Date: February 06, 2007 08:51 am Title: Chapter 1 of 1
This was great! Realistic, and not at all OOC. Cute and hot, good job :)
Date: January 13, 2007 08:24 am Title: Chapter 1 of 1
(blushes) ehm, uhm, I actually really loved it. Will there really be no sequels? This is no real life after all, it sounds like a good enough angsty beginning of a relationship. Well, either way, it was superhot, and yet very familiar in the mood, very real OFFICE-like and I really liked the language.
7 [Report This]Date: November 08, 2006 09:10 pm Title: Chapter 1 of 1
Hey, I liked this! Nice details to set the party scene, and I thought their encounter was totally realistic -- Jim's hard-on and Pam catching him were both hilariously awful/awkward, and things moving too fast, them messing around was both hot and I think way truer to life than if they'd moved from being totally platonic to full-on sex right then and there. Nice job! (And hee, "sharks".)
Author's Response:
:) Thanks, you understood everything I was going for. I wanted it to be one of those situations where they both might look back and think it was a mistake, yet while it was happening they couldn't help themselves. and, like you sort of said, i don't think Jim would have let them have sex considering the state of their relationship. thank you for reviewing!
Date: October 31, 2006 09:56 am Title: Chapter 1 of 1
Pam is an idiot.
But we knew that. After a session like that, any woman who does not absolutely fall at Jm's feet is an idiot.
Some technical fixes: "jut", not "gut out", and you probably need to run the whole thing past a spellchecker, but overall a good effort. I think on their first encounter, Jim is enough of an old fashioned guy that he would not settle for a hand job, but that's just me. What you gave us was HOT. Thanks.
Author's Response:
I can see what you mean, but at the same time I think during the days before Casino Night, if Pam came on to him like that, he would get caught up in the moment and, though he may want more than a hand job, he might give in. Anwho, thank you so much for reading and reviewing!
Date: October 31, 2006 06:54 am Title: Chapter 1 of 1
steamy and angsty -- wow -- I will be watching for more from you!
Author's Response:
Thank you, that's what I was going for. I hope to write more in the future, perhaps a series or something.
Date: October 31, 2006 05:15 am Title: Chapter 1 of 1
Wow! Awkward! Did you watch Fast Times last night? It so reminded me of Brad and Linda - taken a step further . . .
Author's Response: lol, I actually haven't seen all of that movie, though I know what scene you're refering to. The idea for the story just came to me while I was daydreaming during class.
10 [Report This]Date: October 31, 2006 03:39 am Title: Chapter 1 of 1
I think you did an excellent job here - it's really (I mean really) erotic, yet the characters remain distinct and recognizable as Pam and Jim from start to (ahem) finish. And that's not an easy combination to acheive.
Author's Response: Wow, thank you! I really wanted them to come off as Jim and Pam, yet have them do something really hot that we'd never see on the show.
10 [Report This]Date: October 30, 2006 10:17 pm Title: Chapter 1 of 1
basically, this was like the hottest thing ever. and the angst at the end just kills me dead. so i was all happy and now i'm dead. but in a good way. i loved this!
Author's Response: thank you, thank you, thank you! i was nervous posting this, so you've made me feel so much better. i'm so glad you enjoyed it.