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Reviewer: NeverEnoughJam Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: November 22, 2006 01:51 pm Title: Thanksgiving IV

I didn't figure out that the first sentence was a metaphor until I'd read it several times. Interesting that he goes to Thanksgiving dinner at Kelly's, at the same time he can't figure out how to separate from her. Ryan = conflicted. Well done.


Author's Response: Ryan just sort of goes along to get along and when his big plan to break free falls to hell, my guess is he'd throw up his hands and let Kelly call the shots again. Sort of, in her own Kelly way. Thanks neverenoughjam!

Reviewer: NeverEnoughJam Signed [Report This]
Date: November 22, 2006 01:49 pm Title: Thanksgiving II

Oh, Roy. You deserve better than this loneliness.


Author's Response: Oh, is this why your wrote "Alarms"? Always trying to take care of Roy aren't you! Just give him Karen and let's move along. Hee!

Reviewer: NeverEnoughJam Signed [Report This]
Date: November 22, 2006 01:48 pm Title: Thanksgiving

OMG. Poor Toby. *sniff*


Author's Response: Poor Toby, indeed. Let's get that man a girl ASAP! I was in a melancholy mood, what can I say...

Reviewer: lano Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: November 22, 2006 01:42 pm Title: 9 Dates

"she had agreed to a second date, and she understood the intricacies of his relationship with Jan"  -  Holy crap, this was perfect, perfect, perfect.  They all are, but this.. damn.

Author's Response: Thanks Lano! Poor sad, lonely Michael. So close to love and yet....not.

Reviewer: pennylane83 Signed 7 [Report This]
Date: November 22, 2006 01:25 pm Title: Thanksgiving III

Oh I was so hoping you'd do a Creed one.

He wondered idly if his brother was still alive.

Ha, except I hope it's one of those things where Creed never even HAD a brother. You're totally making my day, I hope you know that.



Author's Response: Either way, do you really trust Creed's memory?! Maybe he did, maybe not. In any case, glad I could make your day despite the fact that these aren't very upbeat. Thanks pennylane!

Reviewer: Penguin_jammies Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: November 22, 2006 01:12 pm Title: Thanksgiving IV

I love all of these, but your Toby absolutely breaks my heart. 

And that's a good thing. :)

Well done.  I can't wait for more.



Author's Response: Thanks jammies! Toby is a heartbreaker and I love writing him. One of these days his story will have a happier ending!

Reviewer: Colette Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: November 22, 2006 01:09 pm Title: Thanksgiving IV

Poor Ryan, just along for the ride...NOT. He's definitely got an itch that Kelly scratches, no matter how disinterested he claims to be. After all, he hopes her Dad likes pie.

Not that he didn’t like her, but he couldn’t remember ever making a conscious choice to be with her. Yup, that's it. Only by not walking away, he has chosen, silly boy.

BTW: Love your disclaimer. I can SO relate.



Author's Response: I'm flashing back to a Rush song "If you choose not to decide, you still have made a choice". Bingo! And I kept thinking about Diwali, when he made his job sound better than it was. Not sure if his motivation was to impress dad or show he was good enough for Kelly or just to not seem like a loser, but I thought that translated well to pie! Thanks for reviewing all of these. I didn't mean to troll for 7 reviews but they are separate little "vignettes" to steal a term from you! I think the disclaimer says it all!

Reviewer: Colette Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: November 22, 2006 01:04 pm Title: Thanksgiving III

Very Creed. The lines about his brother are sad and creepy all at once...you've nailed how disaffected he is. I don't know if I want to laugh or cry or just shake my head and say, what the hell?

Author's Response: He may be disaffected, but somehow he remembers where to find the free food. A man after my own heart!

Reviewer: Colette Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: November 22, 2006 01:02 pm Title: Thanksgiving II

Kind of feel bad for Roy here...but, what can I say, I'm a cold hearted hussy. It's nice, however, to catch a glimpse here of the discomfort the break up has caused for him too. Now just keep him clear of Pam, please!

Author's Response: Don't worry, Colette, I think Pam is having Thanksgiving in another state. C'mon - you know I like Roy just as much as you do! I love the thought of all his relatives asking, "Where's Pam? What happened? Where's the wedding gift I sent, jerk?!"

Reviewer: Paper Jam Signed [Report This]
Date: November 22, 2006 11:59 am Title: Thanksgiving IV

This is really, really great. I especially love delusional Michael (tenth date! Ha!) and no-nonsense Creed.

Author's Response: Thanks Paper Jam! You like both ends of the spectrum, eh? Michael, the eternal optimist, and Creed the realist!

Reviewer: pennylane83 Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: November 22, 2006 09:56 am Title: Thanksgiving

I love how you succinctly capture the loneliness in Toby's life. The pot pie? Uh, pretty much kills me. Damn these people and their supposedly being in a comedy and yet they completely break my heart! Great job Par5, keep 'em comin! :)



Author's Response: But pennylane, it's a turkey pot pie so it's okay! Hee. I know what you mean - some of the writers clearly did not get the memo when they were hired that this is indeed a comedy! Ah, Toby. So sad.

Reviewer: xoxoxo Signed [Report This]
Date: November 22, 2006 09:35 am Title: 9 Dates

Separately or together I just love them all. 

Even if they make me sad with the loneliness. :(



Author's Response:

Maybe I'm feeling a little melancholy about the holiday. Or being at work when the office is so empty. Or the fact that we have to wait another week for a new episode.

In any case, thanks so much for your kind words xoxoxo! Makes it hard for me to nag you about NaNo... 

Reviewer: Colette Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: November 22, 2006 09:20 am Title: Thanksgiving

Love Toby. Love him here. His loneliness really comes through - the empty seat, the pot pie.

It would be the sweetest thing if he had someone...hey, I hear Karen might be available soon (wishful thinking?) Well done, as usual. And I admire how economical with words you are...not my forte, that's for sure!



Author's Response:

I know you love Toby - knew you'd be a sucker for lonely Toby! As am I. We do need to get him a date and an exotic looker like Karen might be just the ticket! I like being limited to 100 words - it's like you've said before about knowing when a fic is just DONE. A deadline or a word limit -either way works! My feeling is that you always use just the exact right amount of words.

Reviewer: Colette Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: November 22, 2006 09:16 am Title: Hell

He watched as the taillights disappeared from view. That sentence made me tear up. Just sums so much up about Jim and Pam's relationship. So heartache inducing.

I love how none of his 'options' are right - because there's only one that's going to work...hear that G. Daniels!?! I so hope he'll tell Karen soon - thank you for helping me imagine he won't waste another minute.



Author's Response: The taillights are the period on the conversation. Over, done, what are you gonna do now, Halpert? We know!

Reviewer: Colette Signed [Report This]
Date: November 22, 2006 09:08 am Title: Pieces

And whose going to supply the glue?? I think we know the answer to that. I already feel Pam's pain... but, imagining her in this scenario just crystallizes it beautifully. So glad she's feeling fancy enough not to go backwards...now if only Jim could stop hurtling forward enough to notice! Loved this one. Lots.

Author's Response: Aha! The answer to that takes much more than 100 words, but then again, as you said, we already know who it will be. Really. We do. And he WILL take notice. Thanks my dear!

Reviewer: Colette Signed [Report This]
Date: November 22, 2006 09:04 am Title: 9 Dates

Aw. It's that pathos in Michael - which is so present here - that makes him so empathetic, not just a buffoon. All that in under 100 words...like magic.

Author's Response: Totally agreed, Colette. He's so tragic in his overwhelming need to be loved. The buffoonery is just a symptom of the disease, so to speak!

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: November 22, 2006 08:55 am Title: Thanksgiving

omg, that is heart-wrenching!  


Author's Response: I can't help it lisahoo! Toby, man, he just breaks my heart!

Reviewer: agd300 Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: November 22, 2006 08:50 am Title: Thanksgiving

Wow... these little drabbles are great!  Keep it up!

Author's Response: Thanks agd300! But I have to take a break to read your latest chapter now!

Reviewer: pennylane83 Signed 10 [Report This]
Date: November 22, 2006 08:38 am Title: 9 Dates

Oh Michael. Just go ahead an break my heart why don't you. I didn't know whether to laugh or cry and this one, which I guess means you got the characterization down pretty well! Write more of these!!

Author's Response: Okay! I started to write a longer fic about the 9 dates but it's so much easier to do 100 words and Michael makes me just as sad. Thanks pennylane ;)

Reviewer: lisahoo Signed [Report This]
Date: November 22, 2006 08:30 am Title: Hell

Yes!  Tell her, Jim!  Tell her!  Then tell Pam!  (After she tells you she loves you ~~ it's fantasy land after all!)

If you want to do something other than work, Par5, I will certainly encourage you!



Author's Response: Thanks lisahoo! Unfortunately, I don't need much encouragement to slack off today. These are dark - might need some sunny ones to offset them. (tell Pam!?)

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