Date: April 17, 2009 02:51 am Title: Positive. Content. Breathe in, out.
This line is just perfect: "The loneliness had made for a tough adjustment and what had surprised her most was missing Roy very little and missing Jim completely and utterly."
9 [Report This]Date: May 11, 2008 04:51 pm Title: Positive. Content. Breathe in, out.
This was a beauty, EL. I just love your style of writing. Two of my favorites from this:
1. Talking about Karen was not as fun, but she stayed positive while asserting her heterosexuality; and,
2. Positive. Content. Breathe in, out. She smiled. The day was ending and she had big weekend plans: painting and maybe using that vibrator her sister had purchased for her as a joke.
I felt both had the perfect combo of humor and melancholy.
Great job.
Author's Response: thank you so much! i too loved these lines. #1 made me feel like a clever wordsmith when i banged it out and #2 i loved b/c i felt like it was a mantra. maybe something she'd used before during what turned out to be a really crappy year for her (that got better real quick though!). thank you for your feedback, it's always so good to hear from you.
Author's Response: thank you so much! i too loved these lines. #1 made me feel like a clever wordsmith when i banged it out and #2 i loved b/c i felt like it was a mantra. maybe something she'd used before during what turned out to be a really crappy year for her (that got better real quick though!). thank you for your feedback, it's always so good to hear from you.
10 [Report This]Date: May 11, 2008 01:06 pm Title: Positive. Content. Breathe in, out.
I really liked this :) Not to mention your K's Choice reference. When I read the title, that song automatically started playing in my head ;)
Author's Response: thanks! i think they're song, at least in mood, fits this moment for pam really well. and ta-daa! thanks for the feedback.
Author's Response: thanks! i think they're song, at least in mood, fits this moment for pam really well. and ta-daa! thanks for the feedback.
Date: May 11, 2008 12:42 pm Title: Positive. Content. Breathe in, out.
great job of capturing pam's thoughts!
Author's Response: oh thanks! i know it's cliche, and saying it's cliche is cliche :) but i really love the job. i could write about it from 100 angles - as could we all i suppose!
Date: May 11, 2008 11:58 am Title: Positive. Content. Breathe in, out.
I loved reading all the little details filling in the cracks of that day, what she was really thinking, and you did a wonderful job of keeping in in-character. Great job!
Author's Response: oh man, thanks bebitched! i think there's so much under the surface that we didn't see. there were a few facial expressions here and there, but pam spent most of the day (well i guess two days) doing talking heads and performing for the camera. the interior was really mysterious to me... thank you for the feedback!