9 [Report This]Date: November 07, 2009 10:14 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh...my....gah...is it hot in here or is it just me? Actually, I'm pretty sure it's your story, vicodinfm ;o) I love this AU version of The Dundies (one of my fav episodes). I enjoyed the smut and of course, the happy ending where Jim and Pam ended up together! I even enjoyed the tiny amount of angst because it was bookended by the smut & the happy ending :D
Great job!
Date: November 03, 2009 04:31 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh yay. :) Fluffy endings make my day. So do great smut fics, and this was a great smut fic. Good job!
9 [Report This]Date: November 03, 2009 11:18 am Title: Chapter 1
Ohhh I loved this. I really enjoyed your take on the Dundies – the thought of them having sexytime in the bathroom at Chili's was just hot hot hot, so yay. My ONLY suggestion would be to get someone to beta the fic for you before you post. There were a couple of spelling mistakes, which I just skimmed by, but some people get put off by those and will stop reading as soon as they hit them – and seriously that would be their loss, but I don’t want people to stop reading your stuff. It’s too good for that.
Keep it up and looking forward to whatever you write next =)
Date: November 03, 2009 09:55 am Title: Chapter 1
Vicodinfm: my new drug of choice : D I think it's clear that I'm reading everything that you're writing and liking it. Maybe that's helpful...maybe not. I just really like your style. I like the heat and angst in this one. And to cap it off with fluff? Pretty dang good. Here's where I confirm what a perv I am. This was hot: He was inside Pam. He felt their mixed spendings seeping down her thigh. IMHO very real and very hot.
Date: November 03, 2009 01:55 am Title: Chapter 1
You almost lost me at the 'embarassing' mistake in the very first sentence. See: embaressing. Then favourite had a typo. Joy's in the ninth paragraph should be joys, as the liquid courage does not belong to the joy.
It is a concept that hasn't been done in awhile so it was good to read something different, but reading a mistake every now and then does have the unfortunate effect of destroying the illusion it takes so many more words to carefully construct. The ending was quite sweet, and Ryan's role was very cute albeit relatively inconsistent with the character. Otherwise I liked it.
10 [Report This]Date: November 02, 2009 10:49 pm Title: Chapter 1
wow. that was so much different than i expected! i seriously didn't think jim would have sex with pam... at the dundies... in the bathroom... and then have pam bolt at the realization.
and then i thought pam would pull a jim, go somewhere else, not be there on monday. and of course still be engaged to roy and be quite pissed at jim. but you, lovely, lovely you, vicodinfm, you made my day (more like night, lol!) and decided to make my dreams come true and have her be single.
way to go, i loved the turn of events - great job! i think you should continue, though - because this could be really interesting. i'll even beta for you if that sweetens the deal. please at least consider continuing, though, i think there's so much more you can say!