Date: January 02, 2023 10:54 am Title: Metanoia
Feels a little disjoined because his thoughts are revolving around Pam. Because she's there, he can't quite think straight. Then in comes Roy and his thoughts become disjointed for an entirely different reason. Jim thinking Roy was a nice guy, but still and ape, shows his optimism, at least at this early stage. I'm sure that opinion will change as time goes by though.
Author's Response:
I'm glad you understand the purposeful disjointedness.
Burgeoning love can sometimes cause situational ADHD. ;)
And thanks for reviewing!
1 [Report This]Date: January 02, 2023 08:16 am Title: Metanoia
I don’t think he’ll succeed in changing his mind.
Roy, though. Wonder how he’ll react when he finds out that ape is actually her fiance.
Author's Response:
Poor ape, he means well.
Thanks for reviewing!
1 [Report This]Date: January 02, 2023 08:13 am Title: Drapetomania
Does he really want to run away, though?
"Seriously? You mean there's more of you?" - this cracked me up. Prepare to be disappointed, Meredith.
Date: January 02, 2023 08:09 am Title: Koi No Yokan
Koi no yokan indeed.
Love seeing the thought processes here. Can’t wait ti to read more!
1 [Report This]Date: December 30, 2022 10:24 am Title: Metanoia
"Jim, are you ready to go on an unforgettable journey of self-discovery?" I would really love to see the Jim-Dwight version of The Initiation. Feels like he would've had more fun with it than Ryan did.
"Never met a girl who gave me ulcers before." That's how you know it's real, Jim.
"He's an ape. A nice ape, but an ape." That's Roy all right.
Ah, and just like that, years of patterns are formed!
Author's Response:
Your wish is my command. Jim-Dwight Initiation, it is. I just hope I can make it Dwight-y enough, ha!
And poor Roy. He is who he is. Not a bad guy, just . . . Roy.
Thanks for reviewing!
1 [Report This]Date: December 30, 2022 05:37 am Title: Metanoia
Really really liked this! You can feel Jim’s torment coming through when he finds out about Roy. And omg, calling Roy an Ape? GENIUS
Author's Response:
Wow, thank you so much!
1 [Report This]Date: December 29, 2022 06:15 pm Title: Drapetomania
Okay, there's a lot of fun stuff here, but both Oscar and Meredith immediately hitting on Jim (and maybe Phyllis too, in her own subtler way) is my favorite.
Author's Response:
Well, who can blame them of course, right?
And I'm glad you caught that about Oscar. You know he couldn't help himself but I was wondering if had presented it too subtly.
Date: December 28, 2022 04:59 pm Title: Drapetomania
Very interesting getting into his head as he meets everyone. Yet at the same time Pam is always kind of there in his mind. Like he's looking for her as a way to stay sane in what he's discovering is a pretty crazy office. Nice touch with that.
Author's Response: Exactly, you nailed it. And thank you!
1 [Report This]Date: December 24, 2022 12:56 am Title: Drapetomania
I really love your style of writing! This was a great chapter - you nailed every character. Made me smile a lot!
Author's Response: Thank you so much for giving it a try. I know it's different. :D
1 [Report This]Date: December 17, 2022 09:23 am Title: Koi No Yokan
Hey, you're back!
This is a very good first impression of Dwight, both creative and canonical. And you can practically hear the trumpets playing in Jim's head as he realizes she's pranky.
I've always loved the phrase koi no yokan, and the comparison to mental condition feels... accurate to the feeling.
Author's Response:
Thank you so much! And thank *you* for coming back!
I'd never heard of it before it popped up on my Pinterest feed. You're way ahead of me. :)
Author's Response:
Thank you so much! And thank *you* for coming back!
I'd never heard of it before it popped up on my Pinterest feed. You're way ahead of me. :)
1 [Report This]Date: December 16, 2022 09:01 pm Title: Koi No Yokan
Awww, look at Jim already falling for Pam. Loved it. Also loved that Pam is pranking Dwight prior to Jim showing up. Makes sense when you think about it for sure. She would know that Dwight is intense based on her warning and so yeah why not try to take Dwight down a couple pegs.
Also I really liked it that Ed Truck is still in charge here. Not something we see very often so that's fun.
Author's Response:
I actually had to work backward on the math and realize some of the dynamics would be different. Imagine having a "normal" boss in the office.
*Becomes confused*
Anyway, thank you!
1 [Report This]Date: December 16, 2022 02:26 pm Title: Koi No Yokan
Looking forward to seeing where this one goes!
Author's Response:
Hopefully to a lot of interesting places.
Thank you for your time! :D