Date: September 02, 2007 10:07 pm Title: Five Places
i love your jim! what a lovely story - especially the ending. v. sweet.
Date: August 26, 2007 09:01 pm Title: Five Places
I really enjoyed your story! I love stuff from Jim's point of view because I think he's such an innocent, honest character. I can only ever write Pam.
Only constructive compliment I could point out is that I don't think there are any safeways in scranton.. I'm pretty sure that's a west-coast chain. They probably have Acme's though! (I live in the area, and am pathetic enough to get ridiculously excited when we got lost and ended up in SCRANTON!!)
Date: November 12, 2006 01:18 am Title: Five Places
I loved the story, and can I just say, the first part was my favorite. Montreal and BC are amazing places to be and in comparison, Toronto is grey. Great piece, altogether.
10 [Report This]Date: September 15, 2006 09:39 am Title: Five Places
You did a great job with this. Of course I loved the first one because, hey, I'm a Canadian chick and the idea of Jim wanting to check out my city (Montreal) is way cool. The bedroom one made me very, very sad, however. The last one made up for it, though.
Author's Response: haha, I wondered if it was a little too self-indulgent to make Jim come to Canada, but that thought was sort of where the seed of the story germinated, so... Jim and I are in agreement about wanting to check out Montreal! It's hard to stay sad when they get together in the end :)
10 [Report This]Date: September 14, 2006 08:57 pm Title: Five Places
Oh, this is so fantastic!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Glad you liked it. :)
8 [Report This]Date: September 14, 2006 04:12 pm Title: Five Places
Loved this, and the little musical references are a nice touch. I love the last part, jumping from them greeting each other to Jim asking his mother if someone else can come - you don't even have to say what happened in between, it just follows logically :)
Author's Response: Hahaha, yes, I think so. I think I'd find it hard to write Pam and Jim's epic moment - I'm pretty sure the writers of The Office are going to do it to perfection - so I left it all between the lines. Thanks for the kind words!
7 [Report This]Date: September 14, 2006 11:46 am Title: Five Places
Yay - I love the Five Things meme too... so many possibilities.
I do have to say that the last was my favorite. Naughty Jim!
Author's Response: No kidding, I could just write Five Things fic forever. Thanks for the review!
10 [Report This]Date: September 14, 2006 09:44 am Title: Five Places
Gah! Is it wrong that I love every one of these....but the last one the most???
Author's Response: Hee, of course not! We all of us just want Pam and Jim to make out forever. ;)
10 [Report This]Date: September 14, 2006 04:28 am Title: Five Places
These are great moments. They really maintain a tone that feels very Jim. The ending of the second one (Pam's lilacs) was perfect yet wrenching. Made the final one such a relief ('walking a little funny' - I can so picture it.) Big sigh.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I tried to sort of tap into that Jim-voice, or, like, the look he gets when he's sort of unimpressed with something, not smiling, just taking it all in - how I think that look would sound. Glad you liked it!
10 [Report This]Date: September 13, 2006 05:23 pm Title: Five Places
I love this 5 things vignettes! I especially loved the last one - not just because of the happy ending but because Thanksgiving makes me feel all warm and happy inside, as does memories of my mother making cinnamon sugar toast when I was little - and also because I think the word gobsmacked is so cute. (is it a real word?) Great story. Anxious to read more from you.
Author's Response: Yeah, I shamelessly stole my mom's cinnamon spread thing to give to Jim's. I'm pretty sure gobsmacked is a real word, although it might just be British slang masquerading as one. Thanks for the review!
10 [Report This]Date: September 13, 2006 05:21 pm Title: Five Places
These were amazing. Just amazing. And the ending?
Perfect.
Thanks for the fic!
Author's Response: Awesome, glad you enjoyed it!
Date: September 13, 2006 05:21 pm Title: Five Places
Jim, baby! Come back to Toronto, I'll show you a good time!
Ahem. Great job, your language and descriptions are amazing. I love this meme.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! Glad you enjoyed it. If only Jim *would* come to Canada... sigh. Wishful thinking on my part.
10 [Report This]Date: September 13, 2006 05:08 pm Title: Five Places
this was so lovely, each one felt so different but they all worked well together. #1 and #2 hurt me, #3 and #4 i could practically see in my head, and #5...yay for happy endings.
Author's Response: Haha, thanks, I'm glad you enjoyed it. Yay for happy endings indeed. I'm a total sucker for them even though I love having bittersweet-ness in the middle :)
10 [Report This]Date: September 13, 2006 03:28 pm Title: Five Places
Beautiful piece of writing!
"He sits on the concrete lip of a nearby fountain and doesn’t bother looking for change in his pockets." That's the perfect picture of a "hope"less man. It breaks my heart.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! Heh, yeah, that was my intent with that line. Thinking that sweet, whimsical Jim wouldn't bother looking for a coin to throw in is so sad.
8 [Report This]Date: September 13, 2006 12:46 pm Title: Five Places
Okay, first, if your username is from Metric's "Calculation Theme," you are awesome. Second, Jim TOTALLY has cool, indie taste in music: if you go onto iTunes and look under The Office or Celebrity Playlists you can see his mix -- it's all Wilco and Arcade Fire and Sufjan and Clap Your Hands Say Yeah. Oh, Jim.
Third, I reeeeeally like this, especially the women's bathroom and Pam and Roy's bedroom bits, but my favorite is completely the last section. That last paragraph!! Nice.
Author's Response:
Hee, yeah, it totally is. And I checked out the iTunes playlist, and now have a totally new level of love for Jim. Chicago is totally my favorite Sufjan song.
The last paragraph was actually an afterthought - on re-read, I think it finishes the whole piece. :) Thank god for afterthoughts.
10 [Report This]Date: September 13, 2006 10:44 am Title: Five Places
This was wonderful. There are so many beautiful lines in this, but I really felt this one in particular: "The glass floors in the CN Tower that he can see the dizzying distance to the ground through throw his world out of balance and remind him of Pam’s eyes."
Brilliant.
And Jim is really pretty when he's sad.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. That line is one of my favorites, too - actually the fleeting train of thought that was the predecessor of that line was totally what spurred basically this whole piece, so, way to pick up on the lynchpin. :)
10 [Report This]Date: September 13, 2006 10:36 am Title: Five Places
Very sweet!
Author's Response: Thanks a bunch! :)
10 [Report This]Date: September 13, 2006 10:01 am Title: Five Places
This was interesting, and good, and I enjoyed this take on Jim. I like seeing how everyone interprets him and the things about him that we don't really know. Open mic, getting baked in Montreal, and Pam... at the grocery store. Wow.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your review! I find that in fic all across different fandoms, there's all these flavours of how people see their characters, and I like seeing other people's interpretations and speculations, too. :)
10 [Report This]Date: September 13, 2006 09:52 am Title: Five Places
Wow, this was amazing. You have a very cool style, and I definitely think Jim is a music nerd, so all of your references make perfect sense. #2 broke my heart, but #5 mended it again. And Jim playing the guitar!! Loved it.
Author's Response: Hee, thanks so much! Glad you enjoyed. I totally put them in that order on purpose - I'm such a sucker for a happy ending. The thought of Jim playing the guitar is guh.
7 [Report This]Date: September 13, 2006 09:52 am Title: Five Places
Especially loved the last one.
7 [Report This]Date: September 13, 2006 09:52 am Title: Five Places
Especially loved the last one.
Author's Response: Thank you!
9 [Report This]Date: September 13, 2006 05:27 am Title: Five Places
These are fabulous. Your style is lovely- very matter-of-fact, but yet somehow capturing the depth of the sadness under the surface of Jim. "but he has people skills if nothing else" is one of the best summations of Jim's character that I've seen. Really excellent.
Author's Response: Thanks so much - when younger I was one of those overly verbose too-smart-for-themselves writers, and after having that hammered out of me, I suppose matter-of-factness is what remains :) And that's definitely the way I see Jim - I think at his worst moments, he could still slip into entertaining-people-mode.
10 [Report This]Date: September 13, 2006 04:01 am Title: Five Places
Oooh, I love this. The second one was absolutely heartbreaking, but the fifth one made up for it! All of them were so creative.
Author's Response: Thank you! Once the idea for one of them popped into my head, the rest just flew out. Glad you liked it!
10 [Report This]Date: September 13, 2006 03:15 am Title: Five Places
I AM YOUR BIGGEST FAN, OH MY GOD. Seriously, as a fellow music nerd I completely understand how extra dreamy it makes him just thinking that he's that way, too. Have you seen the Jim Halpert itunes playlist? He totally is. He loves Neutral Milk Hotel!
And you win at life with the Final Fantasy reference. Owen Pallett does no wrong.
While the music lover in me wants to prattle on about Elliott Smith, I must tell you how much I enjoy your writing, little indie nuggets aside. It really is wonderful. The way you write is kind of subtle and just... well-crafted. I love Jim sneaking a peak at the ladies' room, and getting uncomfortable with it. I love the creepy hipsters. I love the second one, and Jim throwing up in the flowers, though it did break my heart.
All of the little details you add are simply amazing. The nailpolish that looks like the inside of a seashell? Perfect. It's all so good. I want you to write more!
Author's Response: Dude! Your review totally made my day. Thanks so much for all your kind words and your fellow appreciation of your, my, and Jim's type of music. I fully find Jim WAY HOTTER after checking out his iTunes playlist. I knew there was a reason they played a Clap Your Hands Say Yeah! song during the barbeque at HIS HOUSE. Again, thanks so much. With such great encouragement, I'll be sure to venture once more into the fray... sometime soon. :)