10 [Report This]Date: March 09, 2010 06:29 pm Title: Chapter 12
Oh my goodness, what a beautiful ending. Fantastic job with this story, I've loved every word of it, no matter how painful, sad, melancholy or lovely. Great job, and really, this has been incredible! You've really helped all of us readers to grasp such an awful reality that happens to some unfortunate people through at form that makes sense to us. Nice job, this has all been so well written. I can't wait to read your next story, lizzieloo!
10 [Report This]Date: February 28, 2010 12:25 am Title: Chapter 11
Aww, a kiss! That's exactly what our hero Jim needed! This was a fantastic chapter, and I'm so glad there's finally a satisfying completion to the whole Roy scenario. Whew, you know how to write a mean, violent Roy chapter. I'm giving you a 50/10 in my book for this story - and there's an epilogue!!! Yippee! I can't wait! As always, very well written chapter here, and thank you so much for mentioning me in your A/N, that is so sweet of you! I've enjoyed reading this story so much, so it's my pleasure. I think I'm in love with all the honesty you bring to this story, the bitter truth as to what some people's reality's and daily lives are like. My hat's off to you, lizzieloo!
Date: February 27, 2010 02:11 pm Title: Chapter 11
I'd been following this story on ff.net so this is my first new chapter on mtt. This was such a powerful story and you really did well with a sensitive subject. I'm so glad that she and Jim are safe and happy now! Can't wait for the epilogue. :) this must have been really emotionally draining to write.
10 [Report This]Date: February 23, 2010 07:52 pm Title: Chapter 10
Wow, this story just keeps getting better and better! This was incredible, fantastic job writing and now I'm curious - will there be another chapter assessing the damage? I'm sure the cops are going to be curious about the gun and the bullet wound on Roy, so will there be a follow up chapter? If so, I'm eager to read it. If not, thanks for writing such a realistic story about something that I'm sure is happening out there to a number of people throughout the world and now the rest of us are hopefully a little closer to understanding their experience. Great job writing and I hope there will be another chapter!
10 [Report This]Date: February 11, 2010 09:09 pm Title: Chapter 4
Jim to the rescue
9 [Report This]Date: February 11, 2010 07:05 pm Title: Chapter 1
Interesting, I'd love to see where you go with this. Do you have a beta? I'm only asking because I noticed a few tiny tiny little things that you would have probably missed. It's always good to have a fresh set of eyes read over something for you :)
Date: February 11, 2010 04:45 pm Title: Chapter 9
Oh darn.....Shit. This is not going to be good. GET WRITING NOW!!!!!
Date: February 06, 2010 05:14 pm Title: Chapter 8
That was perfect! I love how things are beginning to (somehow) look up for Pam (and Jim, too!). This was a great chapter, I loved the description and you did a great job jumping from one time period to the next, nice work! I can't wait to see the next chapter.
However, I did spot a few editing errors... The first being a think instead of thing about halfway through, then a too instead of to. Lastly, remember that in a sentence when referring to a character addressing another one add a comma before/after their name. Just a couple little things, but all in all this was really well done!
Date: February 03, 2010 11:56 pm Title: Chapter 7
So lizzieloo, I have a confession to make - after reading the last chapter and some of the comments, I realised that this story was published on fanfiction.net, and if I moseyed on over there I would get to read the rest of the story in one glorious chunk - so I did! It was a wonderful hour or so of total absorption in your story. I just thought I'd let you know so that you know why I stop anxiously waiting for and reviewing every chapter! I really enjoyed this story and I hope you write more :)
from moonmouse
Date: January 31, 2010 06:50 pm Title: Chapter 7
...and now im grinning =]
Date: January 31, 2010 12:18 am Title: Chapter 7
ohh yeah the good part is coming!!
Date: January 30, 2010 11:20 pm Title: Chapter 7
Wow, that was so sweet! It's so nice to know that things are beginning to get a little bit better for them, or at least through their relationship. And as always, thank you for adding reality and not making the finding Roy bit as easy as possible. Nice touches to have them get away for a while.
P.S. I love the idea of Jim rustling through the kitchen, that image is staying in my mind for a little while!
Can't wait for more, this is such a thoughtful, creative and mind-opening story! I love it!
Date: January 25, 2010 02:32 am Title: Chapter 6
Ah excellent, I see you agree with my terms ;) Angst is awesome, it makes happy endings so much more satisfying. Yayyy for Jim the protector! I can't wait to read more :)
Date: January 24, 2010 04:10 pm Title: Chapter 6
=]
aw hero jim. always there.
Date: January 23, 2010 11:23 pm Title: Chapter 6
Oh my goodness, that was beautiful! Actually a happy(ish) chapter for once. Not that I mind the harsher ones, because they show the truth and reality of the story and the issues/problems Pam is having to face... okay... I'm sure you get what I mean! Anyway, I really liked this chapter, I'm so glad Pam is trusting Jim so much, it's great to see that!
I can't wait for another chapter - I love that these are getting posted so close together! And as always, this was really well written (if I didn't say that already!).
Date: January 23, 2010 04:46 am Title: Chapter 5
Oh my god! There were tears in my eyes as soon as you mentioned the tears in Jim's eyes. You keep writing and I'll keep reading, deal? :)
Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading...and it's a deal. The next chapters up for you! : )
Date: January 19, 2010 01:19 am Title: Chapter 5
i love reading this story, u can feel the love from jim.
and him trying to guilt himself *sigt*
somethign else..he know how to make grillcheese sanwish too.
Author's Response: I'm glad you're enjoying reading it all over again! And again, thanks so much for telling me about this site. And thanks for the tidbit about the grilled cheese sandwich...I will keep that in mind for future chapters : )
10 [Report This]Date: January 17, 2010 07:57 pm Title: Chapter 5
That was so sweet and sad!! I can't wait to see what happens next!! :)
Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading! Yes, it is a bit of a bittersweet story. Hope you like the next chapter too! : )
10 [Report This]Date: January 17, 2010 02:04 pm Title: Chapter 5
Oh my goodness, that chapter was perfect. Just perfect. Thank you so much for letting Pam go to Jim, letting him cry, having her believe him and admitting that it truly WAS NOT her fault. This was perfect, and I can't wait for the next chapter.
(I will find a way to give you an 11. Seriously, I will!)
Author's Response: Hahaha, thanks—I'm glad you like it so much! And I just love getting your comments for each chapter...letting me know what worked and you liked and what I could improve on—so very helpful and nice to receive, so thanks so much!!
Date: January 17, 2010 10:52 am Title: Chapter 5
I just started reading this---and wow! Really looking forward to the next bit!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I'm glad you're liking it so far
Date: January 17, 2010 08:59 am Title: Chapter 5
and jim becomes the hero once again =]
Author's Response: Of course ; ) Thanks so much for reading and reviewing!
Date: January 12, 2010 05:50 pm Title: Chapter 4
Oh my goodness. The description of the living room just made me feel all icy and like I was shivering - that's TERRIBLE! What in the world is wrong with Roy? And in that last chapter, where you said that his friends had given him some good advice, that she needed a punishment, I thought he would have done the equivalent of raping her - but to someone you're engaged to. Whatever that ends up being. But really, thank you for not skipping around the unpleasant subjects, I say this at every chapter, but really, it's not only educational, but crucial to the realism of the story. So thank you again, and I can't emphasize that enough. I thought it was very well done when you had Jim remain at the door, and then come and take care of Pam instinctively. The way he expressed his anger seemed so accurate - this chapter was entirely, incredibly well done.
Great job with this chapter, and I look forwards to reading the next.
BTW, I'm looking into finding a way to give this 15 stars.
Date: January 11, 2010 02:55 pm Title: Chapter 4
yay for jim to the rescue =] more please.
10 [Report This]Date: January 11, 2010 02:51 am Title: Chapter 1
mmm yes. this is one of my favorite stories over at fanfiction.net
cool that you're posting it here as well :]
Date: December 27, 2009 06:30 pm Title: Chapter 3
=[ pam pam pam. poor thing =[