Date: February 05, 2010 07:59 am Title: Chapter 3
Wow, I wish you'd finished this - it's quite timely now.
10 [Report This]Date: March 24, 2008 05:11 pm Title: Chapter 3
I really love the script format! It's so much easier to get into the story (especially when it's taking place in the office) when it's like that. Please continue!
10 [Report This]Date: July 29, 2007 02:36 am Title: Chapter 3
more!! more!!!aaahhh!!
Date: July 28, 2007 10:09 pm Title: Chapter 3
omg, I'm cracking up over that exec. spilling his guts like that. I could totally imagine even Michael being stunned by that! Can't wait for more.
Date: July 28, 2007 03:50 pm Title: Chapter 3
This is just too darn cute for words! :)
Date: July 23, 2007 01:19 pm Title: Chapter 2
OMG, you must continue this as soon as humanly possible! The characters are all so spot-on, I am getting such a kick out of reading this! Hurry, hurry! :)
Date: July 22, 2007 09:17 pm Title: Chapter 2
Damn it Jim! lol. Oh this is soooooo good. Seriously, do you have the office writers chained up in your house or something? Or are you one of them?! This dialogue is just fantastically spot-on.
Date: July 22, 2007 09:13 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow. First off, I do not usually like script-like stories for whatever reason. But this was spot-on PERFECT. Not only did you have Jim and Pam down cold, but every other character as well. Your Michael was scarrily spot-on as well as Angela. This is EXACTLY how things would go down if we ever saw a pregnant Pam and Jim. Just great. Kudos!
Date: July 22, 2007 08:57 pm Title: Chapter 2
Good so far, I can't wait to read more! I really like how you wrote it in script style, it could be a real episode from the show! The things you have the characters say to the camera are dead on as well, you've really captured their personalities. Great job!
Date: July 22, 2007 08:02 pm Title: Chapter 2
Whee! So glad to see a new chapter of this! I still love the style and you really have the voices and interactions down in the office. I especially like the Jim/Michael dynamic. Looking forward to more!
7 [Report This]Date: July 22, 2007 05:07 pm Title: Chapter 2
Meredith's take on the Baby Einstein videos was so Meredith.
7 [Report This]Date: July 22, 2007 05:04 pm Title: Chapter 1
Pam's talking head with the bumper sticker was so cute! And I love the way she keeps falling asleep.
Date: January 16, 2007 08:57 am Title: Chapter 1
aw that's the end? it was so cute. i'd love to hear more.
8 [Report This]Date: November 08, 2006 11:26 am Title: Chapter 1
I like Jim's talking head bits, but Michael seems a little OOC in relationship to Pam's 'condition'. Why is he so angry? Definitely great potential though!
8 [Report This]Date: November 07, 2006 08:53 am Title: Chapter 1
Interesting start. Can't wait to see where it goes.
10 [Report This]Date: November 07, 2006 07:22 am Title: Chapter 1
Uh oh, I have a bad feeling about this... Don't go, Jim! Can't wait for more :)
10 [Report This]Date: November 07, 2006 07:04 am Title: Chapter 1
I really love this...please continue!!
Pregnant Pam!! BY JIM!! YAY!
10 [Report This]Date: November 07, 2006 03:29 am Title: Chapter 1
You really pulled off the script format well. Love Pam's 'Baby on Board' talking head, can just see her expression - expectant Jim would be absolutely adorable. So much comic gold they could exploit on the show even with these two together - as you illustrate so well here!
9 [Report This]Date: November 07, 2006 01:53 am Title: Chapter 1
i don't normally go for script-format fics. but you've really nailed the characters, and the general feel of the show. the way the scene cuts away to a talking head, the reactions of characters ... great stuff! looking forward to reading more!
Date: November 06, 2006 10:33 pm Title: Chapter 1
Yeah I don't usually get into script like fanfics, but this is something I can get behind. I laughed out loud at Angela's reaction to Pam's pregnancy. Man you were right on target with her voice. Can't wait to read more.
10 [Report This]Date: November 06, 2006 09:54 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh, this is fantastic! I don't generally get too into script-formatted stories, but I'm loving this.
PAM: Well, he’s my husband--
That sent a jolt of joy through me.
10 [Report This]Date: November 06, 2006 09:32 pm Title: Chapter 1
Awww. So cute.
One thing- it's Michael, not Micheal. It's hard to tell sometimes, so I understand. Were I not a psycho Office freak, I wouldn't have noticed, either ;-)
Date: November 06, 2006 09:04 pm Title: Chapter 1
This is definately a story I can get behind. I'm going to reserve further judgement until it's complete, and I am very anxious to see it completed.
I would love to see a tiny bit more length, but I also enjoy restraint in authors, and I certainly wouldn't like to see you start adding unnecessary bits. You've got a good instinct, especially around your dialogue. Keep up the good work.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing! I actually cut out a whole opening sequence between Micheal and Dwight, which explains the little mistake in the story of 'Micheal and Dwight emerge from the office' somewhere in the middle there. But yeah, it was weighing it down a bit. Hopefully the other chapters will be at a more satisfying length. (TWSS!)
Again, thanks!
10 [Report This]Date: November 06, 2006 08:50 pm Title: Chapter 1
wonderful start. can't wait for more
Author's Response: Thanks so much! :)