10 [Report This]Date: June 24, 2010 10:35 am Title: Chapter 1
This is so perfect, unfold. It's adorable and simple in such a poignant sort of way. Love love love, and your writing style is magnificent. :)
Date: June 06, 2010 09:32 am Title: Chapter 1
I know I've told you this before, but I LOVE the way you write these two. Just beautiful.
10 [Report This]Date: June 02, 2010 08:03 pm Title: Chapter 1
oh wow this is beautiful. You have an amazing breathtaking way with words. The tone was just so rich with happiness but at the same time this romantic and passionate tone as well. I hope I'm making sense. What I'm meaning to say is you're an awesome writer and this is wonderful! *instant favorite*
10 [Report This]Date: June 02, 2010 04:49 pm Title: Chapter 1
I love how she leans against him, knowing that he has her. Just love it.
10 [Report This]Date: May 31, 2010 08:52 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is so perfectly sweet. Amazing job, unfold, for capturing the essence of everything that is Jim and Pam and putting in into a six hundred-something word story. I love those first two paragraphs, with the repetition of 'she is standing in front of his living room window' and her observations. I also love the last three paragraphs, how every kiss is just as important as the one before it because it took so long for Jim and Pam to be at this stage and be able to do that in addition to Jim's constant urge to protect Pam. I think I'll stop trying to justify why I like this so much - but know that this is wonderful!
Date: May 31, 2010 06:21 pm Title: Chapter 1
Lovely. I really like this part: She sometimes feels split in two, trying to reconcile her old self with this new self. She finds the two have one constant: he has loved them both. That thought helps put her back together.
And I bet 'During Jim' is delicious.
10 [Report This]Date: May 31, 2010 03:55 pm Title: Chapter 1
I love early Jim and Pam, and this did NOT disappoint. Beautifully written!!
10 [Report This]Date: May 31, 2010 01:42 pm Title: Chapter 1
Unfold, in case I haven't told you before, I adore your writing style. I felt as though I was there, in front of the window, waiting for the storm.
She likes to think that she did that, that each breath he pushes through pursed lips is because of her just being there. I can envision Jim being so happy, so content that he whistles. That small detail conveys such joy.
Her heart beats like hummingbird wings whenever he touches her. She’s always surprised when she comes out of it alive. Love that.
And finally: She turns her head and finds his mouth. Their kiss is soft, but like always, he gives it this pressure, like he wants to hold onto her, like every kiss is as important as the last, because he is grateful and she is grateful and they are lucky. *sigh* At long last, they're together. I envision them feeling just like this--grateful to have finally found their way to each other. ::adds to favorites::