7 [Report This]Date: March 24, 2009 04:28 pm Title: Chapter 1
I really enjoyed this. I loved how quiet it is ... just his thoughts and the 360 degrees they turn. Well done!
Date: September 09, 2008 07:46 pm Title: Chapter 1
Lovely work with deciphering Jim's mindset during the "fun" in NYC with Karen. He had a lot on his mind, and some momentous decisions to make. Aren't we glad he made the right choice?
Glad you're back writing, shootingstars!
Author's Response: Thanks so much EverybodyHurts. I'm glad to be back too, and it's lovely to see people remember me :)
Date: September 08, 2008 12:20 pm Title: Chapter 1
I hope writing this got everything clearer in your head about Jim's feelings, because to me you've captured them beautifully. Great job.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for your kind words, I think this did help because my JAM muse has definitely woken up from a summer nap :)
10 [Report This]Date: September 07, 2008 06:42 pm Title: Chapter 1
He glances at Karen and all of New York sparkles in her eyes. For the tiniest moment, he lets himself remember that he saw more in Pam’s eyes on that dark beach than all that this City can ignite in Karen’s.
Karen is right, there are too many people in Scranton and yet he realises, with a sudden clarity, that there will always be one too many people, no matter how far they run.
He’ll always see her face in the crowd because he’ll always be looking for it.
This is simply beautiful and so well written. I believe it captures Jim's feeling so accurately. The above are 3 of the passages that made this story so poignant. So well done. Thank you.
8 [Report This]Date: September 07, 2008 06:14 pm Title: Chapter 1
So very much to love about this story, but these lines really spoke to me:
"Karen is right, there are too many people in Scranton and yet he realises, with a sudden clarity, that there will always be one too many people, no matter how far they run."
and
"He’ll always see her face in the crowd because he’ll always be looking for it."
So beautifully written.
Author's Response: Thanks so much Kaystar, those lines are pretty much what this entire thing was structured around so I'm glad they worked for you.
Date: September 07, 2008 04:54 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is a terrific glimpse into Jim's mind. I love that he thought he saw her, and Wild thoughts of her following him to New York and kissing him in Times Square dissolve and he is left with reality, with the tangible feeling of Karen’s hand in his. He gives her hand a squeeze and tells himself it’s enough.
And this:
He doesn’t want to see her in a thousand strangers’ faces. He wants to see the real her, the one that laughs in his memories, the one that’s waiting patiently like he never could, at home in Scranton.
Because after she asked him to come back, he'd always wonder what might have been. Fantastic. Nice work!
Author's Response: Wow, thanks so much Callisto. I'm a big fan of your stuff so such lovely comments from you really made my day :)
10 [Report This]Date: September 07, 2008 03:39 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is really beautiful, shootingstars. I will always and forever love The Job because it really was so well done and Jim's face in that interview -well your thoughts just totally nailed it. You could see that he was remembering every little thing about her. Well done.
Author's Response: Wow, thanks very much for such lovely comments. And yeah, Jim's face in that interview, you really can see everything coming back to him :)
10 [Report This]Date: September 07, 2008 03:32 pm Title: Chapter 1
Gorgeous. I was very excited to see that you've ventured back over here, and this didn't disappoint in the slightest. It was so Jim, and in particular, the part about seeing the city in Karen's eyes but it never comparing to Pam's eyes on the beach.. LOVED that.
Author's Response: I am a bad person who forgot my review responses :( Anyways thanks for such lovely comments, this was just a way to get back writing JAM so I'm glad you liked it. I am most definitely back :)
9 [Report This]Date: September 07, 2008 01:34 pm Title: Chapter 1
I really, really liked this. Poor Karen, poor Jim, poor Pam. None of them ever really stood a chance, eh?
Some very nifty insight into Jim's brain!
Author's Response: Nope, they were all pretty much screwed. Thanks so much for your comments :)
10 [Report This]Date: September 07, 2008 01:02 pm Title: Chapter 1
Just beautiful, shootingstars. I really like Jim's thought process here. To me it explains how he saw Pam's gesture (which I frankly found a little timid) -- as her last gasp. The way he understands her is wonderful.
Author's Response: I totally forgot my review responses, I am a bad author. Thanks so much for such lovely comments wendolf :)
10 [Report This]Date: September 07, 2008 12:13 pm Title: Chapter 1
Really lovely, shootingstars. Loved this: He’ll always see her face in the crowd because he’ll always be looking for it.
Author's Response: I'm a terrible person and forgot my review responses. Anyways, apologies for the delay and thanks, as ever, for your comments NanReg :)