Date: August 19, 2009 12:48 pm Title: 5:35 AM
*bites nails* Anesthesia? Placenta abruption? Maternal bleeding? *faints*
P.S. - Update soon. And don't forget that happy ending!
Date: August 19, 2009 11:44 am Title: 5:35 AM
Omg, poor Pam and Jim!
I really love this story. It's well-written, the characterization is great, and I like how you can include little bits of humor even in the midst of all the chaos ("I don't want my kid to be a four-eyes") - it stays very true to the spirit of the show.
Update soon, please! xoxo
Date: August 19, 2009 04:39 am Title: 5:35 AM
you're doing great with this, keep it up :)
9 [Report This]Date: August 16, 2009 06:01 pm Title: 5:06 AM
Dr. McNulty & Nurse Mindi sound wonderful! I enjoyed the Jim and Pam's bantering and lightheartedness of this chapter. I have a feeling you're lulling us into complacent before hitting us with the serious stuff.
Author's Response: yes.... yes i am. it all ends happily though.
9 [Report This]Date: August 16, 2009 06:01 pm Title: 4:28 AM
It's not bad or, clunky, as you'd put it. Little moments are needed to set up bigger ones so it's actually a good thing you're not rushing and providing details.
Date: August 15, 2009 05:27 pm Title: 5:06 AM
So far the best chapter yet, you're writing them so perfectly in character that I can see it all in my head =)
I hope they stop her contractions - ohhhhhh the drama :)
9 [Report This]Date: August 13, 2009 05:42 pm Title: 4:28 AM
I know you said you had trouble with this chapter, but I think it was pretty good - it needed this, something to connect it to the rest of what you are going to write, which, by the way, I can't wait to read. Great work so far. Looking forward to more!
Date: August 13, 2009 04:00 pm Title: 4:28 AM
wow, this is a great story, i love it! nice details and descriptions (sorry, they're very similar!) and i love the characters' names. i can tell jim is going to be a great help to pam in the near future. great job flonkertonchamp! (btw, i love your pen name!)
Date: August 13, 2009 02:56 pm Title: 4:28 AM
I can so see Jim getting all grrr with the lady on reception, loved loved loved!
Really hope Dr. McNulty can help :(
10 [Report This]Date: August 12, 2009 02:56 am Title: 4:03 AM
I used to be scared of Heffalumps when I was three or four. I was an easily frightened child. Hahah.
Anyway, this is a really cool story! I'm looking forward to the next chapter. :)
Date: August 11, 2009 05:00 pm Title: 4:03 AM
This is very interesting, the idea that Pam might have a difficult birth. But I'm glad that you said there's going to be a happy ending. I like knowing what I'm getting into ;o)
Also, I love the fact that Jim's & Pam's kid is a boy. I think this is the first fic I've read where it is so. Looking forward to more
Author's Response: i actually WAS going to make it a girl... but yeah, all the other fics i've read, they've had a girl, so i thought i'd switch it up. that, and i like the idea of a "mini-jim"!
Date: August 10, 2009 10:58 pm Title: 4:03 AM
wait, how is this a happy ending. you must not be done yet. please give me another chapter, i'm so worried about this overly realistic (in a good way) pam!
Author's Response: it says in the "story notes" that this is a work-in-progress. yes, there will be more chapters.
Date: August 10, 2009 06:40 pm Title: 4:03 AM
aww i really liked this :) i thought it was believable, and i can't wait for more.
10 [Report This]Date: August 10, 2009 12:22 pm Title: 4:03 AM
I'm excited to see the next update! I'm a pretty weird girl in that *whispers* I kinda like angst. :)
Date: August 10, 2009 08:36 am Title: 4:03 AM
Very well written. Your ability to write Jim and Pam honestly - with things that real people would say in the moment - is what kept this from slipping into melodrama. It's such a fine line to walk and you're doing a great job. I can't wait for the rest!
Date: August 10, 2009 06:42 am Title: 4:03 AM
That was so well written, I can't wait to see where you go with this. I loved little J.D aw - I'm eager to see what happens to Pam and the baby, and how will Jim cope?:(
Update soon!
Date: August 10, 2009 06:07 am Title: 4:03 AM
Should I feel guilty that I really liked this when everyone is so excited about the happiness surrounding baby Halpert? No! It's all good :)
This was really well written and paced and I can't wait to see where you go with it. I just hope it's not toooooo sad/dramatic - there's only so much a girl can take concerning this fictional baby! :D
Author's Response: don't worry... it'll be scary for awhile, but it all ends happily.