Date: April 04, 2008 02:12 pm Title: Chapter 2
You are fantastic. These lines: In her head she had let him do the singing, let him do the asking; Besides, she suspects that Jim's prank has backfired a bit, as Andy has been telling anyone who will listen how well things are going with Pam and who is she to get in between a love match like that?; and She finds if she squints hard enough she can pretend it is a skyscraper flickering in the distance, as if it is getting ready to turn off its lights for the night and go to sleep beside her were heartbreaking. Especially the last one -- what a perfect metaphor for Jim.
Author's Response: You are too much! Thank you!! I really appreciate that you pulled out the individual lines that affected you. It is always fascinating to see what the reader responds to. That last line I wrote is, I think, my favorite line of anything I've written. It evokes such a sad image in my mind, like this dull weight, and I really think that feeling is what makes me feel for Karen through season 3. I'm glad to hear it did the same for you. Thank you so much for the review! I really appreciate it.
Date: April 22, 2007 05:15 pm Title: Chapter 2
Excellent. I love the background you've given Karen- the traveling, the smoking, the desire for friends, all of it.
Author's Response: Thank you so much!! For some reason I just really identify with Karen and I want to make her more real. I'm glad you felt I succeeded! Thanks for the review.
Author's Response: Thank you so much!! For some reason I just really identify with Karen and I want to make her more real. I'm glad you felt I succeeded! Thanks for the review.
10 [Report This]Date: February 20, 2007 08:03 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow this is deep. I think I read it before, or just skimmed it or something, but every little thing about this isolated, slightly dark Karen seems to ring true. Your writing style is almost tactile, if that makes any sense at all, like it's touching the mood with its fingers.
Looking at that comment now, it would appear that I am high.
Author's Response: Thanks. I was really frustrated when we weren't getting any information on Karen and I needed to flesh her out, make her more real. To me, that for Karen was a little dark. I did once read somewhere that fanfic is better under the influence so well played. My tactile writing style thanks you.
10 [Report This]Date: December 07, 2006 11:45 am Title: Chapter 2
This is really, really fascinating. The comment about Jim being less "angular" at Scranton is another one of those brilliant ones - so true, and on so many levels.
I really hope you're continuing this....?
Author's Response: Thanks! I definitely plan on continuing but I'm a little stuck because I have too many directions I want to go in? I am trying to figure out which one feels right for this Karen. I might use some of the others for one shots. When I started I really wanted to use it as a supplement to provide a Karen perspective from week to week but when there aren't episodes I get worried about writing something that will become too far from future developments.
10 [Report This]Date: December 07, 2006 11:39 am Title: Chapter 1
I really like this, Treble - you've really created a voice for her here (wish the writers would follow your lead). I laughed about her learning not to ever whisper to Ryan (and how she makes it up to him), and I also thought the line about her friendships being "of the cherry stained and high pitched variety" was one amazing; I immediately knew exactly the kind of girl you were referencing there.
Great work - and by the way, it's amazing that this is your first fic!
Author's Response: Thanks. That really means a lot to me!
10 [Report This]Date: December 04, 2006 06:57 pm Title: Chapter 1
Very impressive for you to tackle Karen for your first fic since we really don't know that much about her. This was so very well done - this was such an insightful line - "She wonders if she will stay here and stay the same or whether she will stay here and slowly begin to take on parts of a shadow Scranton persona, slowly adopting little things to make the big differences less noticeable"
Author's Response: Thanks!! I think writing Karen was less threatening to me because we don't know that much about her. We have glimpses of her personality but nothing of her character. With Jim and Pam we all have such a strong notion of who they are and what they want that it was way too intimidating for me to try to start with that and live up to it authentically.
10 [Report This]Date: December 04, 2006 04:31 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow! This is your first fan fic? Stunning characterization of Karen. The subtle subtext from Pam was just perfect. I really think you could do an excellent job exploring the dynamic between these two women. I really enjoyed this!
Author's Response: Thanks! I was really nervous putting it up but since it was received well I think I will move ahead on this in the future. Thanks to you and everyone! :)
10 [Report This]Date: December 04, 2006 01:18 pm Title: Chapter 1
I hope you will continue this as a series (although, I have to admit, I hope Karen doesn't hang around too much longer - I like her, just not as a triangular wedge!). Really interesting insights into her and her perceptions of Pam, Jim, etc. She's still so sketchy on the show, that it's nice to be able to 'read' her a bit more and this definitely helps flesh her out.
Author's Response: I really love Jim and Pam, to the point where I have completely driven my friends crazy. One of the things I love about the Office is its ability to draw its characters so realistically, to have them do things we hate yet still be forced to recognize that they are things the characters WOULD do. I felt like so far Karen has really been set up as Jim's love interest and I wanted her to be more of a complete person. Somehow as long as she isn't a completed character the whole situation makes me uncomfortable, either because its too easy for the writers to discard her as a casualty in the JAM force, or because they still have the freedom to write her in a way that could alter the line of the story as we have seen it so far. I think I would feel better if I could really get my mind around Karen as her own person, who may be compatible or incompatible with Jim for reasons completely separate from Jam. I guess its like getting into the mind of the enemy?
10 [Report This]Date: December 04, 2006 11:07 am Title: Chapter 1
This is an excellent Karen fic -- we don't get that much of her on the show, and you've done a really good job of fleshing her out.
Author's Response: Thanks so much!
7 [Report This]Date: December 04, 2006 11:00 am Title: Chapter 1
I like the fact that you took Karen's POV in this one. Good first fic!
Author's Response: Thank you :)
9 [Report This]Date: December 04, 2006 10:26 am Title: Chapter 1
Good story. Very good observations of Karen, Pam, and Jim.
7 [Report This]Date: December 04, 2006 09:08 am Title: Chapter 1
I really enjoyed reading this--loved getting Karen's POV on the Scranton bunch, and you wrote her thoughts in a way that feels right for her character (what we know of her anyway) and in a way that is very relatable.
One little thing-you're missing the apostrophes in the "It's" in the first & last sentences.
Author's Response: Thanks!
10 [Report This]Date: December 04, 2006 01:04 am Title: Chapter 1
Ooh, I liked this. I hope you plan on continuing it! Great job on your first fic!