10 [Report This]Date: November 01, 2006 05:32 am Title: First Meeting
Another amazing chapter. You definitely have a way with Jim and Pam! I really, really liked the bit with the glasses. It makes you wonder what could have been if he'd found her first :). Also, the pacing in this chapter is just spot on- the way it builds while still maintaining the playful, witty banter we've come to love. I love how I can just picture them saying everything you write for them. Just fantastic.
And let me just say I'm very impressed that you can get this done and still have time for Nano stuff. I'm screwed! Haha.
Author's Response:
Thanks pennylane! I was trying to think of something equivilent to Pam finding Jim's yearbook picture - so that he'd have a glimpse of her past too. I'm glad you thought it worked.
It wasn't easy getting this out before midnight last night - but I'm glad I did! Thanks again!
10 [Report This]Date: November 01, 2006 12:28 am Title: First Date
Ooh. Yes. Extremely evil way to end it. I have faith you'll make up for it later LOL.
Author's Response:
My sincerest apologies. I promise I'll try and make it up to you soon!!
8 [Report This]Date: October 31, 2006 08:28 pm Title: First Date
Great chapter. I couldn't have waited as long as Pam did.
Author's Response: HA! Well she's a better woman than a lot of us then. ;)
10 [Report This]Date: October 31, 2006 07:47 pm Title: First Date
Sweet and hot and playful....wonderful. Really enjoyed this chapter:)
Author's Response: Thanks bitterpill! I'm so glad!!!
10 [Report This]Date: October 31, 2006 07:36 pm Title: First Date
A great example of how a story doesn't necessarily have to be full-out explicit to acheive maximum steam. The pacing is perfect - the sense of mounting (TWSS, I know) tension/anticipation is palpable. And after all the time they've waited (3 years of foreplay?), I'm of the JAM school that says they wouldn't be able to keep their hands off each other or wait more than a Nano-second (wink wink) before getting down to business. But I agree - not actually in the theatre the first time....so get them home already!
As always, your dialogue and characterization are exactly right. Loved Jim wanting to see her in her glasses. And when he kisses her eyes by the car. Such scrumptious details. Yum.
Author's Response:
Thanks Colette! You clever thing you. I do think that it'll happen pretty quickly and I really don't know how she'd be able to live with herself if she made him wait too long. ;)
Hopefully I'll get enough of my NaNo work done to post something more this weekend.
We shall see. :)
10 [Report This]Date: October 31, 2006 07:34 pm Title: First Date
I continue to super love the way that you write Pam & Jim. I think you capture their perfect balance of fun playfull-ness and crazy chemistry, which is really rare in Jim/Pam fanfic these days.
The way you write their dialogue, whether joking, teasing or serious, is consistently on target, which is really what makes your stories so good and fun to read. Also loved your characterization of Pam and that she knows what she wants here, and particularly liked your version of Pam's explanation of why they should take things slightly slower (so that they can have more firsts...yay!).
And of course, loved them getting carried away in the theater. I don't know what you're talking about--you're really quite good at writing the hot stuff :)
Really enjoyed this!! (Clearly, as my review is now a novel.)
Author's Response:
yippee - if that's the type of novel you'll write leave one for me anytime! I continue to super love your reviews so we are even!!
I really try and think of them saying every word I write when I do dialogue. If it doesn't ring true to me I tend to rework it until it does.
Thank you for the vote of confidence. I'm never going to be one to get really down and dirty (TWSS) but I do think that there's being vague and leaving too much to the imagination. I'm trying to find the right balance.
And now here's MY novel. LOL! Thanks again!!
10 [Report This]Date: October 31, 2006 07:31 pm Title: First Date
Oh, no more until Dec.? This was a wonderful chapter.
Author's Response:
I promise - before December - just not right away.
The show tends to inspire me. As long as there are no repeats - I'll have plenty of material. No worries.
I'm glad you liked it!
10 [Report This]Date: October 31, 2006 07:19 pm Title: First Date
More, more!
And this was really hot:
He bent his head, kissed her again. It was a lazy kiss, one where he seemed to be taking great care to move slowly
Author's Response:
LOL! Soon, soon!!
I'm glad you thought so. :)
10 [Report This]Date: October 31, 2006 07:13 pm Title: First Date
This works very well in the context of the story so I am glad you went with it, and didn't force the snow, the skating, and all that. Loved the tension, and clearly, they wouldn't be able to keep their hands of each other, but I am with Pam on not having sex in a theatre as their first time together! Anyway, I am glad you won't be totally abandoning us for NaNo.
Because I am a homophone freak as you know, I have to point out that you have a little your/you're confusion here: "You're place is great - you know for a place with one kitchen." That is all the nitpicking I'll do because I loved it. This cracked me up: "Is your apartment Fort Knox?" The bit with the glasses was also very cute.
Author's Response:
Ahh geez. That's what I get for flying solo. Merci beaucoup.
I'm glad you approve. :)
10 [Report This]Date: October 27, 2006 11:59 pm Title: First Fight
That was amazing. You have to love Jim saying a dirty word. And angry Jim. And jealous Pam. So good! Can't wait to see their next 'first'. And maybe some smut sometime? Maybe? Hmm?
Author's Response:
There's just nothing else he could have said at that moment IMHO.
Smut??? OK. Twist my arm. ;)
10 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2006 08:31 pm Title: First Fight
Ok, so I've been denying myself some fanfic recently--trying to have a life and all that. However, you are one of my "favorite authors" on the site, so I get emails saying when you have a new one. I'm soooo glad I gave in and read this one! I especially love how the fight turned into a hot making out session! Totally makes up for no new episode tonight! I can't wait for more chapters!!
Author's Response:
Oh Boof! That makes me so happy to hear. Yay for you having a life. If you see mine out there ask it to come back please?? LOL!
I'm typing faster than Mavis Beacon so hopefully soon. ;)
8 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2006 03:56 pm Title: First Fight
Oh, if only all fights ended with that kind of positive progress! Good to see them talk out their issues and reach some sort of understanding... ;)
Author's Response: Only time will tell Semby. If we even see a fight. :)
10 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2006 02:58 pm Title: First Fight
The fight was so well written! You brought the issues out without either of them beating the other over the head with them...if that makes any sense. It was just a good, clean fight...with an ending that left me so, so happy!
Author's Response:
It does make sense and that's what I needed them to have.
Up next? Um....let's see. Maybe First Date? :)
10 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2006 02:49 pm Title: First Meeting
"Though all she truly wants is for him to be happy, hearing him laughing like that with someone else is like a knife to her heart." - poor Pam, but what goes around, comes around...
And holy awkwardness when Michael asked if Jim wanted to hug Pam...only him!
Author's Response:
I know. She's got to feel the pain a bit. Jim dealt with it for so long it's only fair.
And GAH! Michael, Michael, Michael
10 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2006 11:56 am Title: First Fight
I loved your explaination for Pam's actions - that everything she did was basically go with the flow because she just couldn't think. It's like the thing she is most afraid of is taking any definitive action, and she becomes paralyzed. And even though she has obviously gotten better, it is still hard for her. Even in the fight with Jim she was almost willing to let everything go rather than take some inititive, and just ask straight up what was going on with Karen. Very realistic potrayal of her insecurities. I also always really like it when people touch on the fact that it actually wasn't very fair of Jim to expect her to come up with a coherent and final answer on her feelings that night.
Author's Response: She's not ever going to be completely direct IMHO. And I get why Jim did what he did - but he asked a whole lot of her in one night. I hope they discuss this is some fashion because - sigh - they need to.
10 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2006 11:55 am Title: First Fight
Niiice. Closest thing I've ever read to what really could happen. :-) Great job, and yes - a very natural sounding interaction.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the niiiiice Kev! LOL!
Glad you thought so. Mission accomplished.
8 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2006 09:35 am Title: First Fight
I love that you have Pam trying to be strong and stand up for herself, here. And for Jim to push her to talk and hash it out seems quite in-character; he's been shown to be willing to confront her if he needs to. I also like that Jim isn't with Karen, but that's personal preference. :) Also, yay, kisses!
Author's Response:
This is my dream scenario. Let's see how close I get. :)
My preference too. I just think that would be tired and unoriginal.
Kisses. Yum. :)
Date: October 26, 2006 08:31 am Title: First Fight
THANK YOU for this! Really true to life, and to Jim and Pam. It's been said before, but you're right, shutting down IS what she does.
Case in point:
She's never been able to fight well. She winds up shutting up and shutting down because it never matters anyway. In the end she always gives in.
So dead on :) Can't wait for more!
Author's Response:
I just kept thinking - how many times would she have wanted to leave Roy and how many times did she simply stay?
Answer? 10 years worth.
9 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2006 07:29 am Title: First Fight
Yes, the progression of this argument is great - the dialogue, the pace, the climax - awesome!
It just felt very real. You must feel drained ;)
Author's Response: Gracias mi amiga. And DO I EVER. :)
10 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2006 07:20 am Title: First Fight
Chapter titles are misleading. I was expecting a gigantic load of angst, so I opened up UltraJAMMoodLifter, chapter 22/23 of Laugh This Life With Me, but...wow. Thank you for resolving that quickly, because that'll help me read your updates a lot faster.
That was great, this fight - what I think I like the best about this is the fact that Pam doesn't cry. I don't know, maybe it's just me, but I think Pam isn't the kind of person who'd burst out crying in front of anyone, not even Jim - she seems more the kind of person who just freezes and shuts herself out until she gets home and can cry a good cry alone. So that's good.
And I also love that they don't really fight or spout insults at each other because that's not JimandPam, that's AU!JimandPam, and AU!JimandPam isn't nearly half as perfect as JimandPam. [That sentence does not make sense.] JimandPam don't like to clarify themselves a lot, so they end up thinkng the wrong thing or misunderstanding, but insulting? Nah. Too AU!JimandPam for me.
You think I'd kick a puppy? - ah, Pam. PamPamPamPamPam.
And I also love that now I can read First Meeting properly, because when it first came up I realised I couldn't take it and just gave it an obligatory scroll-through before deciding I would read it when there was a happy chapter to read to bring my spirits up. And that means I can read it now! [/endsenselessramble] I've got to learn to stop rambling.
Author's Response:
Oh Laugh This Life With Me - a classic if there ever were one.
I'm done making Pam cry. When I look back I was really projecting my own personality on her in fics where I wrote her sobbing on a regular basis. I would cry if Jim said those things to me. I would - but Pam? Probably not.
And no - I don't ever see them being spiteful and mean. They wouldn't do that.
Ramble away - moofoot. I'm happy to hear it anytime.
10 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2006 06:51 am Title: First Meeting
I LOVE all of your stories...started reading them over at ff.net...know what I love MORE? A Jim that has had enough and makes Pam face facts!! Woo hoo! So sexy! Love the story and the "firsts" theme! Please update all your open stories...they (next to a McDonald's coke) are my drug of choice :>)
Author's Response: Aww dandyangie thank you so much! The only thing I've got open at the moment is Fates which I'm going to try and update over the weekend. You don't know how it thrills me to hear that I rank up there with McDonald's coke. Make mine a diet and I'm right there with you!!!
8 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2006 06:42 am Title: First Fight
Loved the fight and Pam needed some shaking up too. Glad they kissed. Looking forward to next chapter.
Author's Response: I'm so glad and she did indeed. And I'm incapable of having them fight and not kiss and make up. :)
9 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2006 06:29 am Title: First Fight
Just adorable. I love your characterizations, because they seem so perfect for the new season and changes.
Author's Response: Let's hope so Lissa! Because this is the kind of thing I want to see. :)
10 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2006 06:19 am Title: First Fight
Ack! You are amazing! Others have already said it, but it bears repeating that this dialogue is exactly right. So organic and the kind of fight I imagine them really having. Describing Pam as shutting down when it comes to fighting is spot on (kind of reminds me of Boys and Girls when she says "I'm fine with my choices!" then later we see her crying about never having a terrace). And I'm sorry but this line,
She blinks at him, shocked. "You think I'd kick a puppy?"
Just made me laugh out loud. Oh Pam. Now bring on the next chapter! ;)
Author's Response:
LOL! Thank you. I just started writing and that's how it came out.
I need to reiterate that I am not an advocate of puppy kicking. I've got one myself.
More soon. I need to take a little breather though. This one took alot out of me.
10 [Report This]Date: October 26, 2006 06:00 am Title: First Fight
OOH! So good. I like that neither of them backed down. It's so nice to see these two communicating...now we just need it on the show! Great job.
Author's Response: Do we ever!!! Thanks bitterpill!