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Very good way to get things going here. You did a great job getting into Pam's mindset. Especially since this seems like it's just after she's gotten back together with Roy. She's confused, conflicted, and still just a little lost. (I was trying to find another word there that started with C but it didn't happen)

I really liked the turn of phrase there where she realizes she's not the same person she was when she was with Roy the first time. How she's not molding herself to him now that she had a sense of who she is by herself. Great way to bring that out.

Her epiphany in the bathroom seems to be the first hint of the winds of change. Almost a kiss of wind gently blowing past her hair. Easy to miss, but I don't think she is missing this. It's still just a whisper of wind, not a full on tornado, yet it's there. That one seemingly small choice that when looked back on made all the difference. She still feels to close to that choice to understand but I get the feeling it's there.

Really looking forward to seeing where we go with this. Jim of course has his own hangups that clearly need to be addressed. A couple cracks in the wall he's put up are showing true, but there's still a lot of stong mortar holding that wall together. Still with enough time, patience, and persistance a stong wind can get into any crack and cause even the strongest bricks to crumble.

Author's Response: Thanks Warrior! I appreciate your alliteration for Pam’s jumble of emotions. 

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It hurts. It hurts so much because you totally can relate to Pam in this situation when you feel so lonely, and every you attempt to change this state feels like banging at the wall with only hurt and no other result. And watching dear Pam so broken, and Jim so cold is painful beyond measure.
And yet, I like that Pam made these baby steps. There are so much kindness and honesty in them, and they make me fall in love with Pam even more.
You know me, I'll wait as much time as you need to write the continuation.
P.S. I feel sorry that your honeymoon had these angsty moments... and I hope that they didn't last long.

Author's Response: Oh Dernhelm, thank you! Don’t worry, my honeymoon was like 99% joy, but when you’re traveling for a month with anyone there’s bound to be an argument every now & then... 

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“Can I, uh, take a different plus one?”

This was the exact moment that I knew hated Jim in this story, and it did not improve as it went on. I mean, "“What?” He doesn’t open the door, just throws a curt reply in her general direction. Is this really what they’ve become? He can’t even bear to be in the same room as her?"?? I wanted to kill him. He's such a jerk and for no good reason (we're just gonna ignore the whole heartbreak thing for now). However, I kind of love it because now I can't wait to see how you turn this all around and fix it up. I hope you update soon!!

Author's Response: Oh I love this review so very much! He’s sort of the worst version of Jim here (which is kind of fun to write...) 

God, you’re killing me Jenna. I’m reading this in the car with someone else there and I don’t wanna really start crying in front of them.

Author's Response: I’m sorry? I promise it will end well!