10 [Report This]Date: January 13, 2009 02:30 pm Title: You Don't Know Anything At All
O I love this story so far i can't wait until you update! Oh and congrats about the wedding! :)
Date: January 13, 2009 01:00 pm Title: Never on the Face
Ohh Pam, let him in! I do love that Pam is getting stronger, but denying Jim just kills me! Please keep up the good work!
Date: January 13, 2009 01:00 pm Title: Never on the Face
Ohh Pam, let him in! I do love that Pam is getting stronger, but denying Jim just kills me! Please keep up the good work!
10 [Report This]Date: January 13, 2009 07:50 am Title: You Don't Know Anything At All
Yay for Pam being stronger and more assertive!! I love how she doesn't give in to Jim and let him take care of her just yet. Sorry about your 13-hour day, but congratulations on getting married in June!! :D
9 [Report This]Date: January 13, 2009 07:22 am Title: You Don't Know Anything At All
Whew. Really intense.
9 [Report This]Date: January 12, 2009 07:40 am Title: Maybe Things Could Change...
I feel so badly for your Pam as she tortures herself. Such self-loathing and despair. Interesting dream sequence. Looking forward to more.
Date: January 12, 2009 07:33 am Title: Is This Who She's Become?
Roy smirked at her as she stood from her knees, gulping water to remove the taste of self-hatred from her mouth. Hard to read but so well written. Very raw. On to the next update...
Date: January 12, 2009 07:25 am Title: Maybe Things Could Change...
I really like this story but hope that you do have Pam start to move away from her abusive situation. It's alittle hard for me to read her being so low and lacking what it takes to get away from that. It's your story though and you do what you want.
Date: January 11, 2009 11:56 pm Title: Maybe Things Could Change...
“I’m all set with that, but thanks.”
Pam's rarely snippy, but when she is...
“You, me, lunch. Seriously. This is important.”
Oooooooh,someone is going to have some explaining to do!
Date: January 11, 2009 11:50 pm Title: Is This Who She's Become?
So the paragraph starting with Oh God almost made me swallow my tongue. I liked you didn't make it traumatic or something Pam saw as a horrible violation, I read it as something she may have resented but did begrudgingly to keep the peace in the relationship. And her passive aggressiveness is still there in full force.
Ugly truth that I believe are in agreement with after reading cheeks flushed and their mouths plumped red? Jim and Karen came into work just after having sex that AM or over lunch and Pam noticed and had to deal with it. Being told about the relationship is one thing, seeing it like that is another, and really it makes me squirm. Poor Pam.
Date: January 11, 2009 11:39 pm Title: She Shouldn't Have Been Surprised
There are a few tiny errors such as 'than' instead of 'then', but looks like you are getting help with such things.
Pam liking her courage for going so far as to buy the pastels but upset with herself for not being able to be open about it sounds very much like her.
Haven't read all you have posted so far but I couldn't go any further without saying that I thought she didn’t want to be the person she knew he would have allowed her to grow into being was a great line. Solid ending to the chapter I think :) Very glad there are two more chapters written already!
Date: January 11, 2009 10:00 pm Title: Never on the Face
i sent you an e-mail
read and get back to me if you like anything :]
Date: January 11, 2009 07:25 pm Title: Maybe Things Could Change...
Maybe she’d just get into her car and drive to California, or into New York City, or maybe Florida. Maybe she’d cut her hair short and she’d wear jeans and cute t-shirts and 3 inch heels. Maybe she’d meet a man who would make her forget about Scranton, Pennsylvania, and Jim Halpert, and Roy Anderson, and weddings and dreams. Maybe she’d really be someone different now.
There are absolutely no words for how much I love the Pam you're creating. I see a lot of myself in her and hope she gets her happy ending.
10 [Report This]Date: January 11, 2009 07:17 pm Title: Is This Who She's Become?
This story keeps getting better and better...
Would she finally marry Roy, and on their wedding night, think about Jim rising above her, his mouth on hers, his body entering hers in a slow, deliberate stroke? Would she have babies with Roy, name them with Jim’s preferences in mind, raise them with Roy, but put the boys in basketball uniforms instead of football? Would she live to an old age with Roy and not care if he went first, but would pray to God that she died at least a minute before Jim because she wouldn’t be able to live knowing he was gone?
... and you keep writing brilliant things that make me want to cry. ;P
Date: January 11, 2009 11:51 am Title: She Shouldn't Have Been Surprised
I like how you're writing the story, but I've never thought of Pam as being physically abused or one to have sex with Roy after those incidents.
but I like this story, so that's okay (:
10 [Report This]Date: January 11, 2009 03:17 am Title: She Shouldn't Have Been Surprised
oh, i loved how you mixed her trying to be strong with his knocking her down, that's great. more of that, please.
i think pam should start to get it in her head that she needs to make jim and karen as unhappy as she felt, or think about it, and then say that's just too much for her. ooh, i have so many ideas running through my head! if you want to know any, please, e-mail me
toyrundry@yahoo.com.
i don't mean to push myself on you but, i love what you're doing. i have some thoughts. :]
Author's Response: Thanks Toyrundry! And you must totally be in my head right now, because the chapter I'm working on now has a lot of what you're looking for :) I'd love to hear some of your ideas, too. I e-mailed you this morning from stjoespirit04@yahoo.com. Thanks a bunch!
10 [Report This]Date: January 10, 2009 08:19 pm Title: She Shouldn't Have Been Surprised
Those first three paragraphs made me ache. I am absolutely loving this story, stjoespirit04!!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review Pam! :)
Date: January 10, 2009 06:35 pm Title: She Shouldn't Have Been Surprised
Just read this from the beginning. This is a tough topic to tackle, and I think you're doing a good job. Very suspenseful! I'm sucked in. Looking forward to seeing where you take this, stjoespirit.
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing NanReg! I know it's a topic that makes most people cringe, but it makes me really happy to know that people still like to read about it haha...
10 [Report This]Date: January 10, 2009 02:56 pm Title: They Hadn't Meant To
I am really sucked into this story. We always saw a tinge of violence in Roy and that's usually where that sort of thing begins, so I hope you continue. I don't think your story is getting wierd...I think it portrays Pam during a time when she backslid a little because she was missing Jim. I can't wait to see where this is going and of course, when Jim is going to kiss all those bruises away!
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing Skeet! I'm pretty sure she's going to backslide a bit (ok, maybe a lot more) but JAM fluff is most likely on the horizon!
Date: January 10, 2009 07:11 am Title: Never on the Face
I know this is a touchy one but I am enjoying your take on the situation.
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, khand! I really appreciate it! :)
10 [Report This]Date: January 09, 2009 03:34 am Title: They Hadn't Meant To
Gah. The part about Pam trying to get the courage to tell Jim was amazing, as was the part about how he kept breaking her heart with Karen. I think this line sums up your dilemma about Pam having more control:
Of course, she was Fancy New Beesley, but she still was weak and distraught Pam.
She's trying to be more confident and independent, as she shows with her nonchalance with the wet towel, but she still needs to feel loved and comforted. Jim can't give that to her, so she reaches out to Roy, who has always been there. I'm loving the quick updates. Keep 'em coming! :)
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Pam! I've got a lot of ideas in my head about this story, so please keep checking for updates and let me know what you think :)
Date: January 08, 2009 09:35 pm Title: They Hadn't Meant To
yes i liked it
no not too weird
advice: i think she should have control, but maybe it might start to slip away the more she focuses on how unhappy she is? idk, this is why i don't write fan fic. (or publish for that matter)
Author's Response: Definitely good advice, Toyrundry! I'll see what I can do ;)
Date: January 08, 2009 09:25 pm Title: They Hadn't Meant To
You're off to a good start, wanna run some ides by me? You can email me, superauntdidi@yahoo.com
Author's Response: Thanks for the review PhillyJim :) And with all the ideas floating thru this head, I'm sure you'll be getting an e-mail at some point, haha
Date: January 08, 2009 08:05 pm Title: Never on the Face
This is definitely going somewhere. Looking forward to more. :)
Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Jimxcoke!
10 [Report This]Date: January 08, 2009 06:15 pm Title: Never on the Face
Hmm...how bout GREAT?? Please write more
Author's Response: Thanks NoFireworks! I appreciate the review :)