8 [Report This]Date: August 26, 2008 10:30 pm Title: Aisle Five
Since I'm late reading and reviewing this, I hope your heart is feeling better by now.
This was a nice look inside Angela's gruff exterior to her sensitive center. I love that she still feels Sprinkle's spirit. I swear I can feel my late dog's spirit myself.
Great job.
10 [Report This]Date: June 21, 2008 03:49 am Title: Aisle Five
Well, the 'research' definitely paid off, because it made me think 'wow, that's exactly how shaving cream sounds when you pop the lid off, and I never would have thought to describe it that way'.
The imagery was awesome. I love the bittersweet melancholy of it, and the awesome little details, like that they would go grocery shopping so far away just so that they could do it together. And that she doesn't associate the memory with itself, she associates the memory with the memory of TELLING him the memory. Awesome.
Author's Response: Thank you! :) Glad you liked it (and, once again, happy my "research" paid off).
Date: June 18, 2008 12:37 pm Title: Aisle Five
That was lovely. Poor lonely, stubborn Angela. You really captured her duality well.
Author's Response: Thank you. :) Her duality is what I love best.
10 [Report This]Date: June 18, 2008 12:14 pm Title: Aisle Five
First off, I approve of your extensive research- I always google to make sure stores are really in Scranton before I mention them in fic, so I understand the impulse! More importantly, I love this tiny character study, how all the details fit into the frame of what we know about Angela and what we know about break-ups and somehow that blends into something that feels totally real. Beautiful job.
Author's Response: I'm glad the research is appreciated because I felt a little ridiculous, haha. And I'm glad you enjoyed this because Angela is my favorite to try and figure out. She's just like everyone else, has all the same sorts of feelings, but she's just way too good at hiding them.
Date: June 18, 2008 05:32 am Title: Aisle Five
Nice job, carbondalien! I especially like these lines:
She doesn't want to be like Kelly, crying under her desk in her pajamas and not being strong.
She just wants to think about groceries and just wants to buy breakfast cereal without her hand feeling empty and pointless at her side.
Author's Response: Thank you. :) I'm a sucker for Angela angst.
10 [Report This]Date: June 18, 2008 04:17 am Title: Aisle Five
happy birthday! I like your angst :) and yes, gunshot is a good uncapping word. Very nice
Author's Response: Thanks. :) I felt a little ridiculous playing with the shaving cream, but it all worked out in the end, haha.
Author's Response: Thanks. :) I felt a little ridiculous playing with the shaving cream, but it all worked out in the end, haha.
10 [Report This]Date: June 18, 2008 12:48 am Title: Aisle Five
Oh Angela, how I love thee. Seriously though, I love your Angela.
the one winter it didn't snow for Christmas and her father let her sprinkle mashed potato flakes around the yard
Loved that. Just one of those rare glances of a real, not made of steel Angela. Oh, and happy birthday!
Author's Response: Thank you. :) I know that this side of Angela is hiding in there. Deep, deep down. But it's there, and I love writing it.