Date: July 24, 2008 08:39 am Title: Chapter 1
Gorgeous and evocative. I like that nothing really happens and it's all down to the imagery and phrasing like "the sticky sound of honey" and "sunlight bleeding red through her eyelids".
10 [Report This]Date: July 20, 2008 11:51 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was wonderous to read.
kissing him like casual and Sunday mornings and hi honey I’m home.
issing him with sunlight bleeding red through her eyelids and that steady hum in her belly is indescribably comfortable. New yet known, like summer; the slip of the seasons from frost to hazy is a worn path of circular motion but each year it seems like she’s never experienced it before.
So cute. So true.
Date: July 15, 2008 04:51 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh, I like this. You had me at: ...and press him flat against the wet walls until it made the sticky sound of honey when he moved and kiss him until he forgot where he was. I also loved this image: That time hasn’t made the air between them rust red and grow mold. Perfectly put. You really made me feel these specific characters, in that exact place, at that precise moment. I love how simple and clear and heartfelt this is - really lovely and so evocative.
Date: July 14, 2008 07:31 pm Title: Chapter 1
I absolutely love this story. It feels like a dream, almost, and there are so many phrases that are incredibly beautiful. I love this: Kissing him with sunlight bleeding red through her eyelids and that steady hum in her belly is indescribably comfortable. SO gorgeously written. Keep it up.
Date: July 14, 2008 07:24 pm Title: Chapter 1
I really loved this, bebitched. Really nice imagery and of course the thought of Jim doing manual labor is hot, so - win, win ;)
9 [Report This]Date: July 14, 2008 02:00 pm Title: Chapter 1
That was really sweet, I really liked it. It was comforting, in a way. Like reading a big hug, haha.
Date: July 14, 2008 07:21 am Title: Chapter 1
It’s different, she discovers, kissing him like casual and Sunday mornings and hi honey I’m home.
That is a great line in a story full of great lines. I love the idea of them navigating this new world of being together, because they already know everything that newly-dating people usually are just finding out. Very, very nice tone throughout.
10 [Report This]Date: July 13, 2008 09:19 pm Title: Chapter 1
Okay, wow. This is probably the best post-The Job story I've ever read. So, so, so amazing. Just...wow.
Really nice. Thank you!
Date: July 13, 2008 05:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
Jim doing manual labor of any sort = win.
(Sorry if you were expecting something more coherent.)
9 [Report This]Date: July 13, 2008 02:03 pm Title: Chapter 1
Simply delicious, bebitched.
My favorite: She couldn’t walk into that office right now and press him flat against the wet walls until it made the sticky sound of honey when he moved and kiss him until he forgot where he was.
10 [Report This]Date: July 13, 2008 01:55 pm Title: Chapter 1
amazing! i thoroughly enjoyed it [and look forward to more!].
great, great work!!!