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As with all of your fics, this is a great premise well-executed. I know you're highly unlikely to come back and finish this, but I really wish you would or had.

Okay, I know you have your plate full of stories that you want to finish and ideas that are running in your head- but seriously!  You can not leave this story like that!!!!  I'm sorry I missed this one earlier, it was fun and angsty, and sweet and romantic... all the good stuff piled into one fab story.  I loved the sweitching between the past and the present.  But I'm curious to see how you would handle their meeting.  Either way, I thought that you captured the friendship as well as the office characters perfectly.  Michael, Dwight, Karen, Andy, Roy... all were "drawn" through your words perfectly.

Ugh...poor Jim. I think your description of their "first date" is the best I've read. I feel so bad for him....the very first day they met he's already emailing his brother saying "she's the one" ::sigh::

Can't wait to see what happens now that he knows the Scranton Branch is closing.

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Well, this just gets better and better.  I always love to see what that first "date" at Cugino's was like.  Great job with that, and the sadness that Jim feels "Now."  Wonderful!!

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Okay, those last three paragraphs are so freakin' HOT that smoke is coming out of my computer. Perfect Jim. And if you don't follow through on that last paragraph, IN DETAIL, I'm gonna put a jinx on you. :D

Author's Response:

Listen, if your Jinx involves Jim Halpert giving me that "Hi," then bring it on, sister!  I must confess that I've got the next section written, and it doesn't explore the ice cube bit, but there's more steam to come.  (TWSS!)

Besides, my steam tends to be more R rated than the awesome NC-17 stuff some of you other guys are so good at.  I don't touch it not because I'm morally opposed to it, but because I don't trust myself to write it well (like Gamers....gulp. NICE).

Thanks for the review! 

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First I was a bit put out that the 5:15 conference room rendez-vous was going to have to remain in suspended animation for a while...then you went and involved ice cubes and, well...a girl can change direction (and stories) in certain circumstances such as these. 

I still like the way you're segueying from one time/place to another. How Jim recognizes his past self in Karen's interest. How Roy isn't a lunkhead. Looking forward to seeing how you tie it all together...I have no doubt you'll do it gracefully. (Meanwhile, feeling kinda nervous about tonight's episode...little bit queasy.)

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Yowza - that went from sweet to hot in record time.  More please!  (You don't really need to grade those papers do you?)  :)

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Oh, man, now Jim's even hotter. My two obsessions are Harry Potter and The Office. My pseudonym was inspired by Winky the house-elf. I can't wait for Jim and Pam to get together and talk nerd speak. I'm quite fluent.

Author's Response:

Haha!  I love the idea of them sharing books for some reason.  (And I'm pretty fluent in nerd speak myself...)

Thanks for the review!

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I am really enjoying this story.  The pacing is working really well.  I like getting insight into the events surrounding calling off the wedding, and I think you came up with a realistic scenario.  Something had to drive over the edge, and it was probably something on the apparence silly but that just finally hit her as wrong. 

Author's Response:

Thanks so much! I was thinking that, since Casino Night wasn't the "moment" that resulted in her calling off the wedding, that it  probably ended up being something mundane or seemingly unimportant. 

Thanks again for the review!

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Loved, loved, loved the break up scene.  Wonderful job with that....and the entire chapter.  Wow.  Oh, and the scene with everyone talking about their favorite Jim memory?  Heartbreaking.  And I could so see that happening.  All the emotions are there, as always.  Wonderful job.

Author's Response: Thanks! I was uncertain about the Jim memory scene, so it's good to hear that people liked it.  :o) Thanks again!

This chapter is one of the most realistic and insightful looks at Pam's thought process post-Jim's transfer. Micheal making everyone say their favourite memory? I could SO imagine that happening. Amazing.

My favourite part was when her mom suggested she call Jim to tell him-- something we've all been hating Pam for not doing. But at the moment she suggested it, I totally sympathized, almost agreed with Pam. Why would she? How could she do that? It really made me truly understand why Pam is now in the situation she's in.

This story has a great flow and pacing. Well written! Keep going with it.

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This is incredibly amazing, and I love the Milton tie-in! Dead on, as always.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Yeah, I typically have an axe to grind with Milton, but he found his way in here somehow...

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Gah! Another great chapter girl7. I really liked how you described Pam as being "under water" after Casino Night. I could see how her world became sort of murky and gray after Jim left. Also, love the testimonials from everyone (and I think you've got Michael's voice spot-on) and that the thing that pushed Pam over the edge is Roy not knowing her favorite kind of yogurt (although we know it symbolizes so much more than that!)