Date: August 27, 2014 08:51 pm Title: Chapter 1
This story is absolute perfection. Like...holy mother of God.
Date: November 14, 2006 11:56 am Title: Chapter 1
Very intense.
Date: November 14, 2006 09:33 am Title: Chapter 1
I remember this, I think. It's so lovely. And this:
He nods. “Okay.”
There isn’t any sadness in the word though. It comes out flat and he’s still focusing on something in front of him.
It's what really happened, isn't it? It gave me shivers when I read it just now, because I can see it. Love this all so much.
Date: November 13, 2006 06:30 pm Title: Chapter 1
Unfold! One of my favorites - just gorgeous. I especially love their hours on the playground - such truth there. Love your spare language and imagery. I remember the first time I read this, I cheered at this:
And she does. She tells him all of this even though the trembling in her voice conquers her words in some places and they come out as tears or fragments.
Date: November 13, 2006 06:16 am Title: Chapter 1
This was so beautiful. It made me cry more than once. I love the ending, and this also was one of my favorite parts:
(He would tell her, if the words would come, that he liked feeling her body against his in that moment. Because the inward curve of her hips matched his own contours perfectly. And he had always liked the idea of people being jigsaw puzzle pieces. He liked being put together. He liked the idea of filling in someone’s missing parts and them filling in yours. He liked feeling filled in for once.)
Beautiful work!
Date: November 12, 2006 10:11 pm Title: Chapter 1
This story is beautifully written. I loved it.
Date: November 12, 2006 10:04 pm Title: Chapter 1
I love it. I really do. It's fantastic. YAY you! ;)
Date: November 12, 2006 08:37 pm Title: Chapter 1
I don't know what it was about this story, but it had this beautiful build up that literally had me tearing up the whole story then finally actually crying a little at the end. Amazing.
Date: November 12, 2006 02:41 pm Title: Chapter 1
I loved this the first time, and I appreciate it even more now. Thanks for bringing it over here where I can add it to my favourites and read it over and over.
Date: November 12, 2006 12:11 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was so moving. I'm glad you brought this over. Wonderful!
Date: November 12, 2006 10:38 am Title: Chapter 1
Absolutely GORGEOUS. I love your style and can't wait to read more from you. The imagery is spectacular and you've got the tone and voice nailed. Flawless.