10 [Report This]Date: May 30, 2011 10:01 am Title: Venting
You're stories are so heartbreakingly beautiful and this one is no exception! I really hope you continue with this because I really need to know what happens to the Halpert family.
Author's Response: I'll continue, no worries. Outlines are all drawn out for the coming chapters. Thanks for reading and reviewing!
10 [Report This]Date: May 29, 2011 07:36 am Title: Venting
Oh wow. I hope you don't leave this as a oneshot because I'm definitely sucked in. I really like that it's written from Jim's POV. His love and concern for his family is very apparent. Cece is adorable talking a mile a minute as she tries to help her mom feel better. As for Pam? Poor girl must be scared to death. And that is why you have to tell us what happens next!! hehe :) Amazing job on this one (as always).
Author's Response: Definitely not a one shot anymore. People would come to my doorstep with pitchforks if I left it the way it is. I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Date: May 28, 2011 07:27 am Title: Venting
Oy, that's painful. My best friend had preeclampsia, it nearly killed her, and she delivered her twins at something like 28 weeks? Way too early. Thanks be to Thor they are okay, but it was months in the NICU and none too fun an experience.
Anyway, I like this, it feels really realistic. It doesn't feel like a oneshot, if that helps you decide, but as one author to another, beware of proceeding beyond what you've done without a plan. :)
Author's Response: I'm sorry about your friend... glad everything is okay!! I'm also glad you are liking this fic too. I've decided it's not a one shot anymore, and don't worry I don't write anything without an outline! Thanks for the heads up!
10 [Report This]Date: May 27, 2011 04:08 pm Title: Venting
No, you should not leave this as a one shot. What a fantastic insight in to Jim's mind. I adore your Cece, and would love to see you continue this.Thatisan order!
Author's Response: Yes Ma'am! I'll definitely be continuing this one! Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Date: May 27, 2011 09:40 am Title: Venting
I definitely want more with this. A difficult pregnancy is a tough one to get through and I love the idea of you walking us through this. Of course my personal hope is for a happy ending.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! I tend to do happy endings, but I haven't finished this one... we see! I hope you stick around!
10 [Report This]Date: May 27, 2011 08:58 am Title: Venting
I love your writing so much - so intense and honest and real life. You definitely need to continue.
And just because I don't want any typos to take anyone out of your awesome story, in the paragraphy where they learn it's a boy, it says "buthe" instead of "but he." Super trivial, I know, but it's such a powerful scene, I'd hate for it to make anyone pause for a second. :)
Author's Response: That you so much for reviewing... And telling me about the typo there. All fixed! And you are definitely right, it takes a bit out when you see a mistake!I will continue this one and I hope to post the next chapter soon.
Date: May 27, 2011 08:46 am Title: Venting
This is so good! I can suffer through a difficult pregnancy with them but then I need a joyful ending. I love to read Jim's thoughts. Please keep it going!
Author's Response: Thanks you so much for reading and reviewing. If you've read my stories (Deedldee has so kindly pointed out how sad they are in the review below) They always have a happy ending. So don't worry, it seems a bit cloudy right now, and there will be rain, but the sun will come out (Cliche, I know). Thanks agains for reading!
Date: May 27, 2011 08:40 am Title: Venting
Holy moses! Are you trying to kill me? You can't leave this as a one shot NOW! I absolutely need to know how things progress for Pam, so you better keep going. The run-on talking from Cece was really great, I like how you've written it as she would have spoken it, I can hear it in my head (probably something I should consider doing for my own story where I'm writing Cece dialogue.) You need to continue this, and I know from your previous stories that I'll end up sniffling and wiping away tears at some point or another during this one too like I did with the Jim's brain tumor story and Pam's memory loss story. Keep going!
Author's Response: Reading your review mada me think about all the 'oh so sad stories' I've posted on this website. Geez... What's wrong with me? I'm a very happy person... I promise! Let's see how this one plays out... Thank you so much for reviewing and go ahead and use run-on sentences for little kids... I swear that's how I hear it in my head when they talk! Thanks once again!