1 [Report This]Date: March 25, 2023 09:26 am Title: Rainbow
Great setting and a great moment!
Author's Response: Thank you! I jumped the gun a little bit, but I did get the "rain" part right! :)
Date: October 04, 2020 06:22 pm Title: Rainbow
You know, in addition to being quite lovely writing, this is pretty prescient of the actual proposal. Like, this version and canon are definitely cousins.
Author's Response: The rain seems to work for them, doesn’t it? Thank you for calling it lovely. It makes me so happy that you are enjoying my work.
Date: July 29, 2008 12:14 pm Title: Rainbow
My favorite parts of this aren't the dialogue. They're the subtle reminders of Pam's change. I love this, "her love for him made her vulnerable as much as it made her strong" and I love that she thinks in artistic inspiration now. That she considers self-portraits even while musing.
Of course I also thought of Archer when you imagined the sky having a brow to furrow.
Author's Response:
Heh. Just the word "Furrow" makes me think of Archer, but I couldn't think of a better one, so... I guess that's the cross we bear for being Trekkies.
Thank you so much, especially for encouraging me to write and to post.
9 [Report This]Date: July 26, 2008 08:52 am Title: Rainbow
I love it. I mean mainly that's all I can say.
It was wonderful how you portrayed the characters very wonderfully and also how you got the tones of the characters perfectly.
I've read many fics about how the proposal didn't need fireworks or anything. But, the way you showed it, using rain and thunder, it was just wonderful. And you ended the story so well.
I loved it. Pam's answer was, in fact, so nice. I mean, people just write that she can hardly breathe when he proposes and she only has enough breath to give the simple yes. But, you wrote, and I quote, “Yes. Yes, of course, yes.” It was just way too perfect.
I loved it. That's all. I absolutely freaking loved it.
Author's Response: Wow. Thank you so much for the generous praise. I'm so glad you loved it!
10 [Report This]Date: July 25, 2008 09:48 pm Title: Rainbow
Absolutely beautiful. Thank you for posting it.
Author's Response: You're welcome. And really, thank you so much for reading it and liking it and taking the time to let me know. That means a lot.
Date: July 25, 2008 09:00 pm Title: Rainbow
Yay! How nice! Here are my favorite parts:
She was whole, but she was still fragile, and her love for him made her vulnerable as much as it made her strong.
“Pam, when you come home from New York, I want you to come home. To me.”
“I think I can make it three months without you around, Pam, but that’s as far as I’m willing to go. So…”
Nice job! I don't even mind not seeing it; I hope it's happened before the season premiere, and before she goes to NY, just like this. :)
Author's Response: Oh, thank you! Yeah, I'm OK with not seeing it as long as they don't jerk us around and have it be in doubt. Because at this point? No doubt. They're getting married. Heh. Thank you for pointing out specific lines you liked. That's such great feedback. Glad you enjoyed!
10 [Report This]Date: July 25, 2008 10:59 am Title: Rainbow
She had reassembled herself with tears and hope and bravery as the adhesive, and then he had come back and filled in the missing pieces.
That's a REALLY nice line.. and I love this story.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I liked that image- enough to let Pam actually comment on it, heh. I'm so pleased that you liked the story! Thanks again.
Date: July 24, 2008 06:30 pm Title: Rainbow
I love the imagery here! Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you! I appreciate you reading and taking the time to comment.
10 [Report This]Date: July 24, 2008 05:05 pm Title: Rainbow
Nothing makes a thunderstorm even nicer than a little bit of Jam fluff - loved it! :-)
Author's Response: I love thunderstorms, too. Thank you so much!
Date: July 24, 2008 02:12 pm Title: Rainbow
*sniff, sniff*
What a great proposal story. Very simple with the wonderful storm symbolism. I loved the lines about how she moved into the apartment shattered, but was now leaving it whole, with help from Jim. I agree that this can be the prelude to Hugs' summer in NY story. Great job!
Author's Response: Aw, sniffles! Thank you. I just love these two together. I'm so glad you enjoyed it!
10 [Report This]Date: July 24, 2008 02:05 pm Title: Rainbow
I could be doing something useful, but nah, reading this seems SO much more interesting.
Psst - belsum, I like the way you think ;)
Man, okay, I probably say this way more than I should, but I totally just love the imagry in the first paragraph. I can so see Pam on the stoop, her hair in a ponytail coming loose, and the grey sky. Favorite image (since the last time I called something my favorite image) ever!
OMG! Pam's moving out!? So, she's moving in with Jim....
And I think I need to go kill myself because I seriously typed she's moving in with Roy. Where the heck did that come from.
*boils brain*
Okay, back to story. Jim, happy. Good. Roy, evil. Bad.
Let's focus on the good, shall we?
" the pain was behind them, but they were both respectful of the scars they’d left on one another"
*sigh*
Wait, aww, this is just for a move to NYC? Okay, so, thats kind of first what I thought for the first paragraph. But, then my brain jumped to moving in with Jim, and then the whole conversation that started it all in Chairmodel. Okay, I can still be happy, because, yeah, I know it will end happy. You very rarely make it end unhappy (and when you do you are pure evil).
"She was whole, but she was still fragile," This... kind of perfect.
Man, that was the perfect proposal!
"They’d been through rain and sunshine. Pam supposed this was what a rainbow felt like."
You did it you did it you did it!
I honestly forgot about the rainbow thing until halfway through (after the boiling of the brain), but man, that was perfect.
And, me being pathetic, I was kind of just clapping. But I had to stop so I could type that I was clapping and therefore unleash my patheticness onto the world.
ETA: dammit, I did it again. I wrote Roy instead of Jim. What is with me?
Author's Response: I forgot how much I enjoy your "play by play" reviews, hee! I'm going to update the author notes to give you credit for the idea, because you totally did give me the prompt that started this. So, clap all you want- you're the star! (But, dude, Roy? Really? Stop that!)
Date: July 24, 2008 01:57 pm Title: Rainbow
I'm hoping the documentary cameras were hiding somewhere in Pam's neighbor's yard and we see this proposal in flashback in September. Nicely done, q.
Author's Response: The poor camera crew would be awfully wet...heh, thank you so much. I'm blushing that you think one of my scenarios would be worthy of on-screen treatment! Thanks as usual!
Date: July 24, 2008 01:47 pm Title: Rainbow
I'm going to pretend this is how the proposal went in my 12 Weeks story. OK?
Simply lovely all around. Thanks for the rainy day treat!
Author's Response: That's absolutely OK with me! 12 Weeks is seriously so good, I'm honored! It's been rainy here, too- fluff helps, don't you think? (Thank you, as always!)