Date: November 02, 2009 05:10 pm Title: Chapter 5
Dang, think of the angst this would have saved...
Date: November 01, 2009 09:04 pm Title: Chapter 3
I really liked this image:
The car slows at a yellow light that I could've easily made it through. I want more time like this, more time just the two of us.
I like the way Jim almost makes it sound like the car has a mind of its own and slows at the yellow light. But then he goes right on to admit that he wants more time alone with Pam. Nice juxtaposition.
Date: November 01, 2009 08:55 pm Title: Chapter 2
I find this an interesting chapter because I guess I've never really thought about that period of time when Jim must've been deciding whether or not he was in love with Pam. Had he passed the infatuation stage or not?
This was my favorite passage in the chapter:
I can't help it. I just like her way too much, to the point where I'm starting to wonder if I really do just love her yet. Because for me, the feeling of her going anywhere -- that includes her being married -- physically hurts. It physically affects me, and that makes me so nervous. When did I let it get this far? Why is she always teasing me like this? I've always been a sucker when I like a girl, yeah, but I'm a smooth guy usually. She makes me trip on myself, and all these little things about her, and as much as I can enjoy just having a crush on a girl, that's not what this is anymore. Every time I see that damn ring on her finger or her buffoon of a fiance, I feel like it's just a matter of time before... No, it's not a matter of time because she's with him right now. Someone already has her...
Date: November 01, 2009 08:50 pm Title: Chapter 1
Really like this!! I think you do a really good job with Jim's internal struggle. These two lines I especially liked:
She's breaking me apart, piece by piece, just like she always is.
I was drunk on her and she was drunk on pink drinks...
Date: November 01, 2009 07:27 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ouch. S2 had it's pounding of the grief bone, too. Nicely done, yanana.
10 [Report This]Date: October 31, 2009 09:02 pm Title: Chapter 5
I think you blew my brains out! Like I said before, everything that comes off your fingertips makes me so happy. Almost as happy and Jim and Pam make each other.
"Jim, do you know I almost kissed you?"
Oh how I love this. I can picture in my head how she would say this! I read this and see it playing out in my head as if JK and JF were in my head and this is their script.
You are magic. I think I'd give almost anything for you to "Take a Chance" every episode.
10 [Report This]Date: October 31, 2009 08:38 pm Title: Chapter 5
This is such a great story, I love how well you wrote Jim's inner monologue. I really liked it!
10 [Report This]Date: October 31, 2009 08:11 pm Title: Chapter 1
That last part made me tear up, in a totally good way though! Loving it so far!
Date: October 31, 2009 05:26 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ooh, nice work! - I enjoy a fic that makes you hurt ;) Jim hoping/praying that she would twist her ring right off especially got to me :( Luckily, Pam had already come to her senses!
10 [Report This]Date: October 31, 2009 04:49 pm Title: Chapter 5
aww. that was sweet. i just read the whole thing - it was a little slow at the start, but the last chapter and this one were great. nice work - are you continuing? i'm not sure what the status of this one is. i hope you are - this is so good so far! great job!
10 [Report This]Date: October 31, 2009 03:28 pm Title: Chapter 5
Outstanding! Yanana, are my hero. This was just...delectable, delicious delovely. Happy Halloween and all that jazz. You're the best! You're like the 100 grand bar in my trick-or-treat bag :)
Date: October 31, 2009 03:21 pm Title: Chapter 4
ohmanohmanohmanohman...I love this! The bit about the pig? Fantastic! : D I'm sad this is almost done!
Date: October 31, 2009 03:17 pm Title: Chapter 3
Dumb cliffhangers? I hadn't noticed. I'm too busy remembering to breath because of sentences like this:
You make me mess up my words, I feel like my mouth should be on yours; don't you think so?
Date: October 31, 2009 03:13 pm Title: Chapter 2
"Why is she always teasing me like this?" That just kills me for some reason. Poor, poor Jim. On to chap 3...
Date: October 31, 2009 03:08 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh, yanana. You wreck me. ::mental note: remember to blink::