Kinda wish this was a little longer and incorporated parts of their interaction after she left the conference room.

This sentence could use a little fix: "Even now, as she sat in the chair" sounds better.

I hope you find that constructive, I in no way mean to offend. I hope you'll continue writing this, I do love first date stories. And if you need any help just let me know, I'd be happy to beta for you.

Author's Response: ok, you won't believe this, but that's exactly what I was going to put! It was like 2 a.m. when I wrote this...so it sucks. but would you beta for me? That would be SO amazing! Btw, I love your stories!