10 [Report This]Date: August 30, 2007 05:22 pm Title: Chapter 1
So you wrote this over a year ago, but I've just found it and I love it and you made me almost cry, right there at the end.
10 [Report This]Date: December 16, 2006 01:39 am Title: Chapter 1
She wasn’t beautiful right at the start, but she reminded me of something I couldn’t name.
Beautiful line.
Her face was all wonderment and vulnerability and I felt this strong inclination to keep her safe then.
What a lovely portrait of Pam. So true.
when she laughed with a big chunk of orange ice in her mouth, it sounded like my childhood
Very good. [/Jim]
ifI wasn’t in love with her then, it was only because I had no idea that was the name of what I was feeling
Poor shy, clueless Jim.
What a lovely piece. I am saving it. I love that you used Jim's voice. He says things to us he would never say even to Pam. It's a unique point of view; I don't know why more writers haven't used it. You've made it your own. Well done. Thank you.
10 [Report This]Date: December 13, 2006 07:39 pm Title: Chapter 1
I honestly don't see how you do it. Each and every thing that you write is stunning. The prose is gorgeous, and each word is perfect....just breath-taking.
10 [Report This]Date: December 13, 2006 04:01 pm Title: Chapter 1
This was just beautiful. I've always loved how seasons could represent different things to different people, so I love how you tuned them to Jim's growing feelings for Pam.
10 [Report This]Date: December 13, 2006 12:45 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow, I absolutely loved reading this. Loved the weather theme and how Jim noticed extremes. But what I really loved about this story was this sense of innocence in Jim's love for Pam. How he didn't "know" he loved her. This was just beautiful from start to finish.
Date: December 13, 2006 10:44 am Title: Chapter 1
I love everything you write - and this of course did not disappoint.
It's like watching a home movie...all these snippets of time. I love imagining them like this...
10 [Report This]Date: December 13, 2006 07:33 am Title: Chapter 1
I reviewed it where it was posted up at LJ too, because MTT was down for a while, and someone linked the LJ link at TWoP... but anyway, I just wanted to say again that this story is so beautiful. I love the first-person POV from Jim's POV- I think that makes it even more intense and real. It feels like the truest of love by the end of the story, and I love seeing Pam through Jim's eyes. The last line, even though it's so simple, when coming at the end of the rest of the story is really powerful and it brought tears to my eyes.
9 [Report This]Date: December 13, 2006 04:01 am Title: Chapter 1
This was so completely beautiful. I love the progression, and it's very believable that he didn't love her right away, but later would think maybe he did. I think this is my absolute favorite line:
That moment with her smile and our house was the closest I’d ever been to love and if I wasn’t in love with her then, it was only because I had no idea that was the name of what I was feeling.
Date: December 13, 2006 12:51 am Title: Chapter 1
I came here to post a weather fic (sort of) and found this. It's uncanny. Huh.
Anyway, beautiful work, as always, especially: pigeon toed, grass honking, the popsicle house and sledding.
10 [Report This]Date: December 12, 2006 10:19 pm Title: Chapter 1
Okay, wow.
First, I love how he is so true - he doesn't try to cover the fact that she wasn't beautiful right at the beginning because no one ever is. I love how as he comes to love her, her beauty starts to transform for him and it's all so wonderful and beautiful. And the yellow leaves! And the progression and the heat and the bun and I love it.
10 [Report This]Date: December 12, 2006 10:02 pm Title: Chapter 1
this is just really, really great. I love the rhythm and flow of this. I love the style. And it's adorable.
9 [Report This]Date: December 12, 2006 09:50 pm Title: Chapter 1
I don't have anything to say other than I smiled the entire time when I was reading this. :-)
Great Job.