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Reviewer: Lissa_Maylee Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: October 14, 2006 08:11 am Title: The Rescue

The casting in this chapter is so perfect!  Kelly as advocate of true love, Toby as hapless joiner of Pam and Packer, Kevin as Fezzik.  I love you. :-)



Author's Response: Yay! Thanks, Lissa ;)

Reviewer: Morning Angel Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: October 14, 2006 08:02 am Title: The Rescue

Ryan is the narrator!  I hadn't caught on to that at all.  If someone wants to do something for true love, that would certainly be Kelly. :)  Dwight and Kevin were very cool together.  Can't wait to read the last chapter!  

Author's Response: Some of Grandpa's lines will make a LOT more sense now ;)  Thanks, Gen!

Reviewer: Jonah5 Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: October 14, 2006 07:55 am Title: Prologue

If Dwight had to make a quick getaway, Kevin would make good, slow bait for his pursuers.

Snort.  That was so good.  Every sentence has these awesome details - I really need to read twice, once to find out what happens and once to appreciate the words.  Outstanding!



Author's Response: Thanks, Jonah5 - I appreciate that!  :)

Reviewer: janelle Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: October 14, 2006 07:30 am Title: The Rescue

kelly was perfect as valerie! i could just see her shreiking her lines :)  and of course toby will want to do the paperwork slowly, because he wouldn't want pam to go out with packer!



Author's Response:

Valerie was the first character I cast after Westley + Buttercup. Kelly's too perfect :)  Thanks, again, janelle!

Reviewer: xoxoxo Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: October 14, 2006 05:49 am Title: The Rescue

When the second message came through, Dwight dropped his lightsaber and pulled his shirt back on.

OMG.  I can't EVEN....

There's so much I love about this chapter - I seriously can't even begin to list them.  Ryan and Kelly.  Kevin.

"Today's Saturday."

"Shoot," said Kevin.

LMAO!

You've accomplished this arduous task to perfection, Shan.  Really, REALLY well done. :)



Author's Response:

Hee! Glad you liked those. I was LOL writing this chapter. Yeah, I crack myself up - I'm a dork. Thanks, Krissy ;)

Reviewer: nqllisi Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: October 14, 2006 05:35 am Title: The Pit

Heeeee. I came back to review this because I was in too much of a hurry to read the next chapter. Anyway...the nightmare sequence is wonderful. Of course it would be Phyllis to call her out like that. Gorgeous!

Author's Response: Thanks! I knew from the start that Phyllis would defend True Love ;)

Reviewer: nqllisi Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: October 14, 2006 05:34 am Title: The Rescue

I love every bit of this- it's fun, and spot-on with the original, and it makes me laugh. But then I get to a line like this: "The place where, in a soft blue glow, he had kissed her, silent and determined."  and I just stop, because that's so profoundly, simply right. That's the best description of the Kiss I think I've read.

Author's Response: Wow, thanks, Lis. I just like reliving the Kiss ;) Glad you're digging the story!

Reviewer: Lissa_Maylee Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: October 13, 2006 10:45 pm Title: The Pit

Yes!  I just keep loving everything about this!  And the dream totally fooled me--I can't believe I forgot about that part of the movie!  I think I need to watch it again.  :-)

Author's Response: Yes! Watch it again! I find once a year is necessary :)

Reviewer: Morning Angel Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: October 13, 2006 08:59 pm Title: The Pit

Poor Jim drunk off his butt!  He needs to be rescued from his slumber. 

This made laugh so much:

"Ewwwwwww! Nooooo, Grandpa, you've got it all wrong! Pam doesn't kiss Packer."

"Why not?"

"Because! She kisses Jim! After everything he did, if she kissed Packer, it wouldn't be fair!"

You have the grandfather and the grandkid down so well. :) 



Author's Response: Thanks, Gen - they are so fun to write. And yes, poor devastated Jim ;(

Reviewer: Leely Signed 9 [Report This]
Date: October 13, 2006 07:36 pm Title: The Pit

I can't wait for the next chapter.  Dwight to the rescue!

Author's Response: Thanks, Leely :)

Reviewer: janelle Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: October 13, 2006 07:16 pm Title: The Pit

i like to think of Karen as the albino. *giggles* i can't wait for dwight to come to jim's rescue :)



Author's Response: That's exactly who she was meant to be ;)  Thanks, janelle!

Reviewer: NightsInAugust Signed [Report This]
Date: October 13, 2006 06:55 pm Title: The Pit

This is great, great, beyond great.

p.s. thanks for throwing IC in there

Author's Response: Heh, that was Andy calling IC students geeks, not me (in case you attended)! Thanks, NightsInAugust ;)

Reviewer: Rebecca Anonymous 10 [Report This]
Date: October 13, 2006 06:36 pm Title: The Pit

ah! so intense, please post the next chapter soon!

Author's Response: It's up, and the finale soon. Thanks, Rebecca!

Reviewer: moofoot Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: October 13, 2006 06:28 pm Title: The Pit

I love you. Six fingers. Oh my God.

Oh, and thank you for mentioning Karen, and making her decent, but still not ZOMGJimLovesHer!-ish.

Stupid JimandPamandToddandAndy. Grr.

I'd say more but I want to read this again. =P



Author's Response: Thanks, moofoot!

Author's Response: ETA: I used Karen as we saw her in the season 3 premiere, before the flirty stuff. Can have Jim getting distracted!

Reviewer: bitterpill Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: October 13, 2006 06:27 pm Title: The Pit

More lovely work.  So funny and charming.  Looking forward to more.

Author's Response: Thanks, bitterpill :)

Reviewer: ElizabethLynn Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: October 13, 2006 06:25 pm Title: The Pit

Dwight to the rescuuuuue!!!

I loved Phyllis as the Hectoring Woman.  And Andy as the Albino.  Hell, I love everything about this.

Look for a shout-out in the "Grief Counseling" thread soon. ;) 



Author's Response: Ah, but Karen was the Albino ;) Yay for the shout-out! Thanks, Beth ;)

Reviewer: pennylane83 Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: October 13, 2006 06:24 pm Title: The Pit

shan, this was just pitch perfect, as usual! I love that the Pit of Despair is a bar. Oh, aren't they always? ;)

Author's Response: It was between a bar and Andy's basement. I figured Jim was more likely to go to a bar. Thanks, pennylane!

Reviewer: Pixel Anonymous 10 [Report This]
Date: October 13, 2006 06:11 pm Title: The Pit

Oh! He texted Dwight, didn't he?  Tell me it's Dwight.  Wait, no, don't tell me..

Author's Response: OK, I won't ;) Thanks, Pixel!

Reviewer: xoxoxo Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: October 13, 2006 06:10 pm Title: The Pit

Yay Shan!  I need to tell you I love you for the following reasons:  1) I am no longer feeling pathetic staying in tonight and doing laundry 2) You had Andy take Jim to The City. 

My evening suddenly has purpose.  I'm on my way to rescue him now - if Dwight doesn't find him first.  :)

All kidding aside - I have to admit my favorite-est parts still continue to be those involving Grandpa.  So perfect!



Author's Response:

Yay! Glad you're still liking the Grandpa bits - some folks think they break the story too much, but I really don't have many more than the movie does (maybe 2).

Did you find Jim before Dwight? ;)

Reviewer: ella eternity Anonymous [Report This]
Date: October 12, 2006 04:01 pm Title: The Perils

PBeesly: But what about the ROUS?

JHalpert: The Regional Office Undercover Spyware? Yeah, right.

 

 

 

oh my gosh.  i can't beleived you worked that in.  i love the princess bride, and the fact that you worked in ROUS's..well, you're a genius.  Bravo.



Author's Response: Thanks, ella!

Reviewer: pennylane83 Signed [Report This]
Date: October 12, 2006 08:35 am Title: The Perils

Yay! The ROUS, that's what I was waiting for! And Roy as the lightning sand? Guh. You are seriously a freakin genius to make this all work. Totally believable. I love it!

Author's Response: Thanks, pennylane, glad the ROUS lived up to expectations!

Reviewer: shannanagin Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: October 11, 2006 07:58 pm Title: The Perils

Wow.

Andy's the six fingered man. Roy's the lightning sand. Angela's the flame spurt. Genius. Genius.

Can't wait to see what you do with the pit of despair.



Author's Response: Thanks, Shan - no pressure!  ;)

Reviewer: Morning Angel Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: October 11, 2006 06:28 pm Title: The Perils

I keep being amazed at how you were able to tie in the different elements.  What a challenge, but you are up to the task. :)  I can't wait to see the clergyman with a lisp show up. ;)

Author's Response: Thanks, Gen :)

Reviewer: ElizabethLynn Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: October 11, 2006 04:39 pm Title: The Perils

Pam felt herself slip just a bit into his dimples.

Watch out, Pam!  It's the Lightening Sand!!! 

 You are a very talented lady, missy!



Author's Response: Thanks, Beth :)  Lightning Sand, indeed!

Reviewer: bitterpill Signed [Report This]
Date: October 11, 2006 04:02 pm Title: The Perils

Aw, so great.  This just gets better and better.  Great job with the IMs.

Author's Response: Thanks, bitterpill :)

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