10 [Report This]Date: November 21, 2006 06:00 pm Title: Chapter 1
Ouch, my heart hurts for Karen. Loved the way you wrote this--seemed true to life and the characters. The details that you included were written beautifully. And I think you really got Karen down, from what we know of her. Loved getting a story from her POV, too.
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it, yippee. I stressed writing Karen, but it seems to have worked.
Date: November 21, 2006 05:48 pm Title: Chapter 1
"Jim and Pam going at it on the couch next to reception"
YO! Where's this story?
Author's Response: Hah - oh god, if I only had the gumption to pull off a hot sex on the couch scene. Sadly, I don't think I'm equipped. Maybe I'll give it a whirl...
10 [Report This]Date: November 21, 2006 05:28 pm Title: Chapter 1
The last part was the best part. I would die of happiness if this is how they got together. You are very talented.
Author's Response: You and me, both, diddly day. Thank you so much!
10 [Report This]Date: November 21, 2006 05:27 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow, that was such a spot-on characterization of Karen. I think this could totally happen on the show; something will start to click for her about Jim's past, and she will slowly let go. I don't get a sense that she would foolishly fight it.
I loved this: always her fingers between his index finger and thumb, her thumb circling around his. It feels like a thick barrier, suddenly, and when she tries to tangle her fingers with his, he pulls his hand away and places it on the small of her back, instead. She hopes she's just making something out of nothing, but deep down, she places it in the same file with his never having been inside her apartment and his being adamant about people at work not knowing they were dating - it's just another brick in the wall around him.
Well done! :)
Author's Response: I hope she doesn't fight it, she'll come out of it easier, I think. Thanks for reviewing, Morning Angel.
10 [Report This]Date: November 21, 2006 05:17 pm Title: Chapter 1
I'm glad and sad that everyone is writing Karen out of Scranton. She's pretty but she's lethal. Hopefully it pans out!
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing, italian leather sofa. Sad thing is, I really kind of like her. I'd be ok with her staying around... just not with Jim. I'm all about the JAM.
8 [Report This]Date: November 21, 2006 05:07 pm Title: Chapter 1
Oh, man, the date at Cuggino's was painfully realistic. I think you've got a great handle on Karen - you should write more of her!
Author's Response: I honestly hope she's not around long enough for me to have to write more of her - not in a Jim romance senario, anyway. Thanks, nomadshan.
10 [Report This]Date: November 21, 2006 05:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was really terrific. I think you captured Karen (or at least as I imagine her) - she has so much on the ball and really feels something for Jim, but...she's just not the one. I like how we see Jim's reticence with her and his reconnection with Pam through Karen's eyes...the subtlety of the intertwining fingers. And her different phases of wanting to/realizing she can't make him happy and vice versa. And that she bows out gracefully. Well done!
Author's Response:
I'm glad you felt the subtlety with the Jim/Pam hands thing, I was worried that that wouldn't read as vivid as it was in my head. Thanks for reviewing, Colette.
10 [Report This]Date: November 21, 2006 04:59 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was EXACTLY how I'd like things to go. Exactly. It's all the reasons why I don't hate Karen and never could, and why I don't see her as a "threat" to Jim and Pam. I don't know much about her character yet, but you somehow managed to write her really well. She was sympathetic and real. I loved the last line of each part as she gradually came to see the truth. You made me feel sorry for everyone involved, and not be angry or disappointed with any of them. Excellent!
Author's Response:
I'm selfish (for Pam), but I really don't want to know that Jim has done anything except maybe kiss someone else, a lil. That's ok.. right?
Thanks for the thoughtful review, m.
Date: November 21, 2006 04:54 pm Title: Chapter 1
I literally whispered "That was perfect" out loud when I was done. Now that? Says something.
Everyone was so wonderfully in character. And I loved how she discovered Jim's secret. Incredible. I admit I was a bit shocked at her thought that Jim wasn't as nice to everyone as she thought ... Then I read the following line and it clicked and I loved it.
Wonderful.
Author's Response: I'm glad you felt that everyone is in character, that is SO important to me. Thanks Meghan.