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I'm really enjoying this and can't wait to see where you take this. I can definitely see Pam's anger at finding her fiance in bed with someone else making her react the way she did, and I'm glad that at that point in time she had Angela to call. I'm kind of happy you didn't have her run to Jim automatically in the first chapter. I'm really looking forward to reading this, and I have to thank you for posting it. It's given me the spark to want to continue writing. Looking forward to more!

Author's Response: Oh my gosh, okay I have to say thank you so much because this is a really nice review. But not only that, you're like one of my favorite authors so for you to say it just makes it ten times better! I'm so glad it's given you spark because I need YOUR writing in my life. Thank you so much for taking the time to review! And I'm glad you like that she didn't go to Jim - she always does, and I feel like at this point (especially it being after he had complained about her) she just wouldn't feel comfortable doing it because now she's so thrown back in what their friendship is. Ugh, thank you for the third time!

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Welcome to the archive! I'm going to stagger your story submissions a little, if you don't mind. It's best not to put them all out at once.

I like AU's - interesting idea. Never really thought of Roy as the cheating type but I'm curious to see how you put Angela into the mix. :)

One critique: I'd recommend using 'want to' in descriptive text and 'wanna' only in dialogue. It sounds too casual, I think. Did you get the title from that excellent Jah Wobble song?

Author's Response: Oh, you are totally right. Sometimes I don't even realize when I'm using "wanna" because it feels like a normal word, you know? But I'm definitely gonna watch for that, thank you! And no, I don't even know what that is! It's actually a title of a Kelly Clarkson song, which is an amazing song, but I felt like the title fit perfectly to what I have planned. Thank you! :)