10 [Report This]Date: November 01, 2006 05:25 am Title: Chapter 3
So glad you updated this. What a sad, sad chapter. So many good moments - with Roy, the 'testimonials,'...really love that the catalyst for Pam calling off the wedding is Roy not knowing what yogurt she likes (nice memory of that Jim talking head) - that's how it would happen...all the big 'real' reasons overwhelm, then something that mundane would simply put it all in perspective. Very real.
Of course, by the end, I'm in my usual state of wanting to murderize Pam for not calling him. Oh, and I have to say, I never would have thought I'd be thinking back to Paradise Lost in relation to Pam and Jim...you are a clever one!
10 [Report This]Date: October 31, 2006 05:38 pm Title: Chapter 1
LOVE it. Seriously, I could totally see this scene happening. It was very in tune with something the office writers would have done I think.
10 [Report This]Date: October 31, 2006 07:19 am Title: Chapter 2
"That's when it truly began." Indeed. This was really wonderful. The dream worked so well in this chapter. Loved the gifts Jim gave her. Very sweet touch. Looking forward to more:)
8 [Report This]Date: October 30, 2006 06:42 pm Title: Chapter 1
Its like Christmas in October when I find one of your new stories! The dream sequence was great and I LOVED her bag of goodies from Jim. Can't wait to see what comes next!
10 [Report This]Date: October 30, 2006 04:23 pm Title: Chapter 2
Also, I have to say, I totally disagree with the reviewer who didn't buy Jim reading Harry Potter or watching the Princess Bride. I can totally see him reading HP secretly, as a guilty pleasure.
But most of all I definitely see him being a Princess Bride fan! It's not a chick flick by any stretch of the imagination. And Jim isn't most young men anyway. I don't see him loving mindless action movies, just like he doesn't seem to be into mainstream music.
Sorry, just had to put my opinion in there.
10 [Report This]Date: October 30, 2006 04:17 pm Title: Chapter 2
You are prolific and brilliant and wonderful. Oh my god.
10 [Report This]Date: October 30, 2006 04:15 pm Title: Chapter 2
OMG i'm loving this fic so far. it's just so gorgeously written.
9 [Report This]Date: October 30, 2006 03:22 pm Title: Chapter 2
I loved your take on how they were before everyone suspected. Very cool. And everything in that bag was perfect. But now I'm in a pickle because I don't know whether to demand more of this story or Only. Can I be greedy and ask for both? :)
Date: October 30, 2006 03:15 pm Title: Chapter 1
Memories of my own wisdom teeth removal, though no Jim to help me through. Looking forward to reading more.
10 [Report This]Date: October 30, 2006 03:02 pm Title: Chapter 2
When I read that Jim could alter the dress my first thought was that Jim was gay in her dream. But then I read the steamy scene where he was pinning the dress and I was like, so not gay!! Yummy steaminess. And what Roy said about Jim satisfying the dorky side of Pam, too funny!
10 [Report This]Date: October 30, 2006 02:44 pm Title: Chapter 1
I was so excited to see a new story by you - Girl7, you rock! But I totally disagree with the reviewer who said you should write for the show. Although you are most definitely more than talented enough, we need you here to keep us entertained!! Awesome chapter. Pam, Jim and Michael sounded just like themselves - especially Michael's “What’re we talkin’ about he-ah?” And your attention to detail is amazing as always.
10 [Report This]Date: October 30, 2006 02:43 pm Title: Chapter 2
Wow, I can't believe you shared such a private dream with us...you truly are dedicated to your art! I loved when Roy pointed out that Jim satisfies Pam's dorky side...if only he knew.
10 [Report This]Date: October 30, 2006 02:36 pm Title: Chapter 1
I love that you have a new story to share with us! The way you take us back to the past, to simpler times if you will, is truly unique, and I love all the thought you put into your writing.
When I had my four wisdom teeth pulled, it was under local anesthetic...I kept asking the dentist for more shots. It took *forever* for my mouth to regain feeling, and of course I hadn't taken my pain medication...nightmare.
9 [Report This]Date: October 30, 2006 01:25 pm Title: Chapter 2
Really good! I loved the random dream (I mean, of COURSE a guy came to the door with a tennis racket, what else) and the almost hero-worship Pam has for Jim here, that he can do anything (cook, sew, make her feel better about surgery) - it's kind of like a big brother idealising thing except with these other sexual feelings bubbling up too ... interesting ...
I'm not sure if I buy Jim being into Harry Potter and Princess Bride though. I guess he could be, but, well, not very many young men are - I mean, that type of young man (I could see Dwight reading HP!). On the other hand, maybe he has a sister whose favourite movie it is or something. And I guess if he read the Mixed Up Files, maybe he has broader reading taste than I think. Certainly PAM would probably like both of those, as would I and all the other goodies if I was sick!
Look forward to chap 3.
Author's Response:
Thanks for such a thoughtful review; I really appreciate it. I see what you're saying about HP and the PB - Harry Potter I wasn't so sure about. I was trying to come up with a book that they'd both read, and that was all I could come up with. As for the Princess Bride, I added that because he would know that it's Pam's favorite movie - and for that reason, he'd get it for her, and would have watched it himself as well.
Thanks again for the thoughtful review!
10 [Report This]Date: October 30, 2006 01:17 pm Title: Chapter 2
ooh, i love it! especially the bag from jim- harry potter and princess bride?! how adorable is that? :)
Author's Response: Thank you!! :o)
10 [Report This]Date: October 30, 2006 01:13 pm Title: Chapter 2
Okay, the previous review was not from me, because somehow it was eaten. I am going to try again,
I am really, really loving this. The dream was so well done - it was exactly what dreams are like. Everything seems so real and serious, but filled with randomness that doesn't even faze the dreamer. I loved that Pam was changing clothes in the coat closet;)
You said that this was something new for you, really honing a piece before posting it, and I can see it. Not that I think your other stuff is lacking or unfinished or anything, it's great and I always love it, but this seems to show more, craftsmanship, I guess. Okay, I'm through sounding pretentious:) Anyway, I love this, and can't wait for more.
I seriously hope I don't end up posting this mulitple time. Sometimes you wouldn't know that I have used a computer before...
Author's Response: I really appreciate your honesty, actually - and I'm glad that you can tell that I've put more time/thought/editing into it. You did not sound pretentious at all - at all, so don't worry! Thanks again for the thoughtful review!
10 [Report This]Date: October 30, 2006 01:08 pm Title: Chapter 2
The previous review was from me. I am a totally dork and forgot to sign in, and forgot to leave my name.
Date: October 30, 2006 01:01 pm Title: Chapter 2
No sooner did I review part one...this! Will have to give some thought to analyzing that dream, but sewing Jim? Who'd of thunk that image would be hot? Who'd of thunk that image at all? Too funny. And oddly intriguing.
No instant pudding for our boy, you know how I feel about that question. And, wine-of-the-month it is...Harry & David be damned!
Author's Response:
Yeah, when I had that dream, I woke up thinking, what the hell? But it sort of made sense in the context for me - was about to start dating a guy I'd dated very briefly seven years before, and in the seven years that elapsed, we'd become very good friends. So some of those issues are in there, I'm sure.
But yeah...Jim sewing - hot. Who are we fooling? Jim -- see, I tried to insert a crazy action Jim could do there and follow it with a "Jim doing X would be hot!" ....But I couldn't, because seriously, everything I tried - baking a pie, mowing the grass, sleeping - was just so hot. Sigh. The things we suffer because of that man.....
Date: October 30, 2006 12:58 pm Title: Chapter 2
aw! Wow, this is beautiful! Both chapters. And very insightful. Now I don't have to finish Should Have Known ;)
Author's Response: Thank you so much! And your fic, by the way, is on my list to read as soon as I get done with my pile of grading. I love it that we've got so many new authors here! Thanks for your review --
10 [Report This]Date: October 30, 2006 12:54 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is so great. I really like how you are showing Pam initial unawareness (is that a word? sounds awkward) of her feelings for Jim, especialy the way you are doing it in retrospect.
Those dreams had gradually fallen away in the face of security and stability and what was expected.
I love this sentence. So simple, yet such a basic truth and the reason for so much discontent for so many people.
I'm so looking forward to the next part!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Yeah, I'm trying to capture those days when she was oblivious - or in denial at least. Of course, she was in denial for so long.... :o) Thanks for the review!
10 [Report This]Date: October 30, 2006 12:48 pm Title: Chapter 1
Checking in here and finding the start of a new multi-parter by you is like being notified that you've been given a new fruit/cookie/flower/whatever of the month club membership. Suddenly, you just can't live without those giant pears!
Loved Jim grinning at Pam with a mouth full of Coke and Pop-rocks. I could so easily imagine that scene having happened. And also the sense of portent and foreshadowing of what's to come in their relationship (not to mention the Adoration of the Forearms.) Ah, more please.
Author's Response:
To that I would say that finding a review from you is totally like getting something from your membership of the month club! (I hear they have wine clubs...heh.) I'm glad you liked this - and I think JK would be adorable with a mouth full of Pop Rocks and Coke (which says sick things about me, I'm sure). I'm thinking the Adoration of the Forearms is officially an illness that I have, for which there is no cure. Thanks for the review!
9 [Report This]Date: October 30, 2006 12:39 pm Title: Chapter 1
"then" and "now." (Brilliant labels, no?) Hee! Isn't it already telling how "Now" is grey and dreary and "Then" is full of pop rocks and Jim being all Jim-like. "He gave it that hazy romanticism of fiction" Ah, the magic of Jim!
Author's Response: Hee hee! That is an astute observation, though, I must say. Sigh. Yeah, Jim makes everything better. Thanks for the review!
10 [Report This]Date: October 30, 2006 12:32 pm Title: Chapter 1
Awww. Poor sick Pam and LOL! at the pop-rocks & Coke.
I think Jim should bring her some chicken soup.
I know. One. Track. Mind. :)
Author's Response:
Ah yes - but a one track mind is a good thing when it comes to Jim & Pam, right? I don't know what got me thinking about the pop rocks and coke thing again, but it just came to mind.
Thanks for the review!
10 [Report This]Date: October 30, 2006 12:20 pm Title: Chapter 1
I'm really loving this. You really capture all sides of their relationship well. I really like the structure, too. Looking forward to more:)
Author's Response:
Thank you so much! I'm having fun writing pre-Casino Night Jim and Pam, really.
Thanks for the review, as always!
10 [Report This]Date: October 30, 2006 12:14 pm Title: Chapter 1
I swear to God you need to write for the friggin show...you capture Jim so friggin well it doesn't make sense...
more please and SOON!! :>)
Author's Response:
You are very sweet! (And hey there, by the way - I don't think I've ever seen your user name here before!) I'm glad you like it. I find Jim strangely easier to write than Pam (but I'm married to a guy who's got that same dry sense of humor, so I steal some of the stuff he says much of the time). Pam's much harder, and I'm really working on her for this one. TWSS!
Thanks for the review!