1 [Report This]Date: May 12, 2019 03:47 pm Title: I Feel Bad About What I Wrote On The Bathroom Wall
Is it too late to join the "more" chorus? I really like the idea of the Dundies being a turning point for Pam and I like how you've put it through.
1 [Report This]Date: January 09, 2019 10:31 pm Title: Shoot
I think you could go either way, but I would love to see more! You do a great job of writing that nervous tension + companionable silence between these two. Good stuff!
Date: January 07, 2019 08:48 pm Title: I Feel Bad About What I Wrote On The Bathroom Wall
I think you can for sure keep going with this! I love all the “what if one of them had said something at this moment” stories!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'll work on it! And yes, I do too. I'm glad I could contribute!
1 [Report This]Date: January 06, 2019 04:33 pm Title: Shoot
This is a good stopping place to be sure, however I for one wouldn't mind seeing how things would develop. Does Pam forget all her musings once she sobers up? Does she wake up to remember everything leading to more introspection about her life choices? Does Jim think about how she ditched Roy to come back to the Dundies thus giving him courage to say what he feels? Lots of ways this story could go. Still if you want to end it here, this is a good spot. Nice short little story too.
Author's Response: Wonderful suggestions!!! Thank you very much for your jellybeans and kind words. I will work on updating this
1 [Report This]Date: January 06, 2019 04:30 pm Title: I Feel Bad About What I Wrote On The Bathroom Wall
One small quibble, Pam doesn't have a wedding ring at this point. She has an engagement ring. Like I said it's kind of a small quibble. Otherwise good chapter here. I liked their back and forth and what's going on in Pam's head. Onto the next chapter.
Date: January 06, 2019 07:33 am Title: Shoot
This could definitely turn into a great story, if you continue it. With that being said I also believe it is amazing on its own!d84;a039;
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I really appreciate it! I will work on updating it with another chapter :)
1 [Report This]Date: January 05, 2019 10:37 pm Title: Shoot
I like this a lot. It's very to the point, and the point is pleasant. I'd be interested in a continuation if you have more to say, but not just for it's own sake--this could definitely be complete as it is.
Author's Response:
Thank you very much! I have a couple ideas in mind...