Date: October 17, 2006 10:58 am Title: Chapter 1
Awww Pam! I was a little skeptical at first, but the end was fabulous! The seventh "item" was perfect, just the way Pam would do something like this.
10 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 10:53 am Title: Chapter 1
Very clever. I liked the fact that it took Pam a while before she acted on what to do with Jim's possessions. The semi-business tone of the letter and packing list was dead-on for the humor they've shared.
8 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 10:51 am Title: Chapter 1
Love the list. Great job.
10 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 10:49 am Title: Chapter 1
This was adorable. I had a hunch Pam was going to be item #8, but was still so excited when I saw the list.
Particularly loved how you wrote her progression to getting to a point where she was able to open up the bag.
Chapter 2 for when Jim gets the package??
9 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 10:49 am Title: Chapter 1
This is the definition of bittersweet. It is so sad that Jim left these things (Pam included!) behind, trying desperately to free himself. But taking the first step like this, in such a clever way, is very much in keeping with the "new" Pam we're seeing. I love it. You're good at this, Moxie!
10 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 10:47 am Title: Chapter 1
This is so sweet. What a cute, creative way for Pam to try to make contact with Jim again and to tell him she wants more than that.
I hope you continue with this, but it works very well on its own also.
10 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 10:41 am Title: Chapter 1
I know it says complete, but please let us see what happens when Jim receives the envelope, or his response!!
10 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 10:36 am Title: Chapter 1
Awwww, that was so sweet and clever!
Date: October 17, 2006 10:35 am Title: Chapter 1
Aw. This was really, really sweet. The packing list and letter were so in character for Pam. That sort of passive agressive way of going about things. It made me smile. And I'm sure it would make Jim smile, too.
I'd be lying if I said I didn't want to see Jim receive this package, but I also think that this is really strong on its own and I like it this way.
10 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 10:23 am Title: Chapter 1
I loved this, loved that Pam was the unshippable item. Are you going to continue this, have a chapter where Jim receives the envelope? Please?
Author's Response: It wasn't in the original plan, but it certainly open for a chapter 2, isn't it?
10 [Report This]Date: October 17, 2006 10:21 am Title: Chapter 1
Oh, this was good. Really good. So sweet and I loved how she wanted to ship herself! Wonderful work!