Date: May 09, 2020 06:55 pm Title: The end before the beginning
A tough read, but you wrote it so well. Lots of hard things here, but so much hope in that Pam is hanging on to a bit of her self worth. I always love stories where Pam defines herself apart from the men in her life.
Thanks for writing!
Date: May 09, 2020 04:34 pm Title: The calculus of loss
I think it's moving along nicely! Looking forward to what happens next 😊
1 [Report This]Date: May 09, 2020 04:24 pm Title: The calculus of loss
Wow! This is so beautifully written, and so introspective. Everything that is going through Pam’s mind is so on point. Even her thoughts on Jim.
This is such a heartbreaking story in the best of ways. I think Pam talking to her mom is the right first move. I wonder how it will play out between Jim and Pam. Looking forward to so much more.
Many jellybeans!!!
1 [Report This]Date: May 09, 2020 03:03 pm Title: The calculus of loss
“Pam needs to get out. Not today, not tomorrow—even now it is not in her nature to be impulsive. But soon. Somehow, she’ll make her way out. Roy, Jim, Michael be damned; Fancy New Beesly refuses to be defined by only the men around her anymore.”
I love this so much. I mean, it breaks my heart how hopeless Pam feels about Jim in this moment. But, that passage is perfect. I love this fierce side of Pam refusing to let the men in her life define her any longer. This is a powerful Pam and I am here for it.
Author's Response: I'm so glad you liked that part!!! It hopefully sets up the turning point for Pam's trajectory, and I hope it wasn't too abrupt.
Date: May 09, 2020 02:57 pm Title: The calculus of loss
It has to get worse before it gets better but Pam needs this. It’s so good of you to show her breaking and hitting this bottom so that she can piece herself back together. Excellent chapter!
Author's Response: Thank you! I really wanted this to be like her art show moment--where she has to kind of be broken down to fully rise. Better things should be in sight for her.
1 [Report This]Date: May 06, 2020 07:48 am Title: The end before the beginning
You’ve captured the raw emotions so well. I’m totally hooked - please update!
1 [Report This]Date: May 04, 2020 11:04 pm Title: Heartache and a thousand natural shocks
Oh. My. God. My whole damn heart. Ugh, Michael is so unthinkably cruel without meaning to be. This is pure angst. Your writing is vivid and utterly heart wrenching. I can’t wait to see where you go next.
Author's Response: I feel like Michael really does straddle the line between unintentionally, horribly cruel and just bumbling. I hope it's not too much angst--I really want to get to fairer seas soon!
1 [Report This]Date: May 04, 2020 10:00 am Title: Heartache and a thousand natural shocks
You captured all their emotions so well! I'm a little mad at Jim myself right now too. Why should he be assuming the worst? I feel very strongly about this meaning you did a great job. Can't wait for your next update!
Author's Response: I'm really glad--thank you! Jim I feel like doesn't mean to be cruel, but can be in self-defense. I hope I can redeem him properly :)
1 [Report This]Date: May 04, 2020 08:40 am Title: Heartache and a thousand natural shocks
Yikes, the mood of the writing is on point, you're stressing me out over here friend.
Looking forward to more.
Author's Response: Hahahaha thank you! I live to stress people out :D
1 [Report This]Date: May 04, 2020 08:35 am Title: The end before the beginning
Ouch, right in the feels with that last line. The writing for this chapter was on point and really set the mood. Great work.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm really glad it felt not out of place.
1 [Report This]Date: May 04, 2020 05:16 am Title: Heartache and a thousand natural shocks
That was so powerful. This chapter left me with heartache, but it was really, really well-written.
My heart is with Pam. Oh, poor girl... I feel for her so much. And that little detail, that she flinched from Toby's touch, was especially realistic and painful.
As for Jim... I understand his motivations, but somehow it doesn't make me feel sympathy for him. Hope that will change.
I'd like to see how this situation will be resolved so much!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Hopefully I haven't made Jim too unlikable--I have a harder time with him than Pam.
1 [Report This]Date: May 03, 2020 11:47 pm Title: Heartache and a thousand natural shocks
Oh wow. This story is so intense and I absolutely love it! The way you describe the tension is amazing. Looking forward to more!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm so glad you liked the chapter.
1 [Report This]Date: May 03, 2020 10:21 pm Title: Heartache and a thousand natural shocks
Ugh. This is so crushing. Michael not knowing what to do at the end kills me.
Author's Response: I try :) Hopefully the coming chapters are enjoyable!
Date: May 03, 2020 09:31 pm Title: Heartache and a thousand natural shocks
Holy crap! And I thought the last chapter was a gut punch. To have Pam there to experience it all over, especially with Jim there! Wow! That's...intense.
I have absolutely no idea where this one is going to go from here. Yeah, just wow.
Author's Response: First Jam story, so I'm not 100% sure either. Thanks for reading!
1 [Report This]Date: May 02, 2020 08:52 pm Title: The end before the beginning
Damn. This was good. Dark, but good. That last line though? Oh god. Is there more to come? That last line makes it feel - heartbreakingly - complete...
Author's Response: Definitely more to come! Thanks so much for reading :)
1 [Report This]Date: May 02, 2020 07:06 am Title: The end before the beginning
'Years later, when Pam looks back, she knows this was the moment that she gave up on Jim Halpert.'
That line hurts so much, and yet, it's a great starting! Can't wait to see what happens next.
And I keep my fingers crossed and hope for better.
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm really excited to be writing fanfic here. I'm hoping things get better too!
1 [Report This]Date: May 02, 2020 04:56 am Title: The end before the beginning
Oh, this is fantastic. The visuals and emotions pulled me right in. I can't wait to see where you take this.
Author's Response: Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! I'm excited to follow this where it goes.
1 [Report This]Date: May 02, 2020 04:51 am Title: The end before the beginning
Woah. A lot of emotion in here. That last line is heart breaking. I'm interested to see what happens next.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I hope the next chapter doesn't disappoint.
1 [Report This]Date: May 02, 2020 04:30 am Title: The end before the beginning
Yo please don’t keep them apart in this, I know their both hurting but they really do need each other. Great first chapter and welcome to MTT. Can’t wait to read more of your work.
Author's Response: Thank you for the very warm welcome! I really do hope they'll find their way back to each other, even if it's a long and winding path.
Date: May 02, 2020 01:20 am Title: The end before the beginning
Wow, so that's one helluva start. Throw the book at Roy Pam. Guys that behave like that deserve to rot in jail for the rest of their lives.
Pam giving up on Jim though is a hard line to read. I mean I get it in the context of this story. So, the question now is how will Jim react? Very interested to find out. Great way to hook in a reader that's for sure.
Author's Response: Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!!! First review ever here, so it means a lot. Jim's reaction will come soon :)