1 [Report This]Date: February 24, 2021 06:06 am Title: Chapter 3
Jenna -
Once again I am in love. Love with this story and what you do...
1) the way you always have Michael be the catalyst to getting them back together - it so fits how I view Michael, sure he's crass and ignorant and narcissistic and doesn't think before he acts - but at the same time he has a huge heart he just doesn't know quite how to work it sometimes. But sometimes he does. And sometimes he is wise and I see so much of his love for Pam and Jim and well your Michael so often seems to be the one who fixes them - whether knowingly or unknowingly. THANK YOU for that.
2) I love how you weave your own tales into the story- that is another thing I love of this fandom - the way every story is little bit of a way to get to know the authors who write them and why I have become so involved here. I have made friends (in a time where we've been in some ways isolated) - through reading and writing, the forums and interactivity of this place.
3) There's no complication of Jim "cheating" on Karen and the way you worked out their (K&J) ending and why he was so cold the whole time was such a perfect reveal. I mean up at the beginning I was having a little bit of hard time with Jim's attitude - even in middle of season 3 he always still seemed to be friendly with Pam - only after Roy attacked him could I understand the way you were writing him and I didn't feel like that had happened yet. I'm glad I stuck with it because the explanation worked!
4) you write so well - easy to get lost in the feelings and scenes.
Glad I finished this in time to vote on it for Dundies cause this is among my faves.
Bravo...
1 [Report This]Date: August 18, 2020 09:53 am Title: Chapter 3
I'm at a loss for words at just how perfect this was. The emotions, the writing, the sex, everything was just so beautifully done. And then Michael calling Jim's phone and Pam answering? The cherry on top.
Pam's feelings at the very end are perfect. I'm so glad you included that because it really closes the story so well after all she had been going through in the other chapters and even the beginning of this one. The constant feeling of drowning and suffocation to easy and natural and free, amazing.
Author's Response: Aly! You’re so, so very kind. Your encouragement on the chat was a big part of me having the confidence to really lean into bumping up the rating so I’m so glad you didn’t totally hate it!
1 [Report This]Date: August 16, 2020 11:52 am Title: Chapter 3
I loved it! The ending is great. Buty favorite word smithing was "She’s constructed careful barricades around her mind since she realized that Jim hadn’t returned from
Stamford alone. We’re just friends she’s been instructing her brain. His words have to push past the construction before they sink in." Lovely use of the metaphor.
Just in general, top notch all round.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I’m glad my millions of metaphors can still hit the mark from time to time!
1 [Report This]Date: August 16, 2020 11:47 am Title: Chapter 2
"She decides that not-Dwight is more of an Andy and she likes him a whole lot less for it. " I loved this line.
Overall, this chapter was a welcome one. I really enjoyed their communication finally, and I hope you continue enjoying writing this!
Author's Response: Comfect, I’m so glad you’ve reappeared (& in a flurry of reviews no less). Can we tell I’m definitely not Andy’s number one fan...
1 [Report This]Date: August 16, 2020 11:42 am Title: Chapter 1
Ouch. Like, good ouch in that it definitely hits that S3 angst pocket, but nonetheless. He's so very prickly. Bad Jim. No biscuit.
Author's Response: No biscuit indeed. He’s definitely not the most endearing version of Jim I’ve ever written... Thanks Comfect!
Date: August 14, 2020 02:58 pm Title: Chapter 3
There can never be enough season 3 fix-its...and this one is fab! You have a lovely, warm style, Jenna.
I thought you managed the tension of chapter 2 really well, and the pay-off in chapter 3 was very satisfying.
And I loved the way you had Jim all messed up and irrational with conflicting and confusing emotions too.
Really enjoyed this - thanks!
Author's Response: Thank you, Sam!
1 [Report This]Date: August 13, 2020 11:04 pm Title: Chapter 3
Watch me as I add this to my favorites so I can read it again and again!
Jenna. JENNA.
This is so good and so HOT. Wow. You just captured that angry-meets-turned-on-Jim so much. I always knew that seeing her go back to Roy pissed him off more than anything we had seen but this just brought it full circle and then to end it like that??
The hallway against the door was just so so good and the the ending...I mean, wow. 😍
And this concludes my rather incoherent review.
Author's Response: Thank you so much, bored. You’re far too kind. It’s my headcanon that Jim was absolutely furious about her going back to Roy. I really leant into his being a dick about it side here... I’m glad the ending worked considering how terrifying I find it to try and write/publish anything remotely smut related!
1 [Report This]Date: August 13, 2020 04:53 pm Title: Chapter 3
I think the moment I disliked Jim the most in canon was when he blew off Pam in the break room after Roy attacked him and gave her that condescending “oh I’m sure you’ll get back together someday” and you took that Jim and turned him up to 11. So I was very frustrated with him in the first 2 chapterS which I’m sure was your intent so good job! But having the almost-but-not-really kidnapping knock some sense into Jim and help them get over themselves was great! Good work with the steamy bits, I feel like all us writers are getting a little more comfortable with ourselves XD Please feel free to write all the S3 fix-its you want!
Author's Response: That’s exactly the Jim I was going for - that moment in the break room was totally my inspiration for Jim being a tool.
1 [Report This]Date: August 12, 2020 08:20 pm Title: Chapter 3
Girl. Welcome to the smut writers club, we are so happy to have you. Do you know why?
Because this was SO. GOOD. Oh my god! So good! I knew it would be because it’s you, obv, but, like. Are you kidding me right now? It was such a good blend of heat and seriousness and humor and also I loved that when they went out to eat Jim immediately started in with the heavy topics. I loved it. So so good!
Author's Response: BT. I so needed this today. Thank you for always being so damn encouraging.
Date: August 11, 2020 09:40 pm Title: Chapter 1
I loved this story! Especially all the metaphors. The tightness in her chest and the struggle to breathe, the blinking gas light, the adjacent doors. It added a lot the atmosphere. It was also the perfect mix of angst and fluff. Great work!
Author's Response: Thanks, JJ! I do love a metaphor... I kept feeling like I need to find new ones so I don’t repeat myself too many times in all my stories... I’m glad it worked!
1 [Report This]Date: August 11, 2020 09:59 am Title: Chapter 3
Ready for a reacap? Rewinding quickly to recall the Receptionist's most recent relationship. Quite a relief to relalize Roy was a rebound rather than a real romance. Though a real reaction given the rending of the rapport with Jim, the revisit revealed rightious revelations, even if the ride was rough.
Thank you I'll be here all week. *quickly closes the tab to theasuarus.com*
Okay so moving on. Great job bringing this all together. I did like that after the heat of the moment there on the sidewalk, they slow down and start to talk. Finally at last they can be open about everything. Though this is Pam's POV, I'm sure Jim was feeling just as intense about everything. Masterful job to bring tht out.
Had me going there for a moment. I had to go back and re-read, and yes, Jim had Pam pinned up against the outside of the door. However it's really there in that moment that they become them again as you said. Able to know with a glance what the other one is thinking. I loved how you brought that out. And of course that connection serves them well once they get inside the room too.
Great metaphor there at the end. Finally at long last she feels full and complete. They're together and that's all that matters. Wonderful works as always.
Fortes Fortuna Adiuvat.
Author's Response: Oh Warrior, you’re a hoot. I hope you didn’t spend too much time on coming up with that! Roy as a rebound rather than a real romance is so very spot on.
1 [Report This]Date: August 11, 2020 04:54 am Title: Chapter 3
I'm so excited about your update! Yay!!
The explanation for Jim being a jerk was believable and almost enough for me (he had to try harder, but since Pam forgave him... who am I to hold grudges against him?) And I liked that Pam worried about Karen, that she wanted to make things right instead of 'steal' or 'rent.' And that she compared her thoughts with her vision of pre-CN Jim... I think that was really great.
And then... Okay, it's the middle of the day here, and I read your story, and I feel like I should turn on our AC soon. Because... wow. Just wow!
'She was worried. That somehow their friendship would be lost, consumed in intensity of the love and lust burning between them. She feels more like his friend in this moment than she has in forever. It's everything.' Oh god, I love this line so much! Her worries among the overwhelming feelings were so sweet and real.
'She watches a tube of lipgloss roll away over his shoulder and honestly what's $4.95. It can be replaced.
This moment. Not so much.' Yep. Treasure moments, not things.
Okay, I had to put on pause my reading and make a couple of circles around the room before continuing, but that was fine. I'm fine. Actually, that was awesome, but I'm still feeling too shy to tell you about every moment that made me blush or say 'awww' or grin like an idiot. But, I hope, you know about my attitude toward your story even without these details :)))
And you have so much talent! Please, never stop writing, and I wish you so much inspiration and free time as you would like to have.
Thank you!
Author's Response: Thank you, Dernhelm! I love this review so very much! I get very nervous about posting smut - especially considering I haven’t written it much before. It’s so nice to hear that it worked.
1 [Report This]Date: August 07, 2020 04:03 pm Title: Chapter 2
I, for one, would be furious if you bumped up the rating.
JUST KIDDING OBVIOUSLY PLEASE DO IT OMG ARE YOU KIDDING ME RN
I did not expect the cab incident! That was thrilling, in the suspenseful thriller novel kind of way. I loved seeing protective Jim during that and then seat scuffle. And then the way they came together out in the street and Pam let her heart do what it wanted!!! So good.
Author's Response: Oh BT you make me laugh. You know I’m not the most proficient at the smuts, but I will give it a red hot go...
1 [Report This]Date: August 06, 2020 09:41 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh my gosh, my heart hurts in all the right places. I get how Pam feels almost invisible but I'm curious about Jim being such an asshole. Is he angry because she left the wedding with Roy? I guess it might be it.
"How very Michael of his" is the perfect string of words.
Beautiful chapter. I'm off to the next.
Author's Response: Thanks Kuri! I know this Jim isn’t making a whole lot of sense (& the second chapter probably doesn’t give a great deal more clarity - I promise in the third the reasoning behind his cold behavior will become a lot clearer...)
Date: August 05, 2020 03:06 pm Title: Chapter 2
This was so good. I could just feel the ice between the two of them.
Oh, and you know this crowd is all about being adventurous. ;-) Looking forward to the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks Sprinkles!
1 [Report This]Date: August 05, 2020 10:06 am Title: Chapter 2
Riveting! Absolutely Riveting! Wow! And your true stories woven into here? Totally riveting! M? YES More? YES
WOW!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for this review, Clover! More will definitely come (at some point!)
1 [Report This]Date: August 05, 2020 09:26 am Title: Chapter 2
I think I hated Jim even more in the beginning of this chapter than the last one, honestly. His angry glare at her when Not-Dwight/Andy rammed their chair into her? I'm shocked Pam had the willpower to not slap him across the face. And then the cab thing had me worried, I really thought they were two seconds away from death. But nothing like a near death experience to get your true feelings out! The ending was perfect, better than I had hoped for. Bringing back the "I can't" only to have it be Jim's fault this time was great, I'm positive that's what Pam was thinking all of season 3.
As for next chapter, I think you already know our answer for if we would be mad about a rating change. Crank it up!
Author's Response: Thanks Aly! Jim is honestly the worst version of himself in this - I hope his motivations for being such a tool are cleared up a lot in the next chapter.
1 [Report This]Date: August 05, 2020 06:16 am Title: Chapter 2
JENNA. This is an amazing story! The whole cab story had me on edge. You hear about all the horrible things that happen to people in cabs and I legitimately thought the direction of this story was going to turn. Can't wait for the next update!
Author's Response: Thanks Beth! I promise no (physical) harm will come to either Jim or Pam in this story...
1 [Report This]Date: August 05, 2020 06:09 am Title: Chapter 2
Ok so, yeah. Give me a moment here. Hoo, lots of stuff going on here. Jim's wall is back and in force. I love that Pam can see through the act he's putting on for the presentation. No, Karen wouldn't have seen it. Karen would have thought something like "he belongs here in New York, look at him go." Pam though knows the real Jim and can catch the missing spark.
Michael on speaker phone being upset that Jim's leavning out the "best stuff," was a delightful little bit of levity in a hard chapter.
Love that despite everything Jim is still protective of her. First with the seat guy and second with the shady cabbie. Almost felt like their classic banter there, but not quite.
The argument though on the sidewalk. There's the breaking point we need. Seems like those cracks in Jim's wall from last time widened due to the possible peril of a particularly putrid paid-to-order passenger car.
The wind though seems to have shifted and this time it's blowing from Jim. His anger and dissapointment that he finally lets out. But then in a absolutly great twist on an old classic comes "I can't." If anything is going to really shake the foundations of the Wall of Jim it's those two words. This new context though isn't so much a wrecking ball as a package of dynamite.
Then of course once the wind is there and blows the dust away leaving them finally open to each other. Love the trope of the argument turned make-out session. There's clearly still some rubble that needs to be dealth with.
Increasing the rating after how this chapter ended, yeah I don't think anyone's going to be mad at you.
Author's Response:
Yeah, there’s a lot going on... It’s probably a touch more dramatic than I’d usually write, but you know how it is once an idea sticks in your brain and refuses to leave...
You’re totally right about what Karen’s reaction would have been.
I can’t help myself with throwing Michael into things - even if it is a relatively serious moment. He’s so much fun to write.
That’s some very impressive alliteration there with the p’s.
There’s still a fair amount of rubble to deal with! Hopefully Jim’s wall will be a bit easier to understand after the third chapter...
1 [Report This]Date: August 05, 2020 01:07 am Title: Chapter 2
I didn't expect that from me, but most of the chapter, I wanted to punch Jim over and over again. And then a miracle occurred and I suddenly wanted to make a lot of 'awww' noises ;)
"I was drowning in the loneliness and he threw me a life preserver. I'm back on dry land now." Love this line so much! And I'm glad for Pam...
And, of course, I wouldn't be mad at you for changing the rating. In fact, I couldn't be mad at you for anything. I'll anticipate the update very much!
P. S. Yikes! Traveling could relly be unpleasant... but (even if that makes me a terrible person) I'm glad that your adventures inspired you to write these little spicy moments...
Author's Response:
I’m hoping Jim will make a lot more sense next chapter - I know he’s pretty unlikable here! I’m glad you’re not too mad at me despite this!
Traveling can be sort of unpleasant at times, but all the fun definitely balances it out very nicely in the end! I miss the idea of traveling with the way the world is at the moment...
1 [Report This]Date: August 05, 2020 12:13 am Title: Chapter 2
Keep it coming!
Author's Response: Thank you! It will (eventually!)
1 [Report This]Date: August 04, 2020 07:56 pm Title: Chapter 1
Stunning as always. I kept highlighting phrases to paste into this review as standouts, but I really think I had at least half the story highlighted. Your turn of phrase is SO good. This is so heartbreaking and then hopeful and then heartbreaking, and I love it.
Author's Response: Thanks BT! I so appreciate it!
1 [Report This]Date: August 02, 2020 03:31 pm Title: Chapter 1
Jenna you should know by now that we're all down for Season 3 fixits. The hurt that Pam is feeling and the fleeting highs she gets by seeing a sliver of the old Jim are so painful to my Jam heart, but I know you'll fix them in due time so it's ok!
I think you capture Pam's loneliness and desperation very well here, and it's especially apparent when she's considering just up and taking a bus back home or someplace else entirely at the gas station. Ouchies the feels.
I really look forward to seeing more!
Author's Response:
Thanks DG! I promise I definitely will get to the fix. Although, I suppose this isn’t the most traditional of fix-its because I’m kind of making it so much worse before I make it better...
At the very least, Pam will be grateful that she didn’t hitch a ride to who knows where by the end of this...
Date: August 02, 2020 12:36 pm Title: Chapter 1
Jenna this is so good. Your Pam is brave in the face of certain heartbreak. I can't wait to see where it goes.
Author's Response: Thanks Sprinkles! Certain heartbreak, yes. But there will be better days for her ahead...
1 [Report This]Date: August 02, 2020 12:02 pm Title: Chapter 1
Very good way to get things going here. You did a great job getting into Pam's mindset. Especially since this seems like it's just after she's gotten back together with Roy. She's confused, conflicted, and still just a little lost. (I was trying to find another word there that started with C but it didn't happen)
I really liked the turn of phrase there where she realizes she's not the same person she was when she was with Roy the first time. How she's not molding herself to him now that she had a sense of who she is by herself. Great way to bring that out.
Her epiphany in the bathroom seems to be the first hint of the winds of change. Almost a kiss of wind gently blowing past her hair. Easy to miss, but I don't think she is missing this. It's still just a whisper of wind, not a full on tornado, yet it's there. That one seemingly small choice that when looked back on made all the difference. She still feels to close to that choice to understand but I get the feeling it's there.
Really looking forward to seeing where we go with this. Jim of course has his own hangups that clearly need to be addressed. A couple cracks in the wall he's put up are showing true, but there's still a lot of stong mortar holding that wall together. Still with enough time, patience, and persistance a stong wind can get into any crack and cause even the strongest bricks to crumble.
Author's Response: Thanks Warrior! I appreciate your alliteration for Pam’s jumble of emotions.