Date: August 02, 2010 02:24 pm Title: Why can't we give love one more chance?
This is great! I can't wait to read more! Also, I love Dave Barnes and I saw the same video on youtube w/ his song!! I loved it. I always wanted "On A Night Like This" to be my wedding song. Can't wait to read more!
Author's Response: Thank you! Have you heard "L.A. Song?" I feel like if season 3 Jim and Pam were to have heard that song at the same time, it would have forced dams to burst.
Date: July 30, 2010 12:12 pm Title: Imagine me and you
ivy, just re-read again and I just wanted to say again how much I love some of the lyrical passages in here. The writing is so smooth!
This is going to be a LONG date, right?
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He can't help but think that he would never make her walk on a boardwalk if she didn't want to. He thinks he would carry her if that's what she needed, and then he thinks that she completely owns him, and holy God, this better work this time, because he really doesn't think his heart can take another beating.
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Yes, he says with tremendous dignity, and takes a defiant bite from a roasted tomato as sort of punctuation. It's almost like sex -- sweet and pungent, and it bursts softly in his mouth, some of the juice slipping messily down his chin unexpectedly.
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"The turtle," she says, narrowing her eyes to show that he is in no way off the hook about this, "what's his name?"
"Pam," he sighs, and she likes the way her name sounds when he says it, "his name is Turtle."
Author's Response: Long, yes, hopefully! So glad you're liking it!
Date: July 30, 2010 02:22 am Title: Imagine me and you
i thougth he was going to day that the turtle wast goint to reclaim his place...cuz pam suppose to take that place ;)
Author's Response: My hope was to express that Karen would frown on a childhood relic, wanting Jim to grow up and become the best version of himself (as she saw it to be), but that Pam would embrace his past and be happy to explore many possible futures with him. With Karen, Jim had to hide Turtle. With Pam, he wouldn't.
Date: July 30, 2010 02:06 am Title: Imagine me and you
That was so freaking good babes. What you were saying came across and it made perfect sense.
“I just like knowing things about you.” - that line melted me!
Author's Response: Thanks! It felt like something Jim would say. Hopefully it actually is true to character and not just my interpretation of what it would be
10 [Report This]Date: July 30, 2010 01:09 am Title: Why can't we give love one more chance?
Dear "andtheivy",
Please give up your day job and write fulltime for MTT.
Thank you for your consideration of my request,
bcd
Date: July 29, 2010 09:35 am Title: Imagine me and you
There aren't enough words in the English language (or any other language for that matter) that I can string together to tell you how much I love and adore this story. I think someone else said, it's like poetry. I love them shopping in an Italian food market, eating in the park, and I love the addition of Turtle the Turtle is so cute. Her falling through a tree house when she was nine and him saying he likes knowing things about her is just so super sweet. I totally agree with your end note (and Paul Lieberstein) and I love how you conveyed that part of their history into this so subtly. It's purely fantastic and I seriously cannot wait for you to continue. And when it's complete, I hope that whoever gives out ribbons puts one on this, because it's fabulous.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I should probably have said the tree house thing was from personal experience. I'm glad you liked the notion that Jim just likes collecting knowledge about Pam (as evidenced in the mixed berries yogurt statement). I didn't want him to be trying to save her from her fears or some such thing. Thank you again for your thoughtful review. It's so encouraging.
Date: July 29, 2010 08:33 am Title: Imagine me and you
Please give us more of lovely Jim drooling tomato out of his mouth
beautiful...just. simply beautiful
10 [Report This]Date: July 29, 2010 07:51 am Title: Imagine me and you
Ivy, this story just keeps getting better. I read this chap earlier but didn't have a chance to review, so I just re-read it along with the first chap. Your details are amazing--beautiful little touches that bring this to life. In the interest of full disclosure, and to perhaps give you an idea of how much I love this and how much of a geek I am, I actually googled "Doma Scranton" to see what would pop up. I wanted to inhabit this world. I truly can't wait for more :) Oh and you have to update Three Man too. Just sayin' ;)
Date: July 29, 2010 01:10 am Title: Imagine me and you
I love Paul Lieberstein. End of story. And this is the most perfect first date fic I've ever read. A wondeful mix of humor, seriousness and stolen kisses - not to mention unexpected changes of plans that catch Jim off guard and make him positively adorable. Keep going! Maybe they'll take a sweet stroll around the pond? Kiss in the moonlight? I'm just full of these ideas... :)
Date: July 28, 2010 11:28 pm Title: Imagine me and you
Yay! I was so excited to see you'd continued with this story. And what a continuation it was! I loved it loved it loved it! Everything from the kiss, to Pam admitting her fear to Jim, to the little details like the olives and the cute and yet completely spot-on idea of the turtle's sleeping arrangements as a metaphor for Karen and Pam's different views of Jim. I can't wait for more!!
Oh P.S. I downloaded "on a night like this" and I'm completely obsessed! I also play it each time I read this story :)
Date: July 28, 2010 09:08 pm Title: Imagine me and you
This was absolutely lovely. I could totally picture them having this conversation where not that much is actually being said out loud, but they communicate and understand each other perfectly nonetheless. Looking forward to the next chapter!
Date: July 28, 2010 08:01 pm Title: Imagine me and you
This is most definitely one of my top three first date stories. I think this is one of the finest things you've ever posted here, ivy. I love the pacing, the details, the dialogue. The writing is absolutely spot on. I'm hoping for a few more chapters before you decide to wrap this up.
Date: July 28, 2010 07:54 pm Title: Imagine me and you
He knows this, and he feels a pang of regret. He can’t help but think that he would never make her walk on a boardwalk if she didn’t want to. He thinks he would carry her if that’s what she needed, and then he thinks that she completely owns him, and holy God, this better work this time, because he really doesn’t think his heart can take another beating.
^^I absolutely adore that. I can hear him thinking it. And that Paul quote in the end notes made me tear up :)
Date: July 26, 2010 07:01 am Title: Why can't we give love one more chance?
Loooved this, ivy. I could visualize it so clearly while reading. You've captured that breathless anticipation along with a sense of comfort. While it's more than fine as is, I would love to read more. I am such a sucker for first-date fic :)
Date: July 26, 2010 03:32 am Title: Why can't we give love one more chance?
"She raises an eyebrow, loving that they’re allowed to be playful again. There are things to be said between them, serious moments that will be decidedly less blushy, that will give way to hearts racing in a different way, but that will happen in its time, and for right now she wants to enjoy this…sparkle…that’s happening."
I love your idea of their being "playful" again. It's so Jim and Pam...so illustrative of the conncection between them. Just really well done!
Date: July 25, 2010 10:00 pm Title: Why can't we give love one more chance?
This story is already giving me butterflies - I love it so much! I know there are a million first date fics out there but this one seems original in so many ways - the writing not the least among them. I love your style! I, for one, would love for you to continue!
Date: July 25, 2010 04:24 pm Title: Why can't we give love one more chance?
All I have to say is, who needs rules? I'm so glad you have more than one story on the go. I love reading your stories, and to read a first date story by you is just guh!!! That was amazing and refreshing and as usualm so well written. You really nail their chaacters!!!! Cannot wait for the next part!!!
Date: July 25, 2010 02:34 pm Title: Why can't we give love one more chance?
Oh, I ABSOLUTELY agree that this story is quietly but persistently demanding to be continued! This is really lovely, ivy, and somehow has a very different feel than all the other first date fics I've read. I'm really, REALLY looking forward to reading about the rest of the evening.
Date: July 25, 2010 01:11 pm Title: Why can't we give love one more chance?
I adore first date stories so so much! I'm actually thinking of doing one of my own some day. Anyways I loved Jim telling Pam to change, all the blushing and the sweetness of them. The "ready... Ready" part is great! It's so cute and the way you're writing flows so nicely in this story is perfect. Love it and look forward to more of this!
Date: July 25, 2010 12:02 pm Title: Why can't we give love one more chance?
You are a really gifted writer! I just love everything you put out there. Definitely continue. ;)
Date: July 25, 2010 08:32 am Title: Why can't we give love one more chance?
I LOVE first date stories, so please continue!
10 [Report This]Date: July 25, 2010 01:27 am Title: Why can't we give love one more chance?
yes, this should definitely continue!
and “Party of My So-Called Creek Slayer” kind of made my day