 2008 10:52 am Title: Home
Apparently I'm the first to reveiw!!! yay!- Very cute chapter I love how excited Jackson was to see Jim again, but that he couldn't wait for his present- very real-- heehee... Please update soon, I want to see how this new life turns out for them all!!!
Thanks for the great story.
Date: August 03, 2008 05:29 pm Title: Radio Jim
I love this story!
Author's Response: I'm glad you love it. Thank you so much for your reviews. They made my day!
Date: August 03, 2008 04:48 pm Title: Name
Russel!Jason!Mose!Dwight!
10 [Report This]Date: August 03, 2008 04:45 pm Title: Proud
okay I was planning not on reviewing until I was up to date but this is an amazing chapter and amazing story!
8 [Report This]Date: August 03, 2008 06:46 am Title: Radio Jim
Love this one!
Date: August 03, 2008 06:32 am Title: Jackson
This made me laugh- I begged my parents to name my little sister after me when she was born and was furious when the wouldn't!
FWIW, if my husband was away and asked to speak to the child without saying anything to me first, he'd be in trouble when the phone got handed back to me! But maybe that just got left out... ;)
I like it so far- I'm thinking you probably want constructive criticism, so my comment is that I like (really like) your plot, the way you're writing Jim and Pam, and the opportunity you've got with them being separated; SO much story material there. It's far less detailed than what I usually read, but you seem to know everyone so well it feels like you're holding back on us in order to keep things moving. In other words, the pace is great but I'd love more elaboration of, say, how Jim's interaction with coworkers contributed to his mood at the end of the day... he'd be working with interns that are probably younger than him, or his more laid back personality doesn't fit in well.
I'll have to read further to see if the comments are still relevant- and by the way, I like the premise of the story so much it was hard to stop reading long enough to leave a comment!
Author's Response: First off, thank you so much for you comment. I wish I could get more comments like this, because I'm looking to improve my writing, and I think I can learn a lot from what my readers have to say. Thank you.rnrnIt's hard for me to write details, and I'm sure you can tell by my story that I'm just an amateur....very amateur. I came up with this great idea for a story about a future internship for Jim, and I find myself struggling to write it how I see it in my head. I think I skip the details because I *do* want the story to progress fast, so I can get in everything that is going through my head. Proof-go read the last chapter...I had so many things I wanted to write, so there aren't *ANY* details. rnrnNeedless to say, I won't be quitting my day job. Hopefully if I continue to write Fanfic, I can improve upon writing details. I'm sure working on it!rnrnThanks, again.
Date: June 17, 2008 01:05 pm Title: Airport
Please please please update soon!
Date: June 13, 2008 11:51 am Title: First Day
I'm so mad at you right now. That was just mean. You can make it up to me with more...soon. Real soon. Now would be good.
Date: June 13, 2008 11:41 am Title: First Day
I cannot wait for the reunion! Please don't make up wait too long.
Date: June 13, 2008 11:20 am Title: Airport
That was just cruel... but I love it!!! can't wait to see the big (hopefully fluffy) reunion.
Great chapter.
Date: June 13, 2008 09:21 am Title: Airport
Very nice! Update soon please!
8 [Report This]Date: June 13, 2008 07:55 am Title: Airport
Aw, how sweet! Looking forward to more!
Date: June 13, 2008 07:50 am Title: Airport
Heeyyyy....that was a little bit mean. This is such a sweet story - love it. Please write some more!
Date: June 02, 2008 12:19 pm Title: Memory
GASP! I'm SOOO excited to see what comes next!
9 [Report This]Date: June 02, 2008 08:54 am Title: Memory
Argh! I want to know all of the above! Can't wait to meet baby Halpert #2!
Date: June 02, 2008 06:28 am Title: First Day
Yeah, I was so happy to see an update. I was thinking about this story yesterday. I hope we get more soon.
10 [Report This]Date: May 31, 2008 09:22 pm Title: First Day
When will you update? I'm dying to know what happens next! This is one of the best stories on the website!
Author's Response: I writing the next chapter as we speak. I've been out of town...camping, traveling...you know the drill. Check back soon! Thanks for the review!
Date: May 22, 2008 01:25 pm Title: Name
I think they should name him Carter. I like that name! It's cute.
8 [Report This]Date: May 21, 2008 04:34 pm Title: Name
I think he should be named Michael.
:-) Hee -hee! Like it so far! Keep the chapers coming!
Date: May 21, 2008 12:56 pm Title: Name
I just started reading this story and I'm honestly hooked. I'm really looking forward to a new chapter! Please update soon! THis story is incredible and I love every bit of it. It's so beautifully written and you caught onto writing Jim and Pam so well. It's just like them! I love their son a lot too; he's precious! You're descriptions are awesome and I just love this story overall!
And personally, I love the name Adam. Owen is kind of cute too, as is Eric.
Date: May 21, 2008 07:09 am Title: Name
i like the name noah too :]
and i'd love to see more soon. i like this story a lot.
10 [Report This]Date: May 20, 2008 10:09 pm Title: Name
Definitely loving it :)
Date: May 20, 2008 10:03 pm Title: Name
Oh my goodness! I was just going to say Noah too! I have a soft spot for that name.
I hate that we have to miss out on what seems like a lot of their conversations but I do like that the chapters are getting longer. Jackson sounds exactly like his father with a little bit of Michael.
I'm really looking forward to more.