1 [Report This]Date: January 10, 2024 09:56 am Title: Chapter 1
This is beautiful, Max.
1 [Report This]Date: March 25, 2023 03:06 pm Title: Chapter 1
Love the comparison between copper strands and Pam’s hair. Your words are so beautiful.
Author's Response:
Thank you kindly. I have written a lot on this site but this is one of the pieces where I feel I have best captured Jim's emotions - go figure in a 55 word drabble.
I'm please to know you have found it and appreciate that you let me know with a lovely review.
Welcome to MTT.
1 [Report This]Date: September 29, 2020 11:11 am Title: Chapter 1
The fact that you can break my heart with 55 words is pretty incredible. Haha well done!
Author's Response:
Thanks so much.
I took on this challenge to practice saying more with less to apply to my chapter story. Nice to see how effective a few words can be.
Thanks again.
1 [Report This]Date: September 29, 2020 05:56 am Title: Chapter 1
Holy crap. That was so good. I was so convinced this was going to have a happy ending. Boy was I wrong. You nailed this. Every line was perfect.
Author's Response:
What I was going for...
My writing is usually a lot more wordy so it's nice to know what came still come across with few words.
Thanks so so much. Really means a lot.
1 [Report This]Date: September 29, 2020 04:43 am Title: Chapter 1
So much love and heartbreak in so few words. Beautiful work!
Thank you for sharing!
Author's Response:
Thanks so very much.
Good practice for me ---learning to say more with less. Trying to infuse into my longer works.
1 [Report This]Date: September 29, 2020 12:16 am Title: Chapter 1
My heart. You told a lot of story in so few words here. Lovely writing.
Author's Response:
Thank you so very much.
I honestly can say I was inspired by the talent I am coming across as I read more and more here.
I wanted to see if I could do it.
1 [Report This]Date: September 28, 2020 10:16 pm Title: Chapter 1
As someone who shares that issue with wordiness, I love the constraints that the 55-word format puts on you - it's always way harder than you think it's going to be. (TWSS)
I think you did a really good job with conveying the hurt Jim is going through in the post-Casino Night days briefly and powerfully. "Darkness returns as daylight begins" and the way you're using the metaphor of light here is just really poetic. I liked this one!
Author's Response:
First off - TWSS - always a laugh. It's said almost every day in my household now.
More importantly, thank you.
It was a challenge for me but your praise says I can do it.
1 [Report This]Date: September 28, 2020 09:34 pm Title: Chapter 1
The back and forth with this one is just superb. Especially with how quick this is. Hope and heartache all wrapped up into one. Excellent job.
Author's Response:
Many thanks.
When praise comes from writers I admire, such as yourself, it is that much more affirming.
It was a real challenge for me but I'm glad I took it on.