1 [Report This]Date: March 02, 2019 05:30 am Title: but i know it's got to be you
Oh I just love these not-quite angst, not-quite fluff stories pre-Pratt. This one is lovely! Quiet but powerful. Simple, beautiful imagery. Whew. That ending was perfection. Well done.
10 [Report This]Date: November 04, 2008 04:51 pm Title: but i know it's got to be you
Awwwww sleepy Jim is always SO sexy. I like how you had them just snuggle and be together at the end :(
8 [Report This]Date: June 26, 2008 09:24 pm Title: but i know it's got to be you
"She presses her eyes closed and a tear finds its way out, lands on his skin, rolls down to the small of his back."
Every thing you write is so perfectly perfect
Date: June 17, 2008 01:47 pm Title: but i know it's got to be you
Guh, your stuff is always just astonishingly gorgeous, and this one is no exception. Some of my favorite lines:
- "She likes him drowsy and uncensored like this, completely himself. She leans over again and brushes her lips against his right eyelid, a ghost of a kiss." Love the imagery here, and the phrase "drowsy and uncensored" is so simple but so perfectly describes a state we all know & recognize.
- ‘You’re leaving me today,’ he says slowly. His voice is full of sleep, dreamlike almost, as if he weren’t speaking directly to her but some apparition of her. -- Again, I feel like I'm just being redundant here, but you just have such a gift for capturing those simple moments and rendering them haunting through your prose. Just beautiful.
- Love the way this ends, with the two of them just letting themselves sit in the stillness for a while.
As usual, just amazing work!
10 [Report This]Date: June 17, 2008 11:01 am Title: but i know it's got to be you
As always, your stories are beautifully written. The mood in this fic is lovely. On one hand, there's a sweet moment between Jim and Pam in bed. Yet at the same time the mood is bitter-sweet because Pam is about to leave for NY. I loved how they just wanted to spend a quiet moment in bed before Pam left.
Date: June 16, 2008 10:38 pm Title: but i know it's got to be you
I gotta agree with Colette here. I think there's a difference between fluff and just good fiction. This is just good fiction -- nay, GREAT fiction. I loved every little thing about this. From the way you described how Pam was laying with her head on the small of his back, to his drowsily saying "You're leaving me today", to them NOT having sex. I actually LOVED that they didn't have sex for some reason. lol. It just seemed much more in keeping with the mood of the story for them to just want to lay there together. This was splendid.
8 [Report This]Date: June 16, 2008 08:39 am Title: but i know it's got to be you
Wow...if this is pointless fluff, then please keep the pointless fluff coming. Such a consise and well written piece. Loved it!
Date: June 16, 2008 07:34 am Title: but i know it's got to be you
Not everything has to have a point. This is beautiful. What a nice way to start a Monday :) Thanks for this.
10 [Report This]Date: June 16, 2008 07:31 am Title: but i know it's got to be you
This was short and beautiful...bittersweet and perfect. Wonderful job!
Date: June 16, 2008 07:11 am Title: but i know it's got to be you
I have to disagree - there was a point: this made me very happy. (And it's all about ME, right? ;-) And just cause a fic isn't angstified, doesn't make it fluff in my book - there's too much subtly shaded depth here to relegate it to the silly fluff pile. Language like this: the hypotenuse of his freckle triangle and this: She likes him drowsy and uncensored like this, completely himself are also point enough. Just a lovely, warm, intimate little gem.
Date: June 16, 2008 06:22 am Title: but i know it's got to be you
mmm... fluffy fluff-fluff. Sleepy!Jim is yummy.
9 [Report This]Date: June 16, 2008 05:32 am Title: but i know it's got to be you
Unfold, your stories, whatever the mood, are always so beautiful. I love the feel of this fic--very cozy and romantic and melancholy. She likes him drowsy and uncensored like this, completely himself. So pretty. *sigh*
Date: June 15, 2008 10:47 pm Title: but i know it's got to be you
I love pointless fluff. This one especially.