Date: July 03, 2020 09:51 am Title: Chapter 13
Ooooh!! LOVE the action . Very fun chapter
Author's Response: Thank you so much!
Date: July 03, 2020 09:46 am Title: Chapter 13
Very dramatic to say the least. Great detail through everything.
Ryan as a right proper bastard here. It feels very fitting. He's always the guy who gets kicked around, not taken seriously. In this context when he has this strong of an upper hand it makes perfect sense he's behave like that.
You can feel the desperation of Jim and Pam here. I love how at the first opportunity they fight back. They don't go down without a fight. Their first and overwhelming motive to see the other one safe. Great writing to bring that out.
PLEASE don't leave us hanging for to long with that cliffhanger.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I was worried that Ryan was a bit too OOC but then again, how could he not be when he is the big bad, you know? So I’m glad that his characterization makes sense given the setting. I hope to get the next one up soon!
1 [Report This]Date: July 03, 2020 09:14 am Title: Chapter 13
Okay, I’m gonna need you to post the next chapter now please! Hahaa!
That was so intense! I love it :D
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I should have just written the next chapter before I posted this one so you guys don’t have to be kept waiting, dangit! But looks like you will be subject to my whims, haha. I hope to get it up soon! Thank you again!
1 [Report This]Date: July 03, 2020 07:30 am Title: Chapter 13
WOW! What an update and cliffhanger. That was intense, but you did an amazing job of showing the power struggle. I audibly gasped a few times throughout this. Looking forward to seeing how they get out of this!
Author's Response: I love a good audible reaction and I’m so glad this chapter elicited some from you! Thank you so much!
1 [Report This]Date: June 26, 2020 10:32 am Title: Chapter 8
Oh, poor Jim. He suffered so much... and yet, he's still so kind and caring — how does he save the ability to joke around and trust people (okay, not all people, but Pam for sure) after all? This man is perfection. And I take back my words about cool-sounding killer — a smart guy who breaks the codes is way cooler!
And other things. Hot. Very hot. I still feel slightly awkward and uncomfortable around mature themes, but it was good. I like the way you included the snippets of canon conversations, and I adore that Pam mentioned Michelangelo... she's an artist even in moments like that, and I appreciate it.
Try to keep my reading rhythm :)
And thank you so much for writing!
Author's Response: It can def be awkward writing/reading the steamier stuff, but I’m glad you still liked it! I like to keep it realistic and jokey and not always so intense, because even I find myself blushing and dancing around the intimate details. I’m so glad you liked this chapter!
1 [Report This]Date: June 25, 2020 04:10 am Title: Chapter 6
'Sixty square meters of heaven on earth. A tiny wooden paradise...'
I'm sorry, but even though they're still in mortal peril (Jim's gun and Pam's wounds hint that it's very and very serious), I can't stop replaying 'The Cabin' by Ylvis in my head. The song is ridiculous, and it doesn't entirely pass the situation Pam and Jim are in, but... oh, that tension between them is so needed to be released! I hope when they settle a little, they'll talk about all secrets and mysteries. And after that, I hope they'll find some time to speak about that tension between them too (and do something about it!). This dancing around mutual sympathy is killing me (in the best possible way, though).
'Right now it's icy cold. But in sixteen hours, it's gonna be hot!'
Oh. Wow. Wow, wow, wow. I mean, the shower scene was... wow. The shower is definitely one of the essential parts of JAM everyday life.
Apart from my inarticulate exclamations, I have to say I'm a sucker for tenderness and care, and Jim in this chapter was... the paragon. Perfection. And I feel double sorry for Pam, for her injuries and her... ahem... awakened yet unresolved wishes.
I wonder that Jim thought about the showering...
Thank you!
Author's Response: I’m loving all these reviews! Thank you so much! This was one of my favorite chapters to write so far and I’m so tickled you liked it. I definitely love the care taking, too. Thanks again!
1 [Report This]Date: June 23, 2020 08:09 am Title: Chapter 12
This story, good lord. You really are the supreme ruler of plot twists.
Author's Response: Aww! That’s a high compliment! Thank you so much!
Author's Response: Aww! That’s a high compliment! Thank you so much!
1 [Report This]Date: June 22, 2020 10:58 am Title: Chapter 4
"Then ... Jim, what do we do? Where do we go?"
I melted into a puddle at this line. I like it so much that Pam didn't even doubt that they were in that together.
And Jim, caring so much about Pam ... just awww. What could be sweeter than a killer (I still have no idea if he'd killed people or done other stuff, but 'killer' sounds cool) that protect you and you alone?
I'm a slow reader, but in this case, I'm glad about that. I can take my time with your fantastic story and savor every chapter :)
Thank you!
Author's Response: Aww!! Thank you so much! I hope you keep enjoying each one. I like to sometimes save stories until I have lots of chapters to read so I can do the savoring, too, so I’m so honored that you feel that way about mine! Keep letting me know what you think!
Date: June 21, 2020 10:10 pm Title: Chapter 12
Oh no. Oh oh no. I mean, I did guess partway through the chapter but... Yeah, nice setup. Very interested to see where we go from here.
Author's Response: I’m interested too! I mean I have an outline but as I’m sure you well know, sometimes things get away from you. I’m working on the next chapter, can’t wait to hear what you think!
Date: June 20, 2020 09:35 pm Title: Chapter 12
“Her thoughts were the only thing that kept her company, as listening to a radio station felt frivolous given the circumstances.”
I’m the kind of person who has background music on every waking moment. Nothing puts into perspective the seriousness of their situation quite like this line...
“Both. And more.” My whole damn heart. I write that too often, but I mean it. I really mean it.
Somehow calling it the Raddish Inn is enough to inject a moment of levity. I love how you manage that.
Oh, I don’t feel good about it being Ryan at the door. Rookie error there not waking Jim up, Pam...
God, I love these updates. I’m always so excited to see you post. Thanks for sharing your brilliant words with us.
Author's Response: Jenna, thank you so much! I love reading your reviews. I’m so glad the Radish Inn wasn’t too much...I put it in then took it out then put it back in. So I’m glad it was a good little laugh in the middle of some seriousness!! Thank you so much!
1 [Report This]Date: June 20, 2020 09:21 pm Title: Chapter 12
Does Pam get to run him over without her glasses on!?
So I think it's safe to say we can infer that Ryan is the bad guy that Jim was talking about. And he must have a mole or Wallace really trusted him for him to show up here ... I really hope Jim doesn't get unceremoniously shot in his sleep or something here! Certainly a cruel cliffhanger, I hope to see more soon!
Looping back from speculation to the chapter itself, I really liked the tone you set with Pam's frentic flight, no destination in mind other than anywhere but here. The affirmed feels was of course a highlight of the chapter, always a winner.
Author's Response: Lol! Wouldn’t it be fitting if Pam did actually get to run him over with no glasses? Maybe I can work that in some how...
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! Thank you so much for your compliments. I hope you kee enjoying!
Author's Response: Lol! Wouldn’t it be fitting if Pam did actually get to run him over with no glasses? Maybe I can work that in some how...
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing! Thank you so much for your compliments. I hope you kee enjoying!
1 [Report This]Date: June 20, 2020 07:30 pm Title: Chapter 3
Wow! This was unexpected and I loved it!
Thanks so much for such a great chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I’m glad the twist was a good twist!
1 [Report This]Date: June 20, 2020 03:37 pm Title: Chapter 1
Eeek, what a cliffhanger! This is so good. I like how you've combined the romance with the action, and how you've added bits of canon like the coal walk.
I can't believe Pam opened the door for Ryan! The next chapter can't come soon enough.
Author's Response: It’s that damn chain! I always feel so safe and secure with the chain on the door, and of course Ryan knows how to be disarming. They needed ring doorbells in the 1960s! I’m so glad you enjoyed it and hope you continue to! Thank you!
1 [Report This]Date: June 20, 2020 10:42 am Title: Chapter 12
I'm literally shaking after reading this. I had a feeling it was Ryan when Jim started describing him and then got goosebumps when he actually said his name. I'm so, so scared for the next chapter but also need it to happen asap. This story is amazing.
Author's Response: Ahh!! Thank you! I’m glad it was good enough to give you goosebumps! Thank you so much!
Date: June 20, 2020 09:55 am Title: Chapter 12
Sometimes when I review a chapter, I wait until I'm finished. Other times, I have to pull up a side by side window to write my thoughts immediately as I'm having them. This is one of those times, because I jut read "Radish Inn" and FELL OVER. BT. Please never leave us again.
"But standing here, in the arms of the man that she loved and that loved her back, she was untouchable." Wow. Wow okay. "Untouchable." Hmm. I'm not FEELING THINGS because of ONE WORD. Nope. I'm not.
"Well yeah, of course." Yeah. So casual. Of course. YOU DORKS.
I'm sitting here in a mush of emotion and then you just throw in a "With real conditioner!" to make me giggle. I appreciate that. Always thinking ahead.
"Twiggy little prick" god you're just full of one liners today.
Okay. I only say Ryan coming in this chapter, and was going between him and Gabe when you said "Twiggy little prick." I would like to PUNCH HIM WITH A KNIFE. YOU REALLY LEFT IT LIKE THAT?? RYAN STRIDING IN ON AN UNCONSCIOUS JIM?? Honestly thought I'm a little ticked at Pam. She knows they're in danger. GIRL I KNOW UR LOVE SICK BUT YOU'RE ALSO BEING CHASED BY A MURDERED--WAKE HIM TF UP HE CAN SLEEP WHEN YOU'RE OUT OF THE WOODS.
Author's Response: Twiggy little prick is my favorite part of this chapter, lol! Also it never even OCCURRED to me that it could be Gabe. Man, I’m kind of wishing he was the bad guy instead. Then it’d have been “that bony creepy weirdo” instead of twiggy little prick. Damn, hindsight really do be 20/20.
Date: June 20, 2020 09:27 am Title: Chapter 12
No didn't really see it coming, but at the same time, with everything Jim's been describing, it also makes sense. Smarmy weasel that is Ryan it does tend to fit.
Fun to have the motel be named the Radish Inn. Love the nods to canon you make with things like that.
Also seems like Ryan knows what he's doing. Get there late at night when their guard is down. Say everything he has to in order to wiggle into their room. you can just feel the tension and hear the dramatic music at the end of this chapter.
Really looking forward to the next update.
Author's Response: I’m so glad it was a surprise! I thought for sure I was giving it all away. And I had so much fun writing the little bit with Mose, haha! I was worried it’d be too silly but I’m glad it seems to fit. Thanks as always, warrior!
1 [Report This]Date: June 17, 2020 12:08 am Title: Chapter 2
I'm catching up with your story, and I regret I didn't do that weeks and months ago, because it's so, so good. I like the setting, the way Pam got rid of Roy, Jim's sweetness, the fact that they didn't jump into relationships immediately, but having time to build the friendships (but, oh my gosh, the word of the day game was unbelievably flirty and tender), the snippets of canon weaved so neatly into a new universe... and, of course, cliffhanger. I still have no idea what happens next, but I'm full of anticipation!
Thank you so much for your story!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading the whole thing and leaving your thoughts! I hope you continue to enjoy it. It’s been so much fun to write!
Date: May 24, 2020 08:48 pm Title: Chapter 11
I love the code names. I love Pam being so freaked out over Jim. I love the "I love you" and how it was repurposed and how he needed to tell her that he loved her once he was better. I loved that he's totally rifling through a hospital to SNEAK OUT EVEN THOUGH HE'S NOT BETTER. Ugh. Friggen Bonnie and Clyde over here and I'm obsessed.
Author's Response: Jim absolutely is about to steal supplies and book it out a back door and I am here for it.
Date: May 24, 2020 08:48 am Title: Chapter 11
Quick pause while reading. "Run across hot coals..." Nice canon reference there. On with the chapter.
Wait a sec, speaking of canon reference, switching the Casino Night declaration? Oh jeez, pull out my heart and stomp on it. Oy.
Ok, I'll just say all the canon references, though turned around are making this fun to read.
Ahhhhh, that's better. Jim's awake and more importantly saying those words to Pam. Had me going there for a second.
Ok, on to more important things. Very real emotions for Pam. Her fear and desperation while driving felt very real. Also good for her to not back down from Jim during their little spat. Pam's getting some steel in her spine and I love that.
She's also getting quicker on the uptake for things. Coming up with fake names and making up the hunting accident story. Granted Pam's always been pretty sharp, so it's nice to see that translated here too.
Protective Jim is in effect again. He's beaten, bloodied, and bandaged, but he's still thinking of making sure they're safe. Good on ya Jim.
Great chapter as per usual. Really looking forward to the next update.
Author's Response: I always love reading your reviews, Warrior! Thank you so much. I too like to think that Pam is learning a bit about how to be spy-adjacent and on the run, as well as not hiding her feelings! I hope you continue to enjoy, thanks for reading!
Date: May 23, 2020 11:11 pm Title: Chapter 11
OH. MY. GOD. BT, I —
You really took casino night, turned it on its head like that & expected me to be okay. I am not okay.
Jim saying “I can’t” and passing out. Nope. No, no. Rip out my heart why don’t you?!
Phyllis is a hoot. So very Phyllis. How dare Pam commit the abominable sin of cutting her off when talking about Bob Vance.
Side note: my father has one leg that’s shorter than the other from dropping a fridge on it & the break not being set right, so I snorted at that line.
Okay, okay... in retrospect, I can forgive you for the casino night-esque “I can’t” when Jim’s first conscious thought is “I love you too.” I can live with that. They’re so damn adorable.
Ahhhh... I’m going to need an update as soon as is humanly possible. I have no clue who’s after them, but it definitely doesn’t sound like good news...
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I’m glad you got a kick out of the refrigerator line! I hated to tease with the “I can’t” but I’m glad that I made up for it. I hope to update again soon, so stay tuned!
Date: May 23, 2020 08:21 pm Title: Chapter 11
Oooh! Loving the characters you're bringing in and the moments (seriously, I can't?). It's great. It's all great.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! Phyllis as a kindly nurse felt right, haha. I’m glad it didn’t seem like a stretch! And ofc Jim wouldn’t turn Pam down, so I tried to think of the best way to use her “I can’t” line. I’m so glad you liked it! Thanks for reviewing!
Date: May 23, 2020 08:11 pm Title: Chapter 11
Gahhh the cliffhangers, Tuna!!!
You excel at creating a sense of urgency, that's for sure.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I take that as a very high compliment and I really appreciate it. I hope the cliffhangers keep you coming back for more!
1 [Report This]Date: May 23, 2020 08:07 pm Title: Chapter 11
Pam using Jim's casino night line killed me. And then Jim saying "I love you too" as soon as he saw her absolutely destroyed me. That was fantastic. I gotat say, though, the whole interaction with Phyllis made me laugh with all the small references to the show lol. Amazing chapter! I'm so curious on who's going after them!
Author's Response: I giggled like a little kid while writing that but with Phyllis! I’m so glad you liked it. Stay tuned, I hope to keep making it interesting and keep you guys on your toes!
1 [Report This]Date: May 23, 2020 07:37 pm Title: Chapter 11
I'm definitely more invested in the spy drama now, so great work there! I liked the Angela nods from Phyllis and Jim, that was classic. Glad that Jim and Pam have confessed the depth of their feelings for eachother as well, even if the circumstances are dire.
Looking forward to seeing who's after Jim.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I enjoyed writing that little bit with Phyllis so much. I hope to reveal the mastermind behind it all soon, so stay tuned!
Date: May 13, 2020 05:41 pm Title: Chapter 10
Oh wow okay, so it's gonna be like that, huh?
How do you write a gun/knife fight so poetically? I feel like it's the opposite of poetic. But when there were wood shards mixed in with the carrots I was mesmerized? And then, ya know, hyperventilating because gun.
Author's Response: I’m like, way proud of the wood in the carrots thing. Seriously. So I’m glad someone noticed and I’m glad it was you!