1 [Report This]Date: May 10, 2020 02:18 pm Title: Chapter 5
Flirty and saucy, what’s not to love!
I really like the way you handled Jim and Karen, it was a very unique take on their break up, and I love that they still had respect for each other, realising they both made mistakes and that it was okay.
The Jim and Pam banter is spot on, by the way
Author's Response: Thank you! And hearing you enjoyed the dialogue between Jim and Pam is the best compliment ever. I'm glad you liked my different approach to Jim and Karen's break up. I think most true adults wouldn't be yelling and screaming, do you?
1 [Report This]Date: May 09, 2020 04:05 pm Title: Chapter 4
The dialogue between Jim, Andy and Dwight was hilarious and very in character- I really enjoyed that part!
I like that there was little bit of conflict before things fell into place with Jim and Pam's relationship.
I think it was also right for Jim to end things with Karen before "moving on" with Pam. They were a couple that *mostly* tried to do the right thing by others, so this seems in character as well.
Great story! Putting this on my bookshelf!
Thanks for writing!
Author's Response: Thank you! You are too kind! And any dialogue compliments are the way to my heart. So glad you're enjoying this.
1 [Report This]Date: May 09, 2020 03:41 pm Title: Chapter 4
Oh, I loved this. The goofiness between Andy and Jim and Dwight was spot on!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm a little goofy myself, but I always fear it will put some people off. Glad you enjoyed it.
1 [Report This]Date: May 09, 2020 02:17 pm Title: Chapter 4
I'm glad Andy's on board. The impromptu duel was a funny addition, got a chuckle there.
Looking forward to seeing how Karen is handled.
Author's Response: Thank you! So glad you got a laugh! Mission accomplished :)
1 [Report This]Date: May 08, 2020 11:56 pm Title: Chapter 4
(Before the review I just wanted to say I’ve been reading this story as a guest and I have to say it’s one of my favourites)
Okay, so that bit with getting Andy out of the water was golden, I’ve always wanted to know how they managed to find him and rescue him, and you did in in such a ‘The Office’ way.
Jim and Pam on the coach is such a secretly sweet moment, and reminds me of hand holding during Fun-Run. I love how even just a small thumb rub can have such an effect.
An excellent chapter, as always
Author's Response: Thank you! And I appreciate your coming out of the shadows to offer such a wonderfully kind review. So glad you're enjoying this.
1 [Report This]Date: May 08, 2020 06:35 pm Title: Chapter 4
Pausing in my reading of this to say I LOVE the Star Wars jokes. Classic Jim to confuse Dwight like that. Even better with a sci-fi theme since I'm sure Dwight thinks himself the office paragon on such issues. Great fun. On with the rest of the chapter.
Nice to see them still being honest with each other. Also trusting each other. Pam trusting him enough to show the hurt she felt when he mentioned New York and Jim for being honest enough to tell her that's not the way his life is going now. It sets the stage nicely for the lovely banter in the rest of the chapter.
I also appreciate the fact that as much as they don't want to, they're going to wait to really start their relationship till Jim breaks it off with Karen. Yeah it's not going to be fun, but better to get that over and done with sooner rather than later.
As per usual, great job.
Author's Response: Thanks! I was going for a "Who's on First" vibe with the Jim and Dwight and Andy Star Wars stuff. Glad you enjoyed it, and as always, I appreciate all your kind words.
1 [Report This]Date: May 08, 2020 05:03 pm Title: Chapter 4
The whole exchange with Dwight and Andy at the beginning made me chuckle.
This chapter was both heavy with emotion, but full of fun. A delicate balance. I think you did a lovely job.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad it didn't seem too all over the place emotionally. It is hard to balance that. Thanks for the review.
1 [Report This]Date: May 08, 2020 04:41 pm Title: Chapter 4
Star Wars!! Loved that bit
And their phone call.... very steamy.
I can’t wait to read more. I hope things with Karen don’t get too complicated.
Author's Response: I've been a Star Wars nerd for years, so glad you liked that part. Thanks so much for the review.
1 [Report This]Date: May 08, 2020 04:17 pm Title: Chapter 4
I liked it! "his hot dogs were smashing into her buns"--too bad Michael didn't hear the narration say that, because that's what she said.
Author's Response: Lol. Some of the silliness I mentioned. I almost wrote, "his wieners," but I thought that was too much. ;)
1 [Report This]Date: May 07, 2020 01:46 pm Title: Chapter 3
Woooooohooooo! Go, Team Pam!
I've loved all of this story so far. They way you write it makes it feel like this could've easily happened.
And this:
“I could never hate you."
Sigh... perfect.
And I'm so glad SOMEONE is going to rescue Andy!
Thanks for writing!
Author's Response: Thank you! So cool you're enjoying this! And yes--Andy! I know the doc crew would try to stay out of the way of what their subjects did, but this seemed really mean to me. I think they were actually getting a kick out of it. Anyway, I thought I'd use this opportunity to help him out. I appreciate the great review. Chapter 4 is up now!
1 [Report This]Date: May 05, 2020 07:33 pm Title: Chapter 3
The sumo match was great fun. I love how you had Pam win and at the same time have them end up laying down next to each other. Makes complete sense Jim might be more than taken aback by all that.
I loved how things have changed up with this AU. To have Jim watch Pam's coal walk was a great image. As was him scooping her up and getting her into the water. His mental armor about Pam seemed to have been cracking all day, but with the coal walk and him picking her up, the armor is stripped. Which is great because he's now ready to hear her confession and we get them kissing like that.
Wonderful way to bring that all out. There's still unresolved issues of course, but like you had Pam say, she's willing to wait. Just a great job with this chapter.
Author's Response: Thank you! Yeah, when I was writing this, I really thought about how different Jim might have been with Pam without Karen there watching. I hope he would have been this way. I can't wait for you to read chapter 4--now posted :)
1 [Report This]Date: May 05, 2020 06:47 pm Title: Chapter 3
AW love this update! If only this had happened!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm so glad fanfiction exists to right some wrongs. Chapter 4 is up now!
1 [Report This]Date: May 05, 2020 05:53 pm Title: Chapter 3
What a sweet resolution. Loved the wrestling match! It’ll be interesting to read how it goes with Karen.
Author's Response: Thank you! Glad you are liking this. The next chapter is up now :)
1 [Report This]Date: May 05, 2020 03:43 pm Title: Chapter 3
Oh so sweet. I mean, yes, there are issues like there always are at that point in S3. And yet they got through them...
Author's Response: Thank you! And if you have a sweet tooth, please check out chapter 4 :)
1 [Report This]Date: May 05, 2020 03:37 pm Title: Chapter 3
That was great. I love that Jim was able to see Pam do the coal walk, it added to the impact I felt.
Looking forward to what's going on in Jim's head here.
Author's Response: I really wish he'd seen her on the coal walk too. Isn't fanfiction fun? Thanks for the review. Chapter 4 is up now!
1 [Report This]Date: May 05, 2020 03:21 pm Title: Chapter 3
This was such a lovely blend of canon moments and so much more! The fight was perfect, good on Pam for using her head, and her heart to win. Although, I think the true winner is everyone.
Author's Response: Haha. Thanks!
1 [Report This]Date: May 05, 2020 03:16 pm Title: Chapter 1
ugh the whole "Even though I came back, I felt like I never really came back" "Well I wish you would" kills me every time. Great chapter! I love how Pam won the sumo challenge lol
Author's Response: Thanks for that :)
1 [Report This]Date: May 03, 2020 11:22 am Title: Chapter 2
I'm voting for Pam!! This is great, makes me wish more and more that this is how it had actually gone down!
Author's Response: Thanks for voting! I hope you get the chance to read my next chapter to find out who wins. And yes, if I had my way, every minute of the show would be about Jim and Pam, lol, much as I love the other characters.
1 [Report This]Date: May 03, 2020 10:05 am Title: Chapter 2
Both chapters are beautiful and heartwrenching at the same time; you caught that feeling of shattered friendship so well that it hurts. I hope they'll mend the things, though.
Oh, and I'm definitely 'team Pam.' Buuut, it will be fun if something unexpected happens and the fight interrupts ;)
P.S. And I feel sorry for Karen. She didn't deserve all of these :(
Author's Response: Thank you! It is always so rewarding when my story makes a reader feel something. And thanks for voting! You'll have to read the next chapter to find out who wins :)
1 [Report This]Date: May 03, 2020 07:51 am Title: Chapter 2
You've got everyone's character just right here - I'm impressed! The sumo wrestling scene dialogue between everyone is probably my favorite part of this chapter because of the dialogue. I could picture it all perfectly in my head. I much prefer this Beach Day to the one on the show!
And Jim and Pam on the beach - what you wrote was what I hoped for in the tv series.
I'm SO GLAD Karen couldn't make it!!!
And Pam has to win this next match, knock him off feet! I'm on team Pam! (But I wouldn't mind being on team Jim either)
Author's Response: Wow! Thank you! I'm so happy when people comment on the dialogue! I appreciate your lovely feedback. And yay, Team Pam! Check out my new chapter to see who wins :)
1 [Report This]Date: May 03, 2020 12:58 am Title: Chapter 2
This chapter was so much fun!! Can’t wait to read more about the sumo match
Author's Response: Thank you! I just posted the next chapter, so you can see what happens with the match.
1 [Report This]Date: May 02, 2020 10:47 pm Title: Chapter 2
Oh Pam wins the match, no question of it. Jim's in need of a bit of a butt kicking and who better to give it to him than Pam.
Really interesting to see all of Jim's thoughts here. Clearly he's still in love with Pam. However those feelings are covered over by all the scars of Casino Night and onwards. Still it looks like there's some progress that's been made. I'm sure the sight of Pam in that biknini and Jim's ensuing thoughts did much to help that. More steps in the right direction that's for sure. Can't wait to see where we go next from here.
Author's Response: Pam eh? Good choice :) Thanks for reading and for the great review. I just posted ch. 3.
1 [Report This]Date: May 02, 2020 09:54 pm Title: Chapter 2
I’m behind on everything this week thanks to far too much screen time at work. This is delightful, both in premise and execution.
I don’t mind who wins so long as they’re both down, gazing into each other’s eyes?
Author's Response: Well, I'm so glad you took the time to read. Thanks so much. Chapter 3 is up now.
1 [Report This]Date: May 02, 2020 09:02 pm Title: Chapter 2
The sumo section was a lot of fun, I really enjoyed that. If I had to pick a winner logically it'd be Jim. If it's all for fun and furthering the plot, I'll say Pam as my final answer.
Looking forward to more!
Author's Response: Yes, logically, Jim should win...please read chapter 3 to see what happens :)
1 [Report This]Date: May 02, 2020 07:12 pm Title: Chapter 2
Pam needs to win, Jim would love to see the look of joy when she beats him at it especially if she “cheated” to win.
Author's Response: Hmmm...you'll have to read to see what happens. Thanks for voting :) Chapter 3 is up now!