1 [Report This]Date: September 01, 2021 11:31 am Title: Chapter 1
Ooooof. I love this portrait of Stamford-era Pam, realizing how much of the joy she took in that office was *about Jim* and how much harder it is to get through the day without him. And I think the question of whether Jim was feeling that same hurt would have weighed on her a lot during this period.
This conversation with Toby seems about right as to how Pam would have handled conversations about Jim with her, uh, more socially-adept co-workers, something we don't really see in canon before Jim returns.
The "She can see him talking to Karen, though" paragraph is terrific writing. And super painful, so thanks for that.
I really like this version of Benihana! The just-this-side-of-rude-unintentionally-hurtful-but-maybe-she-wouldn't-stop-even-if-she-knew Kelly dialogue works well, and I think you added a note of longing for Christmases past that Pam definitely would have been feeling during this holiday. A solid sense of history.
Don't tell anyone, but I think Pam gets let off the hook a little for The Heartbreak In The Breakroom, and I think you did well to put her initial, way-too-flippant approach to Jim in context of someone who is very much trying to bring their relationship back to the way it was by pretending it still is that way.
" No good, dramatic speeches end with the speaker collapsing in pain." Lol. Solid way to wrap this one up, I think? In a lot of ways Beach Games is the end of Pam's Season 3 arc. She has her answers, now she's just waiting for Jim to catch up.
Aaaaaaand 10 jellybeans!
1 [Report This]Date: April 13, 2020 08:45 pm Title: Chapter 1
This hit a little bit too close to home for me, which is how I know it was excellently written. Heartbreaking and angsty and very true to character. Great job! You’re crazy prolific and very talented, I’ve real,y enjoyed your writing!
1 [Report This]Date: April 10, 2020 12:34 am Title: Chapter 1
Very good look into Pam's mind though S3. I like how there were enough canon elements in there to stay grounded, but some other new elements to add depth. Pam's talk with Toby and Kelly for instance. I think you captured the up and down feeling of S3 very well.
Not a bad choice to end at the beach. I mean we all know what's coming so that's a nice thought. But ending it there also seems to fit this story a bit better in my opinion. Nice job.
1 [Report This]Date: April 10, 2020 12:13 am Title: Chapter 1
What could wake me up better than a mug of hot coffee? Only some beautiful, heartwrenching angst, fresh tears, sniffing, and a mug of hot coffee.
It was awesome. But painful. But so, so good!
And I like that it ended up with dot, dot, dot, and a tiny spark of hope and not with acceptance and resign. Or, at least, it's the way I feel it...
Thank you!
Author's Response: Nothing like some good angst to get ya going bright and early! This was hard for me to write because I never want Pam to be anything but happy, but I know season 3 was a hard time for her. Thank you so much for the review, I'm so glad you liked it!!
1 [Report This]Date: April 09, 2020 09:35 pm Title: Chapter 1
Girl, half of your one shots are long enough to count as multi chapter fics! I am excited to hear you have a multi in the works though.
Ugh. My heart. Pam, on her sofa in tears is absolutely heart wrenching image. Not to mention the drinking/spiraling out of control a little. I get that. I completely get that. Nursing heartbreak is all a little too much sometimes. Lovely imagery there.
“They all knew she missed him, she was quieter now and not as engaged as she used to be.” I LOVE this line so much for the double meaning. SO much.
“There is no present with them, no future.” It’s fine. I’m fine. This line didn’t completely destroy me or anything.
This was some solid Pam angst. A lovely, albeit heartbreaking glimpse into everything going through her mind in Season 3.
Author's Response:
I'm working on the first chapter now! I had one idea for a multi-chapter but I haven't been able to figure out some important details that are necessary to start the story, so now I'm working on something else that will hopefully be good!
I loveeee writing angst, for some reason it's so much fun for me lol, but at the same time my heart breaks. The last thing I ever want is for Pam to be upset, so to write a whole story where she's miserable made me sad, but I also had a lot of fun trying to get into her mind.
I noticed the double meaning when I wrote that as well, lol. I didn't mean for it to happen when I first wrote it and I wondered if I should keep it but I'm glad I did, I think it fits well.
Thank you so much for the review, I love see what others think about my writing!
1 [Report This]Date: April 09, 2020 08:56 pm Title: Chapter 1
Lots of angst there. Well written. One idea on multi chapter fics: as agian could tell you, they can be based on songs too.
Author's Response: That's true! Maybe I'll try to do my next song fic as a multi chapter. Thank you for reviewing, I'm glad you liked it!
1 [Report This]Date: April 09, 2020 05:57 pm Title: Chapter 1
God I’m so glad the show didn’t pull out the angst much longer. You’ve tapped into serious emotions that haven’t felt sense my first watch through of the show. Pams emotions were perfectly described and the pain she was in here brought me to tears.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm also so, so glad that the angst didn't last longer than it did. I think a lot of it was needed for Pam to realize her true feelings and to gain some confidence, but I wish she could have done that without having to go through a rocky patch with Jim lol. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing, I'm glad you liked it!