Date: December 30, 2009 04:31 am Title: Chapter 1
Wow, this is much better than I ever come up with at 1 am (which is usually something like stupid dog stop barking, i'm tired), but this was a really great metaphor, something so simple but complex.... great job!
Date: August 05, 2008 09:58 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was really nice. I especially like how you chose to portray Karen here. Not bad for Jim, not forcing him to be what he isn't, not a lifesaver that strangles him on the way up but a light. I also like that it a long time and a light for Karen, when all he needed from Pam was a dim silhouette. Again, great job!!
Author's Response: I never saw Karen as someone holding Jim back, I think Jim was holding himself back (although he had good reasons to). I think Karen really was a light, and she could have helped him, but Jim wasn't ready. But all he needed was a tiny signal from Pam, and he was ready again. Thanks for your kind review iheartcreed!
Date: August 01, 2008 06:26 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow great metaphore!
Author's Response: Thank you! :)