Date: June 04, 2008 11:01 am Title: Everything Will Be Alright
Gah, how happy am I that you decided to do a post GT fic??
On to the good stuff:
- You are a master of imagery, my friend -- whether it's a swash of colors that you weave so seamlessly throughout a story or vital elements (in this case, fire and water) that pervade the overall thrust of the fic, you really do an incredible job of sustaining a primary thread that subtly drives your meaning home.
- "You’ve both been burned in the past and you realize now that it was wrong to start your future with the same colors that still scrape at your past. You should have themed the night in greens and blues, greys and deep teals. Soothing colors, calming images that represent what she is to you. Because while the passion you have for her, that she has for you, is nothing short of intoxicating, it’s nonetheless based in the solid blue of your bed sheets, the soft green of her eyes, the reassuring grey you pilot together, always together." This excerpt is simply amazing. I'm always awed by writers who can take seemingly simple yet simultaneously abstract notions like colors and weave them into an emotional tapestry that's so complete it's breathtaking.
- "you think of the white wine you have chilling in the back seat of your car because she hates champagne" -- gah, so Jim Halpert, and it's also a nice little mundane detail that rounds out Pam's character just a little more....
- "She twines her arms around your left one like a grapevine, and you think of rain. Of lush green ivy climbing up the side of a terrace in a house that you share, finally. You think of a bed that seems to belong in a rented room when she’s not in it, and you know it’s only a matter of time." This is one of those passages that's so gorgeous I had to quote it, though I can't say anything about it, because seriously...there's no way to do it justice. Gorgeous, gorgeous, gorgeous.
- The final paragraph? Amazing. I feel like I'm repeating myself (and not very articulately, lol), but I can't say enough about your amazing grasp of the language, your ability to capturing such powerful images, your way of conveying the intangible things that make up the fabric of who these characters are/have always been and what drives their dynamic.
Let me just say: Having read some of your work, I am completely flattered that you review mine, because you are an amazing writer, my friend.
Author's Response: Again, you are such a rockstar with this! It's very much appreciated, my friend. rnrnIt is so great to hear from someone I respect as not only a writer but a story teller. Let me tell you, girl7, the way you weave a story together is blinding in it's awesomeness, and I always look at your work (all of it, but especially those epic stories that stretch 30+ chapters) and think: How the heck did she have all that in her head?! It amazes me! So I consider myself flattered that you find so much to enjoy in such a quiet little piece as this. You rock! :)
8 [Report This]Date: May 30, 2008 05:20 pm Title: Everything Will Be Alright
Beautiful. Really beautiful. Its amazing how you've used colors and metaphors to create emotion and analyze their relationship. Excellent job.
Author's Response: Thank you so much, second drink! I'm glad what I was attempting to do resonated with you! That's always good to hear. Thanks again!
Date: May 20, 2008 09:08 pm Title: Everything Will Be Alright
I love the imagery here...absolutely lovely! Nicely done :)
Author's Response: I'm glad you enjoyed this!! Thanks for taking the time to review!
Date: May 18, 2008 11:44 am Title: Everything Will Be Alright
Lovely imagery.
Author's Response: Thanks!
Date: May 17, 2008 09:27 pm Title: Everything Will Be Alright
Gorgeous. Simply gorgeous. A fascinating and true metaphor you've used here, and I really enjoyed it. Great job!
Author's Response: Thanks, bebitched!!! I'm glad you enjoyed the metaphor here. It seemed to ring true for me, and it's nice to know that you think so as well! Thanks again, friend!
10 [Report This]Date: May 17, 2008 08:28 pm Title: Everything Will Be Alright
Catie, you bitch. Here I am, enjoying a night and sitting around, happy to be content in my new little apartment with my new little project, and then you go off and pull the rug out from under me! This SLAYS me! While this sounds cliched, it's the truth when I say that I tried to pick a few favorite lines and ended up picking 98% of the story (the remaining 2% were "ands," "the's" and "saids"). I just love the last paragraph, and the idea of champagne white wine chilling in the back seat adds a deliciously tragic finality to the finale. I absolutely love this, and it's at the top of the heap when it comes to post-finale fics.
I'm dead, lady. DEAD.
--C.
Author's Response: CH---I really don't know where to start here! You have been seated (primly, but with a strong and stubborn undertone...you are a southern lady after all) at the height of encouragement for me, and I really, truly appreciate this. I fear that doesn't make much sense so I'll just say that I thank you for your very welcome response to this little ditty. I am struck by whatever reason to tell you that I wholly admire your work and am sincerely grateful for your friendship. DiA has left me weak with confession, LOL! rnrnAnyway, thanks again!
10 [Report This]Date: May 17, 2008 08:11 pm Title: Everything Will Be Alright
Oh, Catie... I like you. :D Love the imagery here, the way you play with colors and textures and emotions and...well, yeah. Everything.
I believe it's only a matter of time for Jim and Pam as well. ;)
Excelent job!
Author's Response: Mose, I like you!!! You're so great and so encouraging and I truly appreciate it! Thanks so much! :D
Date: May 17, 2008 07:25 pm Title: Everything Will Be Alright
This was great. I especially loved how you had Jim falling to his knees.
Author's Response: Thanks! Glad you enjoyed this!
9 [Report This]Date: May 17, 2008 07:14 pm Title: Everything Will Be Alright
Beautiful. So well written, catie9 (but then I had a feeling it would be).
Author's Response: Thanks, NanReg--It's always nice to hear from you!