10 [Report This]Date: July 06, 2009 09:53 am Title: Lions and Dryers and Dwights, Oh My!
You write Dwight SPOT ON. Fantastic. I loved the Knight Rider scenario, and I loved the awkwardness between Jim and Pam. You rock, sister, keep up the great work!
Author's Response: Should I be worried about how well people say I write Dwight? rnrnThanks for your help and encouragment!
Date: July 06, 2009 08:59 am Title: Lions and Dryers and Dwights, Oh My!
I was so excited to see this update. Love the lunch talk. I am looking forward to the pizza night.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. Hopefully you'll like the next chapter just as much =)
Date: July 06, 2009 07:48 am Title: Lions and Dryers and Dwights, Oh My!
Your Jim and Pam are so cute together, Sally, so adorably awkward. I truly can't wait for that pizza date!
Author's Response: Coming from you that is amazing. So thank you babes. I'm writing their little pizza evening right now!
10 [Report This]Date: July 06, 2009 06:56 am Title: Lions and Dryers and Dwights, Oh My!
Oh, are Pam and Ellie finally going to meet in the next chapter? I hope so! This chapter was really sweet, and as much as I adore Ellie, it's nice to see Jim and Pam getting to know each other on their own. I do miss her though, so I'm super excited about what's next! Eagery awaiting more :D
Author's Response: I'm so excited you're still enjoying this. Pam and Ellie will definitely be meeting soon. I am so excited where this is going. I miss Ellie too, but like you said, it's nice to see Jim and Pam getting to know each other some more. There may or may not be smooches between our favourite couple. So stay tuned eep!
9 [Report This]Date: July 06, 2009 05:25 am Title: Lions and Dryers and Dwights, Oh My!
Love it again! Thanks for bringing Dwight into the story,it's nice to know that even in an alternante universe, JAM would still be good at annoying Dwight:) This whole story is so true to the characters that "The Office" created, I can't wait to see this amazing next chapter!
Author's Response: Yay glad you liked it! I enjoyed bringing dwight in to the equasion. My goal is to make it as real as possible, so thank you for saying you think it is. You just made my day! Off to start writing the next part now yay.
Date: July 05, 2009 11:10 pm Title: Lions and Dryers and Dwights, Oh My!
Is it Wednesday yet? I Can. Not. Wait. for Pam to meet Ellie.
Author's Response: Heeeeeee not yet, soon though -)rnrnGlad you like it, means so much that you review!
10 [Report This]Date: July 05, 2009 10:38 pm Title: Lions and Dryers and Dwights, Oh My!
I saw this on LJ, but I'll review here too! I love the laundromat story (it made me think of that scene at the end of Baby Shower--poor Pam and her laundry experiences), and I also love the moment where Jim gets her a soda. Very reminiscent of Dunder Mifflin Infinity. Can't wait to see what happens next :)
Author's Response: Hehe you must still always review on here =) Yeah I'm trying to bring certain things in to the story to make it more like the actual show. Pam may even get herself a reputation of getting banned from various places lol.First the Laundomat, next Chilis etc =)rnThanks for reviewiiiiiiiiing!!!
Date: July 05, 2009 10:21 pm Title: Lions and Dryers and Dwights, Oh My!
Yay! I loved this chapter and can't wait for the next installment. I'm dying to see some cute Jim-Pam-Ellie interaction :)
Author's Response: Thet'll be lots of that coming up I promise. I can't wait for Pam to meet Ellie either =)
Date: July 05, 2009 09:01 pm Title: Lions and Dryers and Dwights, Oh My!
Super excited you updated this tonight. I love how he's realizing more and more that he likes her. I'm sure the date will go great! Kissing action please!
Author's Response: Heeeeeeeeee glad you liked this. There may or may not be kissing ;)rnrnSo glad you can see how Jim is slowly realising he likes Pam, but he is a guy, so he's a little slow :p
Date: June 30, 2009 01:36 pm Title: As The Story Goes
Awww...very sweet. Hope you update soon! Like now. :-)
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I'm writing now heeee :)
10 [Report This]Date: June 30, 2009 10:54 am Title: As The Story Goes
Love the backstory on Chloe. Love that Pam is so understanding. Just...love everything! :)
Author's Response: YAY thank you. I was waiting to see what you all thought of Chloe's history =)rnrnAre you working on Pam's story ;)
Date: June 30, 2009 08:09 am Title: As The Story Goes
Glad to know the back story with Chloe. Poor Jim--so much bottled up inside :(
Author's Response: I know, poor Jim :( I'm glad you enjoyed the back story, now we can get this story moving for reals =)
Date: June 30, 2009 07:55 am Title: As The Story Goes
I was so happy to see an update. Loved the background story. You did a great job with Jim understanding why Chloe did what she did. I can't wait for more.
Author's Response: YAY I'm glad you enjoyed it and that you appreciated Jim's reaction to why Chloe left!!!! Writing chapter 5 as I type this reply =)rnrnThanks for reviewing :)
10 [Report This]Date: June 30, 2009 07:32 am Title: As The Story Goes
Wow, what an interesting backstory you wove for Chloe, and heartbreakingly real. I liked how once Jim started talking, it all poured out of him. I was reading it as if I was hearing the rush of words. Loved that Pam was holding his hand by the end of it all, and that he called her out on it! Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you so much, that is exactly how I pictured it when I wrote it. Like once he started talking, it all just came out of him, as if he'd been holding it inside for so long and now that he's talked about it - he can't stop!!!!rnrnYou're awesome, thanks!!!
Date: June 30, 2009 07:25 am Title: As The Story Goes
I'm glad you put the whole backstory in here, I wondered. And it's very believeable. Please continue.
Author's Response: Thank you. That was my main thing with this story. I wanted it ALL to be believable and for you to be able to put yourself in Jim or Pam's shoes =)
10 [Report This]Date: June 29, 2009 09:16 pm Title: As The Story Goes
This story is really really good!
Author's Response: Thank you SO much. It really means a lot to know people are reading liking it and taking the time to review-)
Date: June 29, 2009 08:39 pm Title: As The Story Goes
Again. Wonderful. This was great. I mean, thank you. Your story is awesome and I am always so excited to read a new chapter. Clearly I've had questions, and felt like I needed to know what happened to Ellie's mom. You did such a beautiful job explaining what happened to Chloe. Thank you.
I actually feel bad for the mean thoughts I directed toward Chloe in the earlier chapters.
I loved, loved, loved, loved the way you had Jim tell Pam the story of he and Chloe and Baby Ellie. I mean, I feel like I could see it, both the scene of he and Pam at lunch, as well as he and Chloe, struggling with her illness, their relationship and the unexpected pregnancy. I am happy that you didn't make Jim extra bitter about the situation with his ex. He realizes that she is sick, and doesn't blame her for something that is clearly beyond her control. And... she gave him a gift, Beautiful Baby Ellie. He wanted kids, she knew that, and now he has his daughter.
And how awesome is Pam? I am glad that Jim has made such a great friend!
{Hand to my chin, moved straight out toward you}
Thank you. (I sign a little, just something else that made me love your story from Chapter One}
Author's Response: If there were an award for the best and most sincere review, it would go to you. You have literally reduced me to tears lol. Thank you so much for you kind words about my story, I cannot tell you how much I appreciate it. I knew everyone would be wondering about Chloe, and you weren’t the only one to wish bad things to happen to her. rnrnI was really debating whether to have Jim tell Pam, or to have a flashback to Chloe, but this just worked out better – and I’ve not ruled a flashback chapter out just yet. I’m glad you liked how Jim wasn’t angry and bitter about Chloe, sure he’s upset, but he knows that whatever Chloe is fighting isn’t her fault. And you’re right, she gave him the best gift in the world, something he wanted more than anything – Ellie. rnrnI hope everyone else has picked up on these little things like you. I wanted the shift at the end of this chapter to get you thinking. Jim’s just opened up to Pam, it‘s obvious that they like each other – what could happen next =)rnrnStay tuned and eeep thanks again!!!!!!rn
Date: June 29, 2009 07:52 pm Title: As The Story Goes
Aww too short of a chapter! I feel they're SO close to something happening between them. Can't wait to see what happens now. I could see Ellie just loving Pam.
Author's Response: Heee I know. I'm sorry it was so short, I just felt as though his explanation needed it's own chapter. My other updates will be back to my usual length :)rnrnBe prepared for lots of adorable Jim, Ellie and maybe some Pam thrown in ;)
Date: June 29, 2009 07:24 pm Title: As The Story Goes
ahh i love this story. thanks for giving us jim's background in this chapter!
Author's Response: Eeep coming from you babes, that makes me want to cry, so thank you.rnrnI hope I did justice to Chloe and Jim's history, there is obviously much more to come but I felt as though that bit just needed to be seperate, you know?rnrnGlad you enjoyed it. Thank you again!
Date: June 29, 2009 07:20 pm Title: As The Story Goes
The explanation defenitly needs it's own chapter. Plus while I'm not complaining about long updates, I do like shorter ones because they tend to be a little more centered and tightly written. The explanation was great, completly beliveable. And for the unbeliveable (like someone leaving both Jim and a hearing impared baby)I'm sure that was pretty hard to do, so kudos for that!
Author's Response: Thanks. I'll explain this later, but Chloe doesn't even know about Ellie's hearing yet. Like my friend's kid, Ellie failed the test at birth, but that is fairly commin in children, even ones who have perfect hearing, so they need to get re tested after 6 or so weeks.rnrnThank you so much. I really appreciate the reviews, especially for this chapter. I can see it so perfectly in my head and have SO much ready for the next part!
Date: June 29, 2009 07:14 pm Title: As The Story Goes
mmmmm away we go :) yes that DVD day will be a special one..
another good chapter :) hearing the backstory was great, can't wait to hear more Ellie
Author's Response: I know right? I'll watch it about a million times.rnrnI needed to get the backstory out to make room for the real story, so I hope I did it okay. It was a hard chapter to write, and I hope you felt the sudden shift between them at the end.
10 [Report This]Date: June 29, 2009 06:54 pm Title: As The Story Goes
Fantastic chapter! I loved the ending, and the gradual ability for him to open up but Pam to open up in her own way! Great job as usual!
Author's Response: Thanks so much babes, and for listening to me talk this chapter through about 800 times. I hope people feel the change at the end like I hoped =)
10 [Report This]Date: June 27, 2009 05:35 am Title: The Telling Of The Tale.
I just love this story so much.
I have a feeliong that Ellie and Pam are going to get along just fine.
Author's Response: Thanks for reading and taking the time to review, it means a lot.rnrnI cannot wait for Pam and Ellie to meet, I think you're all going to go nuts with what I have planned =)
10 [Report This]Date: June 26, 2009 10:05 pm Title: The Telling Of The Tale.
This story is shaping up REALLY well! I appreciate the effort you are clearly making into grounding the details in reality. Not just the details about Ellie's hearing deficit but the way the characters interact with each other. The way Jim and Larissa dance around each other, the hesitancy on both sides for Pam and Jim. I especially like the way you emphasize the physical aspect of communication between Jim and Ellie. (Like last chapter, when she was fiercely signing Daddy, Daddy, Daddy. And, at the beginning of this chapter, when Jim balls his fists and rubs them on Ellie's chest as he tells her that she needs a bath.)
Don't worry about the long wait between chapters. It's far better to be a GOOD writer than a FAST one!
That said, I'm very much looking forward to the next chapter. I want to find out if old Chloe has any redeeming qualities ... How the heck Jim was able to AFFORD nine months of unemployment (at least I think that's what you were implying when you said he was so happy to have some adult interaction at work after nine months with just Ellie) ... and, of course, learning more about Ellie's condition and how it affects their daily life. I know I won't just be entertained by this story but informed, also.
I find myself wondering whether you are sharing this story with the friend who inspired it.
Author's Response: Wow, coming from you… you don't understand how awesome that feels, so thank you SO much. I really appreciate everything you have said and it means so much to me.rnOne of the reasons it takes me so long to write each chapter is because I want it to be as real as possible and I’m really happy people are commenting on that. I can see everything so perfectly in my head and I hope I have written it so that you can all picture it with me =)rnrnI hope you all like what I’m doing with Chloe – I’m 1000 words in, so I’m already off to a good start eep. Regarding Jim being off work for nine months, I will go in to that a little more over the next couple of chapters, but I had it that he went back to work and shit hit the fan basically – so he was given paternity leave =)rnrnI really want to share this story with my friend – she knows I’m writing it but I’m worried what she’d think. I know she’d like what I’ve done with Ellie. So maybe I’ll be brave and email them over to her =)rnrnThanks again xxrn
Date: June 26, 2009 07:02 pm Title: The Telling Of The Tale.
Add me to the list of those still with you and anxiously awaiting your next chapter. I'm curious about something, though. I remember you said you were inspired to write this because of your friend's little boy. Obviously a lot of research and time and tender loving care went into this. I'm wondering if this is emotionally taxing for you to write, or is it maybe cathartic? I'm thinking this can't be the easiest thing for you to do. That being said, I'm so glad you're sharing this with us. It's lovely.
Author's Response: Thank you, I am honestly so touched by the amazing feedback this story had recieved and that you are all still with me. I am already writing the next chapter =)rnrnIt is very difficult writing this, because I know how much pain my friend has gone through, but at the same time her little boy is just as awesome as Ellie and he is her reason for getting up in the morning - so in that respect, it's also really fun and somewhat of an honour to write about, you know? I remember how freaked out my friend was when her son's aids stopped working, and all the new little things you have to learn when becomming parents to a child with special needs. I hope I'm doing my friend, and everyone else in this sort of situation justice.rnrnThank you for such a lovely review!