1 [Report This]Date: September 18, 2018 08:11 pm Title: these are the first hands to tremble in my hold
Aye aye aye. What wonderful playful, sexy, tender, sentimental loveliness this is! I love how Jim goes from being so worried about his pregnant wife and unborn baby to also realizing they're not glass! And Pam being semi-annoyed, semi-thrilled at this reaction from Jim is 100% spot on. The undercurrent peaches "motif" is delightful. Really wonderful storytelling, imagery, and sensuality here. Thank you!
10 [Report This]Date: May 28, 2010 02:59 am Title: these are the first hands to tremble in my hold
ishkabibble......
that's the word i use when there simply are no words.... i love love love this. i actually added it to my favorites back when it was first posted, and i could've SWORN i reviewed, but i guess i didn't.
yay for honeymoon smut!
10 [Report This]Date: October 28, 2009 05:16 pm Title: these are the first hands to tremble in my hold
WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW WOW. WWWWWWOOOOOOOOWWWWWWW!
that was fun. whew. amazing chapter. please don't hide in your corner curled up in a ball. how else would you be able to watch me cheer and say: A-W-E-S-O-M-E awesome, awesome is what you are......... (i can't remember the rest. lol)
but really, that was AWESOME. and i've noticed how ye old office-ites love to say 'awesome'. i mean awesome blossoms, high school awesome cheers.
and this story, was the third awesome. wow that was cheesy, but really honest to goodness true.
very fun reading... nice work!
Author's Response: This review put a gigantic smile on my face. I'm glad you found my fic so AWESOME! And thanks so much for taking the time to review; it means a lot to me.
10 [Report This]Date: October 28, 2009 08:17 am Title: these are the first hands to tremble in my hold
Wow! That was a well balanced hot/fluffy/funny fic. Enjoyable and very well done! Thanks for sharing that. =)
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad you thought the balance was right; I worked for a while on that. :)
Date: October 28, 2009 07:41 am Title: these are the first hands to tremble in my hold
First of all, thank you for posting this here as well as on LJ. I don't have a LiveJournal account and didn't want to leave an anonymous review, so you posting here give me an opportunity to tell just how good I think your story is.
In a word, it's good. Reading it, I really got the sense that you put time and effort into making everything work, that you really thought about what to write and how. The story just flows so effortlessly and the writing is precise and good. No false steps, here, in my opinion.
Others have pointed out that this is a perfect combination of hot and tender, urgent and funny. And they're right. The blueberry bit is fantastic. I also like the moment just before that: Jim's protective instinct kicking in and Pam being a little sarcastic about that, but at the same time no doubt appreciating it.
You take your time getting to the sex and that's exactly as it should be. The pacing works pretty much perfectly.
The smut itself is delicious, of course. Their level of intimacy and how comfortable they are with each other is touching, and so it's believable that those things would also help them have a very good sex life. I love how you combine rough and "dirty" (for lack of a better word) with loving and fluffy.
So, all in all, a honeymoon smut that's definitely going into favorites!
PS. I really liked your other Office stuff too. In fact, I missed two buses yesterday reading the Karen/Pam stories. TWO! It's the weirdest thing, I keep telling people I'm strictly a canon girl, and yet I keep finding writers who are good enough to sell me almost anything. I know Pam isn't gay, probably not even bi curious. But if she were, she'd totally hit that. Ditto for Karen. And you did such a great job of changing that one thing about them, while keeping them otherwise essentially the same characters, that I completely believed that if they were gay/bi they could have a great relationship and it could be just the kind you wrote. Good stuff.
Reviews aren't supposed to be novels, but I just had a lot to say...
Author's Response: So I basically stared at this for a while because I was totally unsure how to even respond. You have no idea how much this review means to me! I really can't thank you enough for all of your kind compliments and I'm SO glad you liked my Karen/Pam, too.
Anyway, once again - THANK YOU!!! *hug* :) :) :)
Date: October 28, 2009 04:23 am Title: these are the first hands to tremble in my hold
Mm. Good stuff.
This was blisteringly hot - I love that you've shown them really owning it...not timid and so free with each other. Very believable. But moreover, I like that you didn't sacrifice the core of their relationship (or who these particular characters are) for the sake of the smut - the humor, love, connection, support, even their excitement about the bambino - it's all here. So often in fic, it's an either/or situation...this gets it right on both fronts. And well written too...a win, win, win situation ;-)
Author's Response: Oh, wow! What an honor to get a review from you! I love your fic. :) I'm so, so, so glad you enjoyed it and felt like it was in-character. Thank you!!!
Date: October 27, 2009 09:10 pm Title: these are the first hands to tremble in my hold
Wow! No need to be embarrassed. Loved it! Thanks for sharing, and please feel free to share more hotness :)
Author's Response: I have been contemplating writing a sequel about them night swimming like they talked about on the show...but I don't know yet. We'll have to see. :) Thanks so much for reviewing!
Date: October 27, 2009 09:00 pm Title: these are the first hands to tremble in my hold
Spanish adjectives from high school? lol. I loved how totally and completely in character this was. From the moment Jim thought that maybe cursing under his breath was an offense to the baby in the car...to the moment when apparently he no longer had enough presence of mind to STOP cursing...lol. Smutty but still in character. Can't ask for more.
Author's Response: I'm SO glad you thought it was in character; that's the hardest part about writing smut (pun not intended, haha). Thanks for your review!!
Date: October 27, 2009 08:55 pm Title: these are the first hands to tremble in my hold
Hot N spicy :) Loved it!
Author's Response: Thanks! :D
Date: October 27, 2009 08:15 pm Title: these are the first hands to tremble in my hold
Yay! So happy to see this on MTT.
I love how you balance Sentimental!Jim who is will do anything for his pregnant wife (including buying fruity soap at airport prices) with Jim who thinks like a guy. I think 'balls-deep' is my new favorite smutty phrase. Wow.
I also really like how your Pam isn't some china doll -- face it, she didn't get in her current condition by immaculate conception. They have S-E-X.
And since Pam is getting to be more self-confident in her career, you can bet that would translate into the bedroom. She rocked Jim's world even when she had frizzy hair and striped blouses, once she started getting it regular from a guy who was good to her, you know she got her groove back.
Hope to see more from you!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I really appreciate the feedback; it helps me stay on the right track for next time. (And I hope there will be a next time! Haha.) :)
Date: October 27, 2009 07:57 pm Title: these are the first hands to tremble in my hold
Okay, let me wipe the sweat from my forehead! Phew woman, that was amazingly good writing! That was the best smut ever! Now, get up from little corner and write day two of their honeymoon. =)
Author's Response: Wow, what awesome compliments! I'm SO glad you liked it! I'll think about a day two...;)
10 [Report This]Date: October 27, 2009 05:40 pm Title: these are the first hands to tremble in my hold
heyyyyyyyyyyyy bby !!
remember me?
*hint twitter hint*
LOL.
just putting down in words here what I told you already:
MAJOR LOVE FOR THIS STORY.
I quoted it on twitter, as you know.
love you, bby.
write more of this stuff
Author's Response: Yeah, I kind of recognized your penname, considering it's basically the same as your AIM. Hahahaha.
Thank you soooo much! I am so glad you liked it. :)
10 [Report This]Date: October 27, 2009 05:13 pm Title: these are the first hands to tremble in my hold
Wait! I forgot to mention one other thing! This:
Two heartbeats thrum inside of her.
O. M. G.
That's all :D
Author's Response: Dude, it was two a.m. when I came up with that line and I was so proud of myself afterward that I just stared at the screen grinning maniacally until I had to get up and go pee. It was awesome.
10 [Report This]Date: October 27, 2009 05:10 pm Title: these are the first hands to tremble in my hold
YAY!!! I got so excited when I saw this posted. I'm so proud of you. Such an awesome story. *adds to favorites*
I did want to let you know that sometimes, in the middle of the sentence, the line breaks. Like:
Otherwise this kind
of thing would be unacceptable.”
It does that to me too when I post, but I wanted to tell ya, 'cause the story's too awesome to have formatting issues. haha.
Author's Response: Thank you so much, babe! It means so much to me that you took the time to stop and read this. I'm super glad you enjoyed it.
And thanks for letting me know about the spacing errors; I think I fixed them all. :)