Date: February 15, 2011 08:32 am Title: Chapter 5
Sweet ending, I'm glad Pam got to keep Jack and got Jim. I thought though, you could have fleshed it out a bit, but please don't get me wrong. I really did enjoy reading it.
Date: February 15, 2011 05:46 am Title: Chapter 1
As much as I'd like to keep reading, perfect_match, I agree that this is a good place to end. Keep 'em wanting more, right? ;). Nice job!
Date: February 14, 2011 08:54 pm Title: Chapter 5
I'm envious of your ability to write a full story so quickly. This whole thing was really sweet, and I don't think any of us would be opposed to reading an epilogue if you feel like writing one... maybe one with a sibling for Jack. hehe :) Anyway, thank you for sharing this with us! I really enjoyed the whole thing.
10 [Report This]Date: February 14, 2011 08:43 pm Title: Chapter 5
Awww, I'm sad this is over. I'd love to have seen how they cope with becomming an item and Jimtaking on the role of Daddy. Hope you write more soon.
9 [Report This]Date: February 11, 2011 04:56 pm Title: Chapter 4
Love the interaction between Jim and Jack. The poor guy, he was only trying to be honest with you Pam.But he broke her heart once before, so she is no doubt finding it hard to fully trust him again aw.
Author's Response: Thank you Hannah Halpert. I really appreciate how much you've liked this story. I do hope you will let me know what you thought of the final chapter.
10 [Report This]Date: February 11, 2011 01:51 pm Title: Chapter 4
Ah, Jim. Everything was going so well! I like how you softened up Pam, and I can completely see why she would walk away from him in the beginning. I like the slow pace of this, but I do hope there is a happy ending to this in the works. Jack is adorable and really adaptable to Jim over the course of a day. I think these second two chapters are keeping with Pam's character more than the first two. The end of this chapter broke my heart though.
Author's Response: Thanks, Deedldee. Sorry for the sad ending, hope you enjoy the way it wraps up.
Date: February 11, 2011 07:55 am Title: Chapter 3
Excellent that you're continuing with this! I've been busy at work and haven't had time to dig into the archive. Nice to have two chaps to read :) There's a lot to love about this ready-made "family."
Author's Response: Thank you NanReg. I have a clear path for this story and know exactly how I want it to end. I'm very happy to see that you like this. I have more on the way.
Date: February 10, 2011 09:08 pm Title: Chapter 3
I like how you have Jim concentrate on winning Jack over rather than focusing directly on Pam. The way you've written it feels honest, not like he's being duplicitous about it. He really wants to work his way into both of their hearts. The close is just lovely and shows his intent:
When they return to Pam’s apartment after dinner at Chuck E. Cheese, he can’t help but feel at peace when she locks the door behind them, kicks off her shoes and picks out a Disney movie to play. And when Jack falls asleep in his arms, he wonders how he did not have any of this yesterday, wonders how he survived without it.
I just love that image.
Author's Response: Thank you Vampiric Blood. That's what I was trying to get across. I think Jim would seem too over the top if he fawned over Pam too much. I'm glad you thought it was an honest approach to their characters and I'm really so excited that you liked the ending part. There is more on the way.
Date: February 10, 2011 08:27 am Title: Chapter 1
Okay, so I began reading this one and I really like it. It is different and I just love a story that has Jim and Pam falling "back" in love. Hope to see an update soon!
Author's Response: Thank you Dedeen. It's nice to see that you like this so far. I am working on a fourth chapter now. I will try to have it ready soon.
10 [Report This]Date: February 09, 2011 11:23 am Title: Chapter 3
You know, I did think at first that Pam was slightly OOC , BUT then I thought about it, and I actually think she did have a reason to be that mean to him. But even more so because it was so out of the blue. I think this chapter was great, how she was so annoyed in the last chapter, more so because she was so flustered, but then once she had had time to get her head around it, she'd calmed down.
The interaction between Jim and Jack is adorable.
Cannot wait to see what you have planned :)
Author's Response: Thank you Hannah Halpert, I'm sorry that I made Pam too OOC in the second chapter. I dont think I did a very good job of explaining why she was angry in the first place. I should have had a chapter in there from her perspective I guess. Hopefully I can recover and get back on track with this.
7 [Report This]Date: February 08, 2011 04:45 pm Title: Chapter 2
I like it so far. I'll be honest, I cant imagine Pam ever being so bitchy tho...I'm sure she'd be pretty happy to see Jim again regardless of whats happened. Dont really get why she's so upset with him, would be good to find out!
Author's Response: Hi noodles (awesome name btw) thanks for that. I thought I made it somewhat clear why she's mad at him. But I'll try to clear things up in the next chapter. Sorry you thought she was bitchy I thought I was able to tone it down to being just distant and unwilling to let him back in because he keeps leaving. Sorry that message didn't come across here. I'll keep this a shorter story than I initially planned since it's not coming out the way it should. Thanks for the heads up. I'll wrap it with one more chapter. :)
Date: February 08, 2011 12:23 am Title: Chapter 1
I really love this premise! And I like the no nonsense attitude you've given Pam - tough and indifferent, with the hint of a softer interior. I'm looking forward to seeing how Jim wins her trust back.
Author's Response: Thank you Monotreme! That's exactly what I wanted for her, to be strong and unshrinking. I don't want her to come across as a bitch, so it was tough trying to get that balance and keep her characterization intact. I have a lot of ideas for this so I'm hoping you'll continue to enjoy the journey!
10 [Report This]Date: February 07, 2011 05:44 pm Title: Chapter 2
Ooooooooooooh I LOVE LOVE LOVE THIS.The situation with Jack is realy interesting, andI really thought you handled how she behaved around Jim brillintly.
"Jim play..." awww let the man, it will make you fall in love with him Pam :(
UPDATE SOOOOOOON
Author's Response: Thanks Hannah Halpert! I tried to come up with a unique situation that may not have been done before for Jim and Pam to deal with. I'm glad that you thought I handled it all well, I had written 4 versions of this chapter so I'm happy to know you enjoyed it! I am writing the third chapter as we speak, so more on the way soon!
9 [Report This]Date: February 07, 2011 05:28 pm Title: Chapter 2
I am so in love with this story. It has just the right mix of angst and hope. Can't wait to see what happens next!
Author's Response: Thank you BluetimesTwo! I had such a hard time finding that balance of angst and hope so I'm glad it came out well. I'd written four different versions of this chapter, so I'm happy to know you enjoyed this. More on the way soon!
Date: February 05, 2011 10:42 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is an awesome premise!! Can't wait to see where it goes!
Author's Response: Thanks! more on the way soon, nandance. Thank you.
10 [Report This]Date: February 03, 2011 04:28 pm Title: Chapter 1
And here I was thinking you WERE Kelly Clarkson ;)
I LOVED this. I mean, you better update this asap, or i'll cry. I want to know what happens nexxxxt!
Author's Response: Thanks Hannah Halpert! I wish I was Kelly Clarkson sometimes ... who wouldn't want a recording contract and a perfect body. please don't cry! ;) Another update will be around in a few days! :)
10 [Report This]Date: February 01, 2011 11:31 pm Title: Chapter 1
You have my interests piqued! So much so that I will hold out on my chapter of my story until you update. Kidding. But I really like this. Love the way you write.
Author's Response: Thanks italianfood! Very excited that you like this. More on the way soon, and I'm happy to see that you've updated your story! I'm off to read that right now. Thank you for such a nice compliment.
Date: February 01, 2011 05:24 pm Title: Chapter 1
WOW! Pam just walking away! Did NOT figure on that! Very interested to see where you take this...
Author's Response: Thank you Vampiric Blood, happy to hear you're interested in this. I have the end all mapped out, it's just these middle chapters that I'm trying to work out, so hopefully I'll have an update out within a day or two, and we'll find out why Pam got up and walked away. Loving your story by the way, it's epic!
Date: February 01, 2011 05:13 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh, the angst. Ouch! Poor Jim. And Pam. I hope the kid isn't hers... or at least that she isn't with anyone. Wherever you take it, though, I'll definitely read. Great set-up. Nicely done :)
Author's Response: Thank you more awake! I have been tinkering with the middle of this story. I know what the ending is, so hopefully I can work through my flip flopping and post a few good chapters to get to that ending. Thanks for letting me know you enjoyed it! I'm hoping to have a new chapter up within a day or two.
Date: February 01, 2011 01:45 pm Title: Chapter 1
Perfect_match, you're back...and I'm so glad. I really enjoy your writing style. Problem is I have a lump in my throat right now. You're continuing, right?! Please say yes, because this is an excellent start. I'm so not bored!
Author's Response: Thank you NanReg! I'm so happy to hear you're not bored! Sorry for the lump in your throat! I'm guessing I struck a chord with you and I'm so thrilled that you like my writing style. More on the way soon!
9 [Report This]Date: February 01, 2011 01:23 pm Title: Chapter 1
WOW... nicely written. At first I thought this was a one-shot, but I'm glad to see it will be continued. I'm very interested to see where this is going.
On a side note, I read the first chapter of the story about Jim on the bike, it's not up anymore and you say here it won't be finished. What happened? I was interested to see where that was going.
Author's Response: Thanks BluetimesTwo! I'll definitely be continuing this. I was in the middle of the second chapter of the other story that I took down and as i wrote i went off on a huge tangent and this idea was born. It sort of took the other story I was doing in a direction I didn't want it to go in. I probably could have scrapped what i had and just went back to what i intended for the one I took down. I can re- visit the other one after this story but I have a stronger idea for this one now. Sorry for any confusion! Hope you will enjoy this one.
Date: February 01, 2011 12:47 pm Title: Chapter 1
loved it...soo good!!! keep it up!
Author's Response: Thank you johnkrasinskixo! More to come soon. Excited that you like this!
8 [Report This]Date: February 01, 2011 12:16 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow. WOW! Nicely done. The ending killed me. I am very interested to see where this goes.
Author's Response: Thank you ItsOnlyMeredith! I'm hoping to write more in a few days, stay tuned and thanks for such a nice comment.