Date: January 28, 2010 02:58 pm Title: The Second Girl
Hope you're still considering finishing this!
10 [Report This]Date: October 27, 2009 12:05 am Title: The Second Girl
keep going! this is soooo good :D i'm so happy i found it again
Date: October 13, 2009 06:17 pm Title: The Second Girl
this is gittin good. i thought i wouldn't like it but im actually looking forward to the next chaper
10 [Report This]Date: October 08, 2009 08:07 pm Title: The Second Girl
please, PLEASE keep going.
Date: October 05, 2009 11:05 am Title: The Second Girl
This isn't exactly how I would have imagined Jim's sexual history, but it's insanely entertaining. Hot and funny. And a little disturbing, which isn't always a bad thing.
I really appreciated the first chapter, because your dialog was perfectly in character, so I didn't have any problems believing these are Jim and Pam. You set set the stage for his "obsession" pretty believably too, so while this might not be "my" Jim, I'm willing to go with it for now.
The first girl... I have to say, I don't remember 18 old boys being that good at sex. :) And he shouldn't have pushed the girl if she was uncomfortable, but at least he wasn't too pushy.
Second Girl feels like a transitory chapter and I'm really looking forward to seeing where you take this. Plus I'm totally addicted to Jim/Pam sex, so if you give me one more version of their first time, I'll love you forever.
Author's Response: Thank you!! Very much appreciated.
Yeah it's not how I pictured Jim's sexual history either until I started writing. I mostly just wanted to write a threesome fic and then the floodgates opened. I'm still not sure where all this is coming from. My husband is a little concerned...LOL!
You know what's interesting? I honestly didn't see that scene as him "pushing" the girl until you just pointed it out. I was so fixated on Jim's almost frantic need to just "get this done already" that I never really considered that he was being too pushy with her. Hmm...interesting. Eye opener for me.
Oooh...a version of their first time? Don't know if I'm THAT brave yet. Perhaps. But I will for sure write more Jim/Pam sex of some sort. I kind of have to, right? It would be really crappy of me to go all this way and end it with them at Bible study or something ;)
Date: October 04, 2009 01:15 pm Title: The Second Girl
Wow! I REALLY love what you're doing with this story. It may be OCC for Jim but it's HOT.
Please update soon!
Author's Response: Thank you kindly, especially for the "hot" comment :) I will try to update soon.
Date: October 04, 2009 11:04 am Title: The Conversation
It's a different take on Jim but I'm liking where you're taking this. Can't wait to read more!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you're enjoying it. I'll try to update soon.
Date: October 04, 2009 09:46 am Title: The Second Girl
Oh, one more thing: I'm 31 (Jim's somewhere 28-31, right?), and I don't think people even 4 or 5 years younger really get that there was NO easy access to porn or information other than other people or parent's magazines or siblings, so you weren't exactly online with a thousand other teenagers talking about the same thing Jim is thinking. And this is all before the whole talking about sex in public became more common- I mean, this is YEARS before the Monica Lewinsky thing (which I think really blew the doors open). Just wanted to mention this is way more like how I was as a teenager than getting 24/7 porn off the computer in my bedroom that my younger cousins always had.
Author's Response: Amen! This was a HUGE part of the point I was trying to make with that chapter. I'm nearly 36 and I completely agree...finding porn was akin to finding a needle in a haystack when we were kids. If we weren't lucky enough to find some adult's porn stash, we were limited to that cable porn channel that didn't quite come in, but if we stared at the screen long enough and unfocused our eyes, we could MAYBE see a boob. And OCCASIONALLY we'd hear a few seconds of moaning.
These kids today have it soooo easy ;)
10 [Report This]Date: October 04, 2009 09:42 am Title: The First Girl
PLEASE take this as a compliment.
Jim hadn’t been this happy in years
LOLOLOLOL infinity! This probably describes every male who has started having sex in high school with someone as enthusiastic as he is. Also? I've always planned to nail shut every window in the house if I have teenagers. And deadbolt all the doors while owning the only key (hopfully the house won't catch fire or there'll be trouble).
Poor Jim. Probably the most traumatic thing that can happen to anyone is trusting someone to just listen and then being someone else thinks the worst things you think about yourself.
By the way, this is pretty great. A lot of it is OC, but the wording of the thoughts and dialogue are still pretty Jim-ish. I have no idea why you don't have more reviews...
Author's Response: Thank you for the compliments...much appreciated. I totally agree about the "happy in years" comment. That line struck me funny when I wrote it, because yeah, duh!, of course he's happy. He's 18 and he's having regular sex - LOL!
I definitely struggled with the OC element when writing. But I think we're all a little "OC" when we're teenagers vs. how we are as adults. I started seeing teenage Jim as a confused, hyper kid who, through various experiences in his youth, was forcibly calmed down into the low key guy we know today. I think he's starting to show more of the Jim we know in my "The Second Girl" chapter. Although some of the innner monologue and the swearing is still pretty OC.
8 [Report This]Date: September 17, 2009 12:34 am Title: The Conversation
Holy shit, the word 'threesome' KICKED me in the face, I was waiting for it..waiting for it..and then BOOM. How awesome, your build up was wonderful, I'm jealous!
Please update soon, there is a reason to be on here again :) i like different kinds of jim, and i hope you show a different side of the sexy beast.
Author's Response: Excellent! That's the reaction I was hoping for. I hope I didn't bruise your face too much ;)
I believe you will see a different side of Jim in the coming chapters. Stay tuned!
Date: September 16, 2009 09:19 pm Title: The Conversation
I have to admit, with this scenario, I was sort of expecting pure smut, but you have really good dialogue. Nice job! I hope you keep going, though I am absolutely terrified to find out who they will choose for the threesome, if the cast of the Office are the only choices
Author's Response: Oh thank you. I was quite nervous about the dialogue because it felt rushed to me, so I'm glad you like it. As for the smut, in the words of Mr. Halpert "Well, that's coming. And when it happens, it's gonna kick your ass". Not really, but it IS coming.
6 [Report This]Date: September 16, 2009 05:35 pm Title: The Conversation
I really enjoyed this chapter. I really enjoy the side of Jim that you showed. Please update real soon. :)
Author's Response: Aww thank you! I really appreciate that. I have Chapter 2 about half way finished. I hope to have it posted soon.